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Hush 06-29-2015 11:34 AM

Wanderer 4-5 vs Lotto Smirk 4-2 - {Lotto Smirk wins}
 
Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:
  • Verses are due Thursday, July 2nd 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
  • Battles that lack votes may close later.
  • One sided battles may get closed early.
  • Extensions are 24 hours


Line Limit:
  • Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
  • If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!

@Wanderer @Lotto Smirk

Wanderer 07-03-2015 03:25 PM

With every line you loose, bitch you ain't fit to shine my shoes
these thick girls gimme wood when on top o'me.. no chick's ever Pined over you
Girls hit up my crib & it's hearts for stars when wanderer slay
If I'm seeing chicks round Lot's they just park their cars and walk away
You're boring & lame. Believing you stun is a crime
ya style ain't really newbie, you just get mistaken for one all the time
I'll beach yo ass. if we fought shit could get crucial with the hands, stop
Im a big dog in this yard, you'll see when I put you in the Sandlot
When the pressures on you choke so imm'a just squeeze gats
kinda like Rooney at international level, ya gonna do nothing except receive caps

Lotto Smirk 07-03-2015 03:34 PM

wanderer
ya past ya prime, waste of my time see me I'm on a spree g
your just an elder wand, n you'll need the magic powers it contains just to beat me
Quote:

Originally Posted by Hush (Post 499435)
@Wanderer

Are you interested in being part of a writing crew who's sole purpose is to help each other improve, elevate, and take constructive criticism?

so flee b, cus u need a crew to improve cus mutha Fucka u ain't frightening
only be dope if you turned to hush... n did exactly that n shut up n give up writing
you ain't never getting girls fam, ya skills not showing as of late
cus wanders off.. ironic bitches also do this silently strolling away from you on dates
m.sho, muff, hush cred n greed are dope I can't argue with that fact
so you joined together for suicide.. I hope your the first to go n then the rest bitch out the pact
I'm back, hitting certain spots that hurt, but like u urs are very poor
my personal account is on point... while ur lucky if you even have a dollar when it comes to yours

sral 07-05-2015 06:07 AM

LOL Wanderer with the Rooney line that will prob go over a lot of heads but that's dope.

Pined and round Lots were cool, sandlot not so much as you had the round lots ish previous to it and the one play off it was enough IMO.

Solid verse, not sure how many will get the closer but I liked it. Only one I wasn't so keen on was "newbie/new, b" tbc


LOTTO: I thought the turned to Hush line was nice, wanders off was okay, but that suicide pact shit was line of the battle to me haha!

I think it was fairly close this one, but honestly, I give the edge to Lotto... slightly. Tight battle!

Sharp 07-05-2015 11:24 AM

With every line you loose, bitch you ain't fit to shine my shoes
these thick girls gimme wood when on top o'me.. no chick's ever Pined over you
stuff like this has been done but I like the wording
Girls hit up my crib & it's hearts for stars when wanderer slay
If I'm seeing chicks round Lot's they just park their cars and walk away
ok
You're boring & lame. Believing you stun is a crime
ya style ain't really newbie, you just get mistaken for one all the time
cool but gets done
I'll beach yo ass. if we fought shit could get crucial with the hands, stop
Im a big dog in this yard, you'll see when I put you in the Sandlot
Muff to thread lol... cool delivery but idea gets done a lot
When the pressures on you choke so imm'a just squeeze gats
kinda like Rooney at international level, ya gonna do nothing except receive caps
I wouldn't get this if my friends weren't big premier league fans but this is cool


ya past ya prime, waste of my time see me I'm on a spree g
your just an elder wand, n you'll need the magic powers it contains just to beat me
wand has been done a bit lately but elder adds another layer to it. feel like this coulda been harder cause you're calling him past his prime while he's still newish
so flee b, cus u need a crew to improve cus mutha Fucka u ain't frightening
only be dope if you turned to hush... n did exactly that n shut up n give up writing
seen stuff like this but you get points for being personal
you ain't never getting girls fam, ya skills not showing as of late
cus wanders off.. ironic bitches also do this silently strolling away from you on dates
I think this was a cool idea but the delivery got a little wordy
m.sho, muff, hush cred n greed are dope I can't argue with that fact
so you joined together for suicide.. I hope your the first to go n then the rest bitch out the pact
this is hard bro
I'm back, hitting certain spots that hurt, but like u urs are very poor
my personal account is on point... while ur lucky if you even have a dollar when it comes to yours
nice


nice battle guys. no big misses from anyone and its close as shit imo. damn lotto's last 2 bars were cool

if I go quotes I got

newbie, rooney

v

suicide, personal account

with each guy having a kinda done line (sandlot and hush) and a nameflip that hit just wasn't big (lots and elder wand)

fuck iunno it'll probably happen where the vets will see a bar and go THATS PLAYED and give the other person the dub

But I think lotto had the edge because I prefer when verses get personal. That Rooney line from wanderer was creative as fuck but I think lotto's verse was a lil better. could see it go either way with preference, so props for making me think about this one guys.

v/lotto

fraze 07-05-2015 03:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer (Post 500133)
With every line you loose, bitch you ain't fit to shine my shoes
these thick girls gimme wood when on top o'me.. no chick's ever Pined over you
smooth flow but the wording is off to me. why not something like 'no chick wood pine over you'
Girls hit up my crib & it's hearts for stars when wanderer slay
If I'm seeing chicks round Lot's they just park their cars and walk away
Cool concept but I think this could have been harsher.
You're boring & lame. Believing you stun is a crime
ya style ain't really newbie, you just get mistaken for one all the time
didn't like the word choice, if the flip is on new you could have used fresh instead of stun for a better tie in
I'll beach yo ass. if we fought shit could get crucial with the hands, stop
Im a big dog in this yard, you'll see when I put you in the Sandlot
this was nice to me
When the pressures on you choke so imm'a just squeeze gats
kinda like Rooney at international level, ya gonna do nothing except receive caps
I get it but not really feeling this line. concept is decent but wording is boring to me

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lotto Smirk (Post 500137)
wanderer
ya past ya prime, waste of my time see me I'm on a spree g
your just an elder wand, n you'll need the magic powers it contains just to beat me
the concept is there but magic wand for him is kinda played. I don't mind dope flips on played concepts but this isnt quite there
so flee b, cus u need a crew to improve cus mutha Fucka u ain't frightening
only be dope if you turned to hush... n did exactly that n shut up n give up writing
another cool concept but hampered by bad wording. if you read that aloud it sounds really awkward.
you ain't never getting girls fam, ya skills not showing as of late
cus wanders off.. ironic bitches also do this silently strolling away from you on dates
simple to me and not that harsh. funny to me this is essentially the same bar wanderer used against you about girls leaving lot
m.sho, muff, hush cred n greed are dope I can't argue with that fact
so you joined together for suicide.. I hope your the first to go n then the rest bitch out the pact
creative crew personal. liked this
I'm back, hitting certain spots that hurt, but like u urs are very poor
my personal account is on point... while ur lucky if you even have a dollar when it comes to yours
meh, I'll pass on this

close battle. both had similar caliber verses, with wanderer having better wording, while lotto came with a lot of creative concepts. this one really comes down to style preference because both had similar hit's and misses. they even both did similar nameplay flip bars. I think overall wanderer was a little more consistent, so I'm going with him.

Vote: Wanderer

IAmRhetoric 07-05-2015 10:52 PM

lotto
ya past ya prime, waste of my time see me I'm on a spree g
your just an elder wand, n you'll need the magic powers it contains just to beat me
okay

so flee b, cus u need a crew to improve cus mutha Fucka u ain't frightening
only be dope if you turned to hush... n did exactly that n shut up n give up writing
wording wording wording

you ain't never getting girls fam, ya skills not showing as of late
cus wanders off.. ironic bitches also do this silently strolling away from you on dates
lol okay

m.sho, muff, hush cred n greed are dope I can't argue with that fact
so you joined together for suicide.. I hope your the first to go n then the rest bitch out the pact
nice

I'm back, hitting certain spots that hurt, but like u urs are very poor
my personal account is on point... while ur lucky if you even have a dollar when it comes to yours
meh

wanderer

With every line you loose, bitch you ain't fit to shine my shoes
these thick girls gimme wood when on top o'me.. no chick's ever Pined over you
pause nigga

Girls hit up my crib & it's hearts for stars when wanderer slay
If I'm seeing chicks round Lot's they just park their cars and walk away
lmao

You're boring & lame. Believing you stun is a crime
ya style ain't really newbie, you just get mistaken for one all the time
simple but good flip

I'll beach yo ass. if we fought shit could get crucial with the hands, stop
Im a big dog in this yard, you'll see when I put you in the Sandlot
nice

When the pressures on you choke so imm'a just squeeze gats
kinda like Rooney at international level, ya gonna do nothing except receive caps
i don't understand this tbh, obscure ass reference

mvgt/ Lotto
Lotto had a more consistent battle compared to wand and I liked the crew np

Bash 07-05-2015 10:56 PM

Walk away, sandlot, rooney

Vs

Suicide, closer

V/Wand. Slight edge, I was digging his wording a little more but besides that I've got em by a quote

Wander

Inno 07-05-2015 11:05 PM

Ol so i felt like wanderer just dropped playe shit thays done over and pver
Woty lotto(sandlot, lot line) dope lines but i feel like ive seen them a thousand times
So they loose that wow factor for me. Dug the opener and i thought the rooney line was your best line

Lotto

Felt like you had more to offer. Felt like to attempted for a more personal approach( the suicide squad lines) thought you could of took this easily if you would of worked that concept more. You took punches but didnt go in for the kill

Overall

I think i got lotto for a more l hard hitting piece. Wanderer fell short for me with the misses. Thanks for the read fellas

Hush 07-06-2015 12:20 AM

Lotto suicide pact line killed it

Wand had the sandlot joint
Close battle
Lot got it tho


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