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something 06-18-2015 01:04 PM

No one cares about your problems
 
I started seeing a counselor last week. She called it courageous.
Positive reinforcement. She was taught how to praise us.
I filled her ear with ills and fears. All the sorrow I've endured.
Felt like a million bucks when I left. Tomorrow I'll be cured.
No more tears. No more sulking. Just glad to be hopeful.
Bought into the healing. Soon I'll be happy and social.

lol

What a pussy. Sharing's for faggots.
Caring's preparing for embarrassment. Practice
for being abused and mistreated.
You wanna get better? Be abusive. Conceited.
Use unimpeded and rule who you sleep with.
Chew through the weakness of others. Be nothing,
'cause fuck 'em. They only knew 'cause you teach 'em.
A genius playing dumb 'cause meekness seemed like love,
but hate tastes better and need don't make 'em come.
They want want want. Entertainment. Support.
Get inside what makes 'em rive and take it with force.
Be a sadist. They're only feigning what they say. This is war.
Make 'em need you 'til they feed you grapes from a fork.
Pleasure has no measure, even for my favoritest whore.
I give a fuck if it's enough. I only say it for sport.
My psychology is probably skewed, but it's real.
These sheep are all asleep, but they knew. They can feel
it in the backs of their minds. It drives what they do. They react, but they hide
it from their social reality. They want appearances intact. So they lie.
To themselves. To their kids. They pass-on pretending.
So I pass on religion. Fuck your merry and Christmas.
I pulled up to the table. Tried to eat from hypocrisy.
Found myself in counseling. Bleeding from modesty.
Believing we're all equals. Tried seeing the common themes,
but these equals will eat you and feed you apologies.
My martyrdom's over. Sober. Here comes the harvest for vultures.
I'm breathing fucking fire now, 'til your carcasses smoulder.
I'm harnessing heartlessness. No pardons to hope for.
Cross my path and I launch attacks. Bargaining's over.

dead man 06-18-2015 02:26 PM

This should be a thread in discussion as well

Clutbuck 06-20-2015 06:10 AM

something and @Zombie need to collab lol

This was smooth as hell, nice internal rhyme too, second line deserved quoting though:

I filled her ear with ills and fears. All the sorrow I've endured.
Felt like a million bucks when I left. Tomorrow I'll be cured.

The second half turned pretty dark but I liked that more. Almost the Jekyll to the first halfs Hyde and the contrast made it all the more striking. Wish you had carried this on because you seemed to just be hitting the richest vein of form at the end there in the last six or so lines. Nice work.

Keep that pen moving!

#FREEBWAHAHA

Geno 06-20-2015 10:14 AM

i like you, and your avatar. dope shit

Witty 06-21-2015 08:08 AM

Who are you? I refuse to believe you are new.

TELL ME WHO YOU ARE.

Anyways, this was super nice, flow was bonk, rhymes were bonk, imagery was bonk.

Basically, this piece was bonk of the highest order.

Great job, thank you and keep posting.

Witty 06-21-2015 08:10 AM

Oh and nominated for VOTM.

DonaldSterlingMommasHerpe 06-24-2015 11:27 PM

You seem to be only concerned with dissing women


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