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brokenhal0 05-11-2015 06:14 AM

ndorsements
 
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to the meaning after meaning after the thought forms
i see matter its a matter of meaning i created the scene after....


all summer ive been waiting for rain
even in slumber im awake creating the plane
breaking the chains waving the rings of stone
draconian forces cling to souls times up
light up your inner kingdom glows

the labias porous materialize my pain
while i ingest satans endorsements nuevo en seclurum

pineal gland is shaken martini style... all my 007's awaken
the moon blocks the way in... the super sayin satan slayin
no procastinating its safe for savin the flavor stays when its sun dried
i got the young girls dumb high off one rhyme laced in there lace bra

no more emotions im ice cold getting rid of attachments for high hopes
no expectations needed i made a deal thats divine in reason
hard bargains delusional how could you live forever in gods garden blunt sparken
skys darken you start to panik when your parts become a cog in the cosmic concoction


that cash dont matter when you regain focus slay the serpents whisper
the spiral force pull on propulsion the bullet was woven to kill shit
spill your emotions...


learn from my astral duplicate don't confuse my shit if your new to it
anchors and hooks
studied beyond the banter of books but hangers are hooks a forest ranger with wolfs
tactical madness mind control fat patterns are cooked hexagrams spin
the square sets boundary straight we round edges my light expands
threw the gaze of a cats eye marble shape ...

Mr. J 05-15-2015 01:05 PM

This was a bit better than the last piece I just read
your use of rhymes is sacrificed for vocab use..
some of it seems out of place, the rest makes enough sense
a few lines seemed like some throwbacks too
but the way you carry yourself makes up for a majority of flaws
it's weird, but it's different, I don't know how long this took
but if you took the time to write something longer it would be nice
I threw myself off just to say that..so do it...do it...do it..


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