Hi
 

Ayo

I see now,
how your desperate image
wants to be by my side via this peripheral vision
I'll break your skeleton bitches
if you'd just give us a minute,
sixty seconds to kill it could behead your whole village
then sever all spirits 'fore they've resurrected their figures
I'm more iller than your mental condition
where your depressed 'cause I'm sicker
literally in the flesh here my nigga
I wear a vest made of skin,
whilst you've done tanked at beginner
I've double strengthened my shit
straight up placed where no limits is
in some great ass position,
the only thing you've in common with Jesus is
you've both been nailed with precision
I often pounce south on a heathen just to cloud what he's thinkin'
then flip things around and fully shake up the system
amaze 'em with brilliance 'fore they fade from existence
noticed you prayed for a savior yet only Satan would listen
so I came to pay you a visit,
let's get some change out these bitches
the newest craze is to follow me and pave the way where you isn't
go 'head and save your apologies for who's been awaitin' to hear 'em
I'm sharp wit it
on point kid,
I'm down to shank you with wisdom
leave you arm-less 'fore the coins flipped
and have you playin' the victim.

This seems quickly written and kind of whatever. Seems like a cypher post. Something you'd write just to write and get the juices flowing. Wasn't crazy with the rhymes or swagger enough to be a stand alone dope flex piece.

Read it a couple times and it seems like your rhymes were on point in the 2nd half but lacked in the first half. I thought the opening in particular was bad. But in the later parts I was quite impressed by some lines and how you worked the scheme.

dope. strong verse man
pretty nice style changes and schemes.
enjoyed

Not exactly whar I was expecting from you..
but regardless it was a piece that showed promise
the ill-fated 'downing' of the site may have toyed with you
made you put down the pen and forget who you are
and possibly you found your way back, planning quietly...
plotting...thinking...and finally writing this as a return pie e
either way..decently done..keep writing and pull it together