Consumed Conformity in Affirmitive Action
 

I'm the ghost in the machine, hosting the dream
disposing of thieves, open-ended tales cloaking the theme
for those who boasted of beef, vegetarians...hoping to eat
incarcerating these suckas, behind these bars elope with a tree
til you fall from the height you claim & you choke in your seat
asphyxiating your hopes of being hard, die, die in your sleep
a beast, king of my jungle, and I'm a fucking lion in heat
did em' like Suge did Pac, that's where I been driving this thing
the golden child, Atum-Ra, the night is the silver lining to me
been what you trying to be, living life outside society
with the optics of Providence, triangulating the impossible
pretentious brewery, got your pride waiting to be bottled
hospitable father, welcoming you to the collection in the armory
gotta be...something else for you to touch me, heterosexual monogamy
get off of me, I'm on another diagnostic pattern sent from Saturn
keeping their heads ringing out of a lavish sense of my mastering...
what I produce alone should cause a rupture in the planet...
a local disaster plastered over the news discussion surroundin' the rapture
the damage alone would cause mother earth to gulp a morning after
same road, different trail, same hand that put quarters in a wishing well
will...wish them well, pat their heads, say a prayer then give them hell..
mu'fucker don't tell me nothin' bout it...

didnt like the wording in the second half. sometimes you can kinda rescue that sort of line with the next line if thats really the direction you want to go but othertimes its just as easy to change the uncomfortably worded portion.
dope line, well placed with good set up, i was diggin it

Saturn line was memorable. opener/closure were average to me, best lines came sporadically throughout, made it entertaining to read.

Thanx breh

You're driven by your rhymes, which is pretty cool, but it does lead to a wild mix of quality in the individual lines themselves. Following the corny lion line with the much stronger Suge line is a good example. The content sputtered in the second half, too. It seems whenever I read your verses that you have a ton of talent but write really quickly, unworried about polishing your verses. That's fine and certainly a reasonable choice, one I'm guilty of at times. But it leads to that chonic unevenness.

cool bro