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brokenhal0 12-07-2014 06:23 AM

willfull stare
 
Im reading palms seeing things that aint easily formed speaking psalms
least of all i can call it now at peace with all creatures born
its never easy to see the faults
force shake a heathen pulse
its no sin we keep the demons close
i only deal with fiends who eat the most
never give up forever try
its a sure thing when gods happy expect better light
recall with better sight create right in darkness
my fears disappear amongst the carnage
stare beyond the spheres carved from karmic conquest
my coarseness dampen a goddess armpits
like a snake bite on a hate night
blaze hecate amongst the grave sight
dead in my old ways 1st class ticket to take flight
grapes and figs
my rigs rigged no remorse like scotty riggs sig
sleeper hold knocked out the big pig
scream eureka hoe and she loves that i don't need her tho
sound like a clever blow creepshow indian statue flow follow u home
i bleed oak scented blood give a good memory back to love
god from above it stood when the cosmic circles budged
im in a hole a well make a wish and if i follow the song it sells
ring the bells sleigh of hand voodoo priest slings the shells
superconscience rays of man burn shadows on a basic cell
lack detail so i play the creator well
of a ancient land feelings duplicate a willful spell
ill will will tell well the well filled up well wishes spilled from a spit filled cup
sips filled up you see you give up give and take effect create a real world up homey its lonely up here lets crawl with snakes in the gobi
jump in a wormhole and switch to satori shinobi...i said you dont know me i been loving this long to go bon jovi

Geno 12-07-2014 05:23 PM

Always dig your snf style. Cool cotent and imagery

Objective 12-07-2014 05:51 PM

Loved these bars:

its a sure thing gods happy then expect better light
recall with better sight create right in darkness
my fears disappear
stare beyond the spheres carved from karmic conquest


Cool piece you got here. Keep it up.

Wise Wiggles 12-09-2014 12:44 AM

Craziness brotha

Mr. J 12-12-2014 01:38 PM

This was a smooth piece, I didn't enjoy the build up to snake bite & hate night
hate night just seems like a random thing to put together at least in my opinion
the opening part of this verse was really well put together though and so was the ending
I think that the middle just took away from it a bit but the switch off was well done
after that little bump in the road you seemed to have a nice idea of how to finish
and you did that well, nice work my dude...

brokenhal0 12-19-2014 03:41 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr. J (Post 450921)
snake bite & hate night
hate night just seems like a random thing to put together at least in my opinion
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i write in allegory alot so ill explain this one from a more personal idea concept then and feeling

snake bite >>my serpent mind thinking got me caught off guard by a energy vampire on a ..

hate night ... a night where i let anger get to me or my emotions off kilter o them vamps got to me <<

my coarseness with females was basiclly compared to a snake bite how i get there attention not giving a fuck about there feelings so im the energy vamp now its a hate night

Mr. J 12-19-2014 10:32 AM

I understand the concept I just feel that's a odd combination


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