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Mercy 11-27-2014 03:04 PM

The Beauty of Life
 
http://www.picturesofheaven.net/gatesheaven92.jpg
Glancing at life
I feel wholesome

Complete...

Rid of conscious
Regret?
..
Nonsense
..
I grin a natural smile
Blessed
With the gift of humanity
My soul flutters
Realizing the beauty
In life's virtues..
...
Joyous tears arise..

Moment.

As the heart's beat's skip...
..
I clench essence
Eloquence.
Happiness.
Peace.
Closure.
...
As my eyelids squirm
The sky fills with blackness
Opens with
Refreshment..
...
Angels of Heaven..
Passing a warm welcome

As I reached Heaven's gates..
Stepping into the afterlife.

ogiatje 12-03-2014 12:29 AM

okay, so I may be interpreting this completely wrong but how I see it is from the perspective as someone who is dying and cognitively aware of it. They seem completely aware of what is happening and okay with it because they have lived a life that they saw as complete and fulfilling. I dig it because it is different than the typical nostalgic, memoir type of pieces that usually are seen with this topic and the simplicity adds to it. It's almost like we are always trying to add some complex layer onto every big event in life when if we actually took a step back and looked at it from a simpler angle, this is what we would see.
I like it overall, nothing jumps out in particular but as a whole it works.

Geno 12-03-2014 07:12 PM

Really hated

Mercy 12-03-2014 08:17 PM

Ogiatje, you hit it riht on the head. Glad you liked it.

Gen, if you hated it, why did you feel the need to comment? You left literally NO constructive feed whatsoever, much like your feed on my other piece. I dont mind your opinion, but if your not going to give your views on what I should elevate on, stay out of my threads because your pointless and negative comments are just that.


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