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E Tha Real 11-25-2014 05:40 PM

Apeirogon vs E Tha Real - E WINS
 
14 lines
First to 5 wins. Win by 2 like nbl rules.

I'll post in a few minutes.

E Tha Real 11-25-2014 05:47 PM

Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided
Worst alias name ever this'll be easy b
If your the dawn of apes... That flick went straight to DVD
Ass getting hand it, is this what you planned bitch?
Voters would go ape shit, if you got banned quick
Late arrival alias noob tourney, he's on some shit
I'll have 'gon going' like a jack johnson hit
You drop science contributions none fear it
If this ape turns into a man. I question the evolution theorists
Name implies you like animals and got pride bitch
Only animal here could plummet a maroon 5 hit
My bullets ready to go and will rip through his vest
Making ape-fly, I'm no wicked witch of the west

Apeirogon 11-25-2014 06:28 PM

fuckin clown

been talkin shit like some ass to mouth ....... go head. act Funke.
you'll be on a boat witchya brains blown out like that bitch from casting couch
we could talk about drinking but youd prolly leave the topic quick
when I black out I usually try to give a chick this onyx dick ......
when u black out ya put a du-rag on & try to speak ebonics bitch
net loser. u fucking geek. i doubt a single girl has ever been in ur house
yea you got a lot of X's ..... cuz no one ever swipes right on your tinder account
you need to make your body a hobby, lift some weights, go on a fast troll
only conditioning uve ever tried? was getting ur dog to lick peanut butter offa ur asshole
but that furniture you got in the crib really must be somethin holmes!
cuz anywhere but the couch or computer desk is outside ur comfort zone
youre a pussy and its really showing, ima fix the camel toe
that shit you posteds so petty. might as well get a mani with it while you're at it hoe

El Muffin 11-26-2014 01:06 PM

ethareal

opener ..evolution


apogwtfever

tinder was nice

rest was eh to.ok

dude conditioning was wtf. more pauseworthy than my burn uo during reentry line n thatsvbad lol. didnt like urs tbh

v/e by one quote

E Tha Real 12-01-2014 02:53 PM

Vote!

Sharp 12-01-2014 03:48 PM

Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided
ok but kinda basic
Worst alias name ever this'll be easy b
If your the dawn of apes... That flick went straight to DVD
cool idea
Ass getting hand it, is this what you planned bitch?
Voters would go ape shit, if you got banned quick
eh
Late arrival alias noob tourney, he's on some shit
I'll have 'gon going' like a jack johnson hit
cool
You drop science contributions none fear it
If this ape turns into a man. I question the evolution theorists
eh
Name implies you like animals and got pride bitch
Only animal here could plummet a maroon 5 hit
nah
My bullets ready to go and will rip through his vest
Making ape-fly, I'm no wicked witch of the west
cool but at this point I'm tired of ape lines tbh



been talkin shit like some ass to mouth ....... go head. act Funke.
you'll be on a boat witchya brains blown out like that bitch from casting couch
really basic flip of a cool idea
we could talk about drinking but youd prolly leave the topic quick
when I black out I usually try to give a chick this onyx dick ......
when u black out ya put a du-rag on & try to speak ebonics bitch
more of a swag line but wasn't too good... too stretched to really hit for me
net loser. u fucking geek. i doubt a single girl has ever been in ur house
yea you got a lot of X's ..... cuz no one ever swipes right on your tinder account
cool tbh
you need to make your body a hobby, lift some weights, go on a fast troll
only conditioning uve ever tried? was getting ur dog to lick peanut butter offa ur asshole
lol... didn't really hit
but that furniture you got in the crib really must be somethin holmes!
cuz anywhere but the couch or computer desk is outside ur comfort zone
nah
youre a pussy and its really showing, ima fix the camel toe
that shit you posteds so petty. might as well get a mani with it while you're at it hoe
eh


close, I thought the tinder line was lotb but E was overall better with fewer misses. both had kinda basic flips but E played it safe and just did nameflips on a dude I ain't seen before so they all kinda hit. Apeiro was cool but too many lines that didn't hit hurt him so E wins by a bit. Hope to see both dudes polish up wording casue they both had cool concepts

v/E

Apeirogon 12-02-2014 08:48 PM

yo @Sharp Nine

ain't tryna sweat you cuzz, I appreciate you at least voting .....
but did you understand the connection with alyssa Funke - casting couch - brains blown out?
is that concept been used? just wanna understand why you said "really basic flip"

Sharp 12-02-2014 08:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Apeirogon (Post 446134)
yo @Sharp Nine

ain't tryna sweat you cuzz, I appreciate you at least voting .....
but did you understand the connection with alyssa Funke - casting couch - brains blown out?
is that concept been used? just wanna understand why you said "really basic flip"

I do

idk what 'act funk' is supposed to mean, but my problem with the flip is that it was cool in theory but you did the really basic simile - unless there's something going on there otherwise you just kinda said 'you'll be dead like recently dead person'

Apeirogon 12-02-2014 09:13 PM

act "funky" is how you'd say that. go head, brains blown out. SLOOOW IT DOWN
nah i get your point though, thanks for the explanation

Sharp 12-03-2014 01:06 AM

I actually googled it and I came up with it pronounced as "funk" but figured it was funky anyway lol. and the 'go head' was a nice touch tbh it was just that flip that made me a lil disappointed cause you set it up with wordplay but the punch was just that simile

PotatoSackLegend 12-14-2014 11:37 PM

Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided
nah next 1 ok next nah 4th nah 5th ok 6th ok 7 ok




vss
first one was good 2nd no 3rd no 4th no 5th kinda 6th/7th ok

got e more consitency

Plot 12-15-2014 12:47 PM

Yeah well I guess I gotta go for E in this battle,
I didnt like it at all, neither apealed to me. But I think he had better punches.
Looking back on Sharps breakdown...

Yeah I guess I agree, thought the 'ape shit' line was ok.
Basically it comrs down to my opion of what battles should be, and that is
that obscure refences should not be used if possible, they should be more taylor made for the reader, having to google to understand a punch takes the moment away for me and a few of Apes lines were to 'google-intensive'.
So E gets it.

Glossy Finish Dick Lips 12-18-2014 04:59 PM

Battle was ok'ish. Nothing really stood out for me. A lot of good ideas but horribly executed or lacked any type of witty/creative twist.

E - We've discussed this previously. I like your style. I like how your just straight to the point but at the same time, a lot of your bars come off really basic. And the over usage of simile's for me isn't effective. If you were to think out the majority of your concepts and add some creative witty concepts and or executions, you'd be straight, dawgz.

Ape - I like your structure format a lot better. You seem to have the fundamentals of text battling down, however your bars lacked substance here. For an example your opener was an ok concept that could have landed effectively if it was executed in a more harsher manner. That 3 line bar was stretched and threw me of completely as I lost the flow, tbh. If you are going to utilize long bar format, use rhyme schemes with inner slant rhymes or some type of ABBA or ABAB rhyme pattern, dig? But all in all, I think I've only seen one other verse from you and it was better so not really sure if you applied yourself here but as I stated, you have the fundamentals down. Just focus on executing your concepts more harsher and you'll be straight man.

I think E took this battle barely. His punches were just a little more effective and wording was a lot cleaner/less choppy. Keep writing guys.

v/E


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