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Mr. J 08-16-2013 07:39 PM

Marvin The Martian Shot That Nikka
 
District 9....where dreams are wishes, & wishes are falling stars
replaced by....the devil's calling card, with a grin & some Haggen Daz
turning families to partridge farms, dignity is nonsense & spectacular
the mixture of dosages provide cottons making it harder to process vernacular
lost in the back of the moment, analyzing the whole loss of the manual
the book that tells me, life is a bowl of cherries & whipped cream
especially when I realize all the knowledge I'll have buried with me...
reincarnation, other tales of heroes & such, to the Pharaohs above
creating the building block to life, fated to witness the perils of love
but I always knew the tarots corrupt, the hands faulted unless cleansed
got the thread on hold, tailored in favor how I altered the ends..
seeking therapy carelessly, snipped the head & sent the ice
part each hill, dive in and drown in the crimson tide..
a touch of insanity mixed with life, not enough time to get it right
just kept it going, a full cup of water lifted high...
& here's the alternate ending since you wouldn't get that line
poultry dish garnished with the proper fittings on each side
send these birds up for a duck hunt to sit with Jesus Christ

Wise Wiggles 08-16-2013 07:40 PM

OOooOo.

I like uh this !

Will finish when really high.

ill nik-A 08-17-2013 09:19 AM

Nice shit my dude.... The tailored line was bananas... The wouldn't get that line and final couplets was an excellent touch, good work through out, flow was on point too, props

Mr. J 08-17-2013 08:09 PM

thanks bro...I don't praise circumcision though...

Vulgar 08-21-2013 06:03 PM

You speak in riddles frequently, a wit centurion of sorts, your rhyme schemes being not too shabby, adding to the style of presentation. I saw District 9 so I had the mental backdrop image of that movie while reading this... also caught a whiff of a Crimson Tide submarine reference but I could be wrong. This was cool stuff as usual, I like your work.

Keep doing you

Mr. J 08-30-2013 06:52 PM

thanks my dude, still working on doing that piece for you

Wise Wiggles 08-30-2013 07:01 PM

liked all of it. ending was dope. stay up


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