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2tripple0 02-15-2018 06:11 PM

the family don't ask questions
 
the family don't ask questions
by 2tripple0

theres always a reason before a hit forces itself in
so I roll a blizz and rethink my life since a soldier'll end it on a whim
they'll put an end to beef before it get to that point anymore
so nobody feel like stepping when we aint kids like we was before
i wanna create a life first before i go I haven't thought things out tho
I mean this one young girl fill me with warmth like a cup of joe
but she ain't figured if I can make that real cash when I drop the flow
so I kick it with my boys just thinking even though we tired a shit yo
the street seem like the only life we can live so before you can speak
you gots to know the deal its real right that's why it's so hard to succeed
I'm a true g with an eye for making dudes gasp from what I seen
so even though everyone lay low we still gotta make this cash
see cause maybe we just make this loot and came up a bit too fast
er whatever but sometimes ya enemies know you the best
and they listen to ya shit but my thoughts still don't seem to address
the only ones close to me seem to be just a few true dudes
they throwdown on my lines so i hide them where there aren't any clues
this shit is real I gotta stay deep pull some shit out quick that i can drop
since this rap game aint hard but still nothing get past the block
I gotta rethink my shit cause we can sit here talking about all this shit
but I guess there ain't much out there cause I've already put an end to it
so now I'm leaving a little freestyle for my boys to relate to
if you understood there'd be nothing left out there to explain you...
since i was 14... i been running deep even when there was nothing left to do...

Geno 02-19-2018 11:14 PM

Enjoyes this. I think people be sleeping on 2tripps message half the time. Writing is drawn out a lot. This one is a little better as far as the rhyming goes imo. I think trip got some gems in all his verses though if you look for it. Good shit dude. Keep writing

Lyriscologist 02-21-2018 01:59 PM

need some improvement, flow was real choppy, shorten up the syllable count per line and focus on condensing them to fit in smooth multis, which you also need to work on.. content was decent, just get the rhymes, multis and structure down and you can elevate reeeal quick, keep it up!

Mr. J 02-28-2018 02:01 AM

Hey man...its nice to see you trying. great job buddy!

Eŋg 03-04-2018 09:33 PM

2trip the truth tbh

2tripple0 04-30-2018 02:16 PM

Thanks guys thats great feedback brothers


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