Destroyer vs Crash Carson[OPEN]
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@Destroyer vs @Crash Carson |
Check it. I'll go for 16 lines.
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Loool
Fuck off. I go 10 max with alias swine |
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I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly. You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'. A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due? I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude. Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud? 'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug. Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter. Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'. I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'? Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time. |
u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D
so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once |
Crash:
I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly. You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'. ok A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due? I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude. LOL I want to be positive on all my comments but good grief this is the worst bar in the modern era Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud? 'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug. nah Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter. Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'. ok I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'? Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time. no the apostrophes are distracting. I think you need to form punches and think about what will hit at your opponent Destroyer: u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me I dig it... ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location lol this was clever bc you called it a sad joke which absolves you from the bad wordplay.. very good nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes I don't get it. nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with hits nicely prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once okay Des had a very simply but clever/witty verse which is hard to do sometimes. Carson, remove the apostrophes and focus on punches.. Vote: Destroyer |
I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'. I get that you're highlighting all your double entendres with the apostrophes, and I'm a bit more open minded about that kind of stuff than most the people on nc or rb will be, but honestly nothing in here is that complex that it needs to be explained. I've been reading/watching battles for like 17 years, I've seen all these done a dozen times. I think you're trying to do too much here, you shouldn't let your double entendres guide your wording, because then you end up saying things like "I'd stick em" which just sounds kinda corny, and ending your bar by saying "your head will be circling" just doesn't feel super aggressive or effective. I think it was passionate MC who had a bar in a song that said "Heads get bodied with a single line like a stick figure" which is a more innovative & concise way of wording a similar concept. Sometimes keeping it simpler is better than trying to do that scheme shit imo A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due? I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude. Again, you're kinda doing too much. There's some level of potential here that I appreciate, but phonetically the wordplay is forced. As far as putting it together syntactically, these sentences don't actually mean anything in the english language. "Destroyer grease more oily, dude" doesn't have a verb and is a sentence fragment. Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud? 'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug. the part about silly with the plug was a weak way to end the line. The rest is okayish, not quite as tryhard as the first couple bars, but still needs ironing out. Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter. Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'. See my previous comment about letting wordplay guide your wording. Calling your opponent "sir" takes the sting off your punch I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'? Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time. nah u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me nah not digging it. singing that he's into you is weird prepubscent girl behavior ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location the tennessee wp makes me cringe and is obviously dated enough that it's a common pick-up line, so naw nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes lol as simple as it is, this is kinda funny nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with this is cool prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once wording toward the end could've been better overall destro had some ok stuff, nothing that really blew me away. I think the alias bar might be botb. That being said, he didn't have to do too much here. effective wording was pretty much enough to win this for him by a substantial margin v/ destro |
I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'. nah A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due? I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude. lmao wtf Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud? 'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug. stop with all the apostrophes, we get you’re adding emphasis to the tie ins but it’s stupid Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter. Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'. decent, pretty sure barcotic did cancer wordplay like a few weeks ago I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'? Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time. no Vs u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me nah ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location decent for a dry humor bar nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes what? nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with ok ok not bad, simple & effective prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once decent closer Shitty battle if we’re being completely honest but Carson is way out of touch. He has all the right ideas but is focusing more on tie ins than the actual punch. Des dropped light but didn’t really need much to defeat Carson’s verse. Vote Destroyer |
Crash-Really wasn’t feeling this verse. You’re coming off as trying to be super clever but nothing was hitting at all. I use apostrophes sometimes with tie ins but it was wayyyyy too many here. I would concentrate less on so many tie ins and just try to make the overall punch as impactful as possible. Maybe one tie in. Especially the tie ins in the set up. Once in awhile that can be effective but it did nothing here.
Des-everything was ok except for the shampoo line. Didn’t like that at all. Verse seemed pretty rushed. Best line was probably Dave Matthews but even there saying he has likes you is kind of eh. I got des with the win here. Didn’t really need to try too hard. Vote-Des |
Vote Des
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