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Sharp 08-02-2022 09:42 PM

Champ Match: Dominate vs Defiant - DOMINATE WINS
 
Netcees SOL Season II
Week 6


Due Friday, August 5th at Midnight PST

Minimum: 10 Lines
Maximum: 14 Lines
24hr ext given on request

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
You MUST check in
Don't edit after your opponent has posted
2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
Don't be an idiot
Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle
Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls
@Dominate @Defiant

Dominate 08-03-2022 03:50 AM

Hey Def.

Defiant 08-03-2022 05:16 AM

Hey dom

Defiant 08-05-2022 05:11 PM

Ext?

Sharp 08-05-2022 05:40 PM

You're not asking. You're telling.

EXT.

Dominate 08-05-2022 06:47 PM

Your request is approved.

Defiant 08-06-2022 08:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dominate (Post 824520)
I’m here for funsies and to improve as a writer. Part of that is figuring out when to pull the trigger on an idea

We battled years ago, n still acting a bitch with ya dumb pleas
Thats a blast from the past, this is a blast when I pull the trigger for using words like funsies
That topical contendership, man that shit was weak
One punch will have ya universe shook so bad, you'd pussy out of another battle this week
Uk vs oz again, n this convict the type to trap n steal
cause we're both part of the Commonwealth, n he couldn't part with it 2 take a girl for a happy meal
clearly broke, with ya girl ya can't ball right?
I'm saying you'd have a whole date cancelled for a few pounds, like the jake paul fight
Say ya an oz cunt n sympathize as this beating u see sounds dark
N if that bridge across don't harbour feelings, it will when I throw ya off that Sydney landmark

Dominate 08-07-2022 02:36 AM

Ur style is hit and miss so good luck if you tryna advance, queer
If MY text is up and down it’s “I ReAlLy ThInK dEfIaNt HaS a ChAnCe HeRe”
Chernobyl fallout looking mufucka. You never balling w/ chicks bro
If you got the digits for something extra on the side, we’re talking a sixth toe
You’re fat AND boring. What you make w/ the pen’s awful
Verse the same as your diet is - eighty percent waffle
Hear the revolver BLAOW and you’re going down, sonny
I SAID THIS AIN’T MY FIRST RODEO. Yea that colt’s coming out bucking
Or I’m auto squeezing, even better. You’ll bleed forever
See me bare arms going BRRRRR like white women who need a sweater


Pew pew

Wanderer 08-07-2022 11:46 AM

Def

I tried and wanted to get into it but honestly wasn’t feeling much

Dom

Sixth toe was cool
Waffle was dope
Closer was ok.. kinda corny for me but well written

Dom takes it quite comfortably

evaD 08-07-2022 11:57 AM

Funsies a valid thing to call out but you need to do more with it
Universe cool
Commonwealth better but a bit long
Jake Paul is good considering it’s a pound wp
Harbour feelings was cool well setup

Opener cool idea but could’ve been done better I think. Like that sTyLe oF wRiTiNg doesn’t imply sarcasm does it?
Digits lol that’s good
Waffle nice
See what you’re trying bringing rodeo back again but it’s light
BRRR is corny but I’m like it lol

Dominate more good ideas and better wording


Vote Dom

Adverse 08-07-2022 10:03 PM

Defiant I feel like you had some clever concepts, but the execution is just not there or the things you’re targeting don’t do much damage in this first place. Like the funsies line, It’s just not a good point of attack, I applaud you for using concepts that are probably fresh but execution comes over the fresh takes. It’s been paying off for me to dumb it down and just focus on hard hitting wording and execution over grandiose concepts. I liked harbor and universe bars were decent

Dom had a solid verse here wasn’t as good as last week but did enough to retain the belt here thought opener digits and waffles was nice

So yeah v/Dom comfortably

Sinacog 08-07-2022 11:09 PM

This a very good battle..

V/DOMINATE..

Sharp 08-08-2022 10:29 AM

We battled years ago, n still acting a bitch with ya dumb pleas
Thats a blast from the past, this is a blast when I pull the trigger for using words like funsies
this concept is dope. Something about the bar doesn't work too well for me though
That topical contendership, man that shit was weak
One punch will have ya universe shook so bad, you'd pussy out of another battle this week
solid. Probably don't need the comma in the punch
Uk vs oz again, n this convict the type to trap n steal
cause we're both part of the Commonwealth, n he couldn't part with it 2 take a girl for a happy meal
punch is definitely more stretched out than it needs to be but still good
clearly broke, with ya girl ya can't ball right?
I'm saying you'd have a whole date cancelled for a few pounds, like the jake paul fight
lmao this is dope assuming one of your stupid countries still uses pounds
Say ya an oz cunt n sympathize as this beating u see sounds dark
N if that bridge across don't harbour feelings, it will when I throw ya off that Sydney landmark
that setup is trash. Punch is fine



Ur style is hit and miss so good luck if you tryna advance, queer
If MY text is up and down it’s “I ReAlLy ThInK dEfIaNt HaS a ChAnCe HeRe”
lmao. Nice
Chernobyl fallout looking mufucka. You never balling w/ chicks bro
If you got the digits for something extra on the side, we’re talking a sixth toe
good bar, use of 'on the side' put it over
You’re fat AND boring. What you make w/ the pen’s awful
Verse the same as your diet is - eighty percent waffle
'what you make with the pen' is a little awkward but the rhyme is good. Solid
Hear the revolver BLAOW and you’re going down, sonny
I SAID THIS AIN’T MY FIRST RODEO. Yea that colt’s coming out bucking
this doesn't rhyme in Philly. Only vaguely aware of the first rodeo stuff from last week, so I might be missing something, but this is just OK to me
Or I’m auto squeezing, even better. You’ll bleed forever
See me bare arms going BRRRRR like white women who need a sweater
gone


I fuck with goofy dominate. Def did pretty well here, favorite verse from him this season, but Dom was more consistent

V/Dom

Fracture 08-08-2022 10:20 PM

Props to defiant for his run, but this was a matter of diff tiers

Doms wording was cleaner and his concepts were either more unique or more direct

This was by no means Dom at his best, but he knew how much would be enough to take the W

Vote- dom


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