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Inno 06-20-2019 10:07 PM

Destroyer vs Crash Carson[OPEN]
 

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  • Due Dates:
    Verses are due FRIDAY,
    June 28th, 2019 @ 11:59 PM PST.
    Check Ins are due SUNDAY, June 22 , 2019 @ 11:59 PM PST
    Voting ends SUNDAY, June 30th, 11:59 PM PST.

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    Line Limit:
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    Max. = 16 lines
    The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both. If no line agreement is made you CANNOT go above 16 lines

    General Rules:
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    means you will disqualified.
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    Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
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    must match the 1st person's line amount.

@Destroyer vs @Crash Carson

Crash Carson 06-22-2019 08:57 PM

Check it. I'll go for 16 lines.

Destroyer 06-23-2019 07:31 AM

Loool
Fuck off. I go 10 max with alias swine

Crash Carson 06-26-2019 10:52 PM

10
I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'.
A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due?
I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude.
Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud?
'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug.
Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter.
Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'.
I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'?
Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time.

Destroyer 06-28-2019 05:46 PM

u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D
so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me
ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation
The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location
nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame
plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes
nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit
thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with
prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months
but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once

Aero 06-29-2019 09:14 AM

Crash:

I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'.
ok
A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due?
I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude.
LOL I want to be positive on all my comments but good grief this is the worst bar in the modern era
Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud?
'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug.
nah
Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter.
Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'.
ok
I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'?
Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time.
no

the apostrophes are distracting. I think you need to form punches and think about what will hit at your opponent


Destroyer:

u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D
so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me
I dig it...
ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation
The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location
lol this was clever bc you called it a sad joke which absolves you from the bad wordplay.. very good
nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame
plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes
I don't get it.
nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit
thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with
hits nicely
prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months
but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once
okay

Des had a very simply but clever/witty verse which is hard to do sometimes. Carson, remove the apostrophes and focus on punches..

Vote: Destroyer

Answer 06-29-2019 09:46 AM

I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'.

I get that you're highlighting all your double entendres with the apostrophes, and I'm a bit more open minded about that kind of stuff than most the people on nc or rb will be, but honestly nothing in here is that complex that it needs to be explained. I've been reading/watching battles for like 17 years, I've seen all these done a dozen times. I think you're trying to do too much here, you shouldn't let your double entendres guide your wording, because then you end up saying things like "I'd stick em" which just sounds kinda corny, and ending your bar by saying "your head will be circling" just doesn't feel super aggressive or effective. I think it was passionate MC who had a bar in a song that said "Heads get bodied with a single line like a stick figure" which is a more innovative & concise way of wording a similar concept. Sometimes keeping it simpler is better than trying to do that scheme shit imo

A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due?
I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude.

Again, you're kinda doing too much. There's some level of potential here that I appreciate, but phonetically the wordplay is forced. As far as putting it together syntactically, these sentences don't actually mean anything in the english language. "Destroyer grease more oily, dude" doesn't have a verb and is a sentence fragment.

Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud?
'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug.

the part about silly with the plug was a weak way to end the line. The rest is okayish, not quite as tryhard as the first couple bars, but still needs ironing out.

Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter.
Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'.

See my previous comment about letting wordplay guide your wording. Calling your opponent "sir" takes the sting off your punch

I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'?
Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time.

nah


u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D
so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me

nah not digging it. singing that he's into you is weird prepubscent girl behavior

ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation
The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location

the tennessee wp makes me cringe and is obviously dated enough that it's a common pick-up line, so naw

nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame
plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes

lol as simple as it is, this is kinda funny

nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit
thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with

this is cool

prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months
but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once

wording toward the end could've been better


overall destro had some ok stuff, nothing that really blew me away. I think the alias bar might be botb. That being said, he didn't have to do too much here. effective wording was pretty much enough to win this for him by a substantial margin

v/ destro

Zuo 06-30-2019 12:03 AM

I'm 'lining up these phrases', and I 'pick each letter' perfectly.
You cant 'hang, man'.. 'figure' I'd 'stick' em, your 'head is circling'.
nah
A/B concepts, see, that's 2, D. Is Troy or Greece more royally due?
I said 'ABC', that's 2... Destroyer grease more oily, dude.
lmao wtf
Saying "alias swine".. your names a 'bore', but who's really in the mud?
'D talks' sick but take Car in 'vane', you'll 'owe, D', I'm silly with the plug.
stop with all the apostrophes, we get you’re adding emphasis to the tie ins but it’s stupid
Blessed with the pen im deadly, only pull a punch when guns in my banter.
Chest get the 'sig already' dont matter you puff, your lungs get the 'can, sir'.
decent, pretty sure barcotic did cancer wordplay like a few weeks ago
I'm in my 'prime', 'no division, could touch. You tryna meet 'beef or the dead lines'?
Mines' keep it a hundred, cut you in half for that '2-50' before bed time.
no


Vs


u love my shit. It’s this ‘boy’s dream’ to match wits w/ D
so I’m not talking Dave Matthews hits when I repeatedly sing that crash into me
nah
ur lines are trash kid. U should pick up a different vocation
The 10 I see is a sad joke, and I’m not referring to your listed location
decent for a dry humor bar
nah but for real ur bars are stupid dope & people will say they suck, but they’re lame
plus ur style was mad hot when you could carry box cutters and shampoo on airplanes
what?
nah. shit’s retarded. lines add up to = ur bars shit
thought u were an alias... then realized u have to be someone to start with
ok ok not bad, simple & effective
prolly rusty since I aint battled in a minute... hell, not for months
but this gonna be the DNC debates where the old guy won’t get robbed for once
decent closer


Shitty battle if we’re being completely honest but Carson is way out of touch. He has all the right ideas but is focusing more on tie ins than the actual punch. Des dropped light but didn’t really need much to defeat Carson’s verse.


Vote Destroyer

Cashius 06-30-2019 09:50 PM

Crash-Really wasn’t feeling this verse. You’re coming off as trying to be super clever but nothing was hitting at all. I use apostrophes sometimes with tie ins but it was wayyyyy too many here. I would concentrate less on so many tie ins and just try to make the overall punch as impactful as possible. Maybe one tie in. Especially the tie ins in the set up. Once in awhile that can be effective but it did nothing here.

Des-everything was ok except for the shampoo line. Didn’t like that at all. Verse seemed pretty rushed. Best line was probably Dave Matthews but even there saying he has likes you is kind of eh.

I got des with the win here. Didn’t really need to try too hard.

Vote-Des

BodySnatcher 06-30-2019 10:13 PM

Vote Des


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