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Defiant 10-13-2014 04:18 AM

BA Week 1 S&F - Blanco bishop vs Unfukwitable vs Jilti blanco wins
 
BAWB - ba weekly battles
10 lines
Due Wednesday midnight
House rules
YOU MUST PROVIDE 2 LINKS IF NOT YOU DONT GET A BATTLE NEXT WEEK

@Blanco Bishop
@Unfukwitable
@jilti

jilti 10-16-2014 02:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Defiant (Post 418884)
Due Wednesday

..due wednesday. i'm the new hensley & u two fools in shooters range
this username makes dudes fade away from the net faster than the bulls' MJ
i'm a pugilists sensei with segues, playing numerous head games
legends stay jotting notes, got niggas locked to posts like Kunta Kinte
commonly known to boost the death rate when toxicologists called in
listen man since bishop Fam, he'll get the exact same discipline that Chris Benoits' did
Rocky with heart & grit, boxing star making a mockery of this art
far beyond marginally smart. could start up a car without spark plugs or battery charge
5 bars released as dope, feds can't seize this coke keyed in minutes
squeeze and hold machine guns then reload each one before they're even finished

Unfukwitable 10-16-2014 06:30 AM

A tower to you damn chumps, a lonely camper
but Im a loose cannon, Fuck a camra, My mom use to stuff Gunpowder in my fukin pamper
I had a 5th of vodka and d'usse that i was sipping non-stop witcha roomate
yo, her top good and her cooch great
but the way I was packing she was asking..."what you got in the suitcase?".
then I had a model with neat throat, that'll wobble ya knees slow
&not only does she Swallow a mean load she might just digeste a Washing machine whole
I RAP FOR THE FUCK OF IT, &'LL HACK U TO FUCKIN BITS
CROWDS WILL CLAP IF YOU STOMACH THIS..BUT UR NOT READY FOR THIS CAPITAL PUNISHMENT

Blanco Bishop 10-16-2014 06:39 PM

Sporadic typist. Basically the nicest to ever grace the keys
Yall both cowards that hold no power n overnight i could raise a fleet.
A text gawd that could write a lexicon just to flex on u schmucks
Physicals with no M.D. make yall play Russian roulette for a test of your nuts.
One word n my clan scrambles to grab ammo to squeeze
A click of animals n beasts that take more pills than Keanu Reeves.
I keep sluts in a surplus,plus they call me sir. respect a Don.
Springs off bras come off n panties drop off broads due to my aggressive charm.
U bums are finished. expose u cuz u duds are gimmicks.
Power of God is within this verse. U birds took hours n i was done in minutes.

En Sabah Nur 10-21-2014 05:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti (Post 420949)
Rocky with heart & grit, boxing star making a mockery of this art
far beyond marginally smart. could start up a car without spark plugs or battery charge
5 bars released as dope, feds can't seize this coke keyed in minutes
squeeze and hold machine guns then reload each one before they're even finished

Best segment you had. The rest of your verse was littered with unoriginal subject matter.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Unfukwitable (Post 420981)
A tower to you damn chumps, a lonely camper
but Im a loose cannon, Fuck a camra, My mom use to stuff Gunpowder in my fukin pamper
I had a 5th of vodka and d'usse that i was sipping non-stop witcha roomate
yo, her top good and her cooch great

I RAP FOR THE FUCK OF IT, &'LL HACK U TO FUCKIN BITS
CROWDS WILL CLAP IF YOU STOMACH THIS..BUT UR NOT READY FOR THIS CAPITAL PUNISHMENT

You didn't seem to care about this battle to me. The first segment was an assortment of disconnected multis that didn't follow much of a set parameter. Your last 2 lines were my favorites.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blanco Bishop (Post 421350)
Sporadic typist. Basically the nicest to ever grace the keys
Yall both cowards that hold no power n overnight i could raise a fleet.

I keep sluts in a surplus,plus they call me sir. respect a Don.
Springs off bras come off n panties drop off broads due to my aggressive charm.
U bums are finished. expose u cuz u duds are gimmicks.
Power of God is within this verse. U birds took hours n i was done in minutes.

What I quoted was bananas. If there was any downside to this verse it would be the switch in rhyme scheme every bar. It's difficult to get invested in a segment when they are basically separated.


MVGT Blanco

jilti 10-22-2014 06:56 AM

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=98077
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=95296

Blanco Bishop 10-22-2014 09:04 PM

Voted on muff n Def tag n packed vs Def pic

jilti 10-26-2014 02:41 AM

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=102567
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=100264

Sharp 11-03-2014 06:18 PM

..due wednesday. i'm the new hensley & u two fools in shooters range
this username makes dudes fade away from the net faster than the bulls' MJ
lot of stretch rhymes like wednesday/hensley were okay but not big. cool flip
i'm a pugilists sensei with segues, playing numerous head games
legends stay jotting notes, got niggas locked to posts like Kunta Kinte
lost me at segues tbh, idk what that was supposed to mean but the second line was cool again
commonly known to boost the death rate when toxicologists called in
listen man since bishop Fam, he'll get the exact same discipline that Chris Benoits' did
cool rhyme flip but 'commonly' was a lil awkward. benoit flips are old
Rocky with heart & grit, boxing star making a mockery of this art
far beyond marginally smart. could start up a car without spark plugs or battery charge
I like this. everything about this bar worked for me
5 bars released as dope, feds can't seize this coke keyed in minutes
squeeze and hold machine guns then reload each one before they're even finished
alright neighbor. cool idea, coke keyed/reload each doesn't line up too well cause of the syllable emphasis on REload verses COKE


Cool verse, concepts were nice, some rhymes that felt awkward to me. probably because you lose the luxury of delivering as you hear them and have to hope your readers hear what you do


A tower to you damn chumps, a lonely camper
but Im a loose cannon, Fuck a camra, My mom use to stuff Gunpowder in my fukin pamper
camera*. but kinda funny
I had a 5th of vodka and d'usse that i was sipping non-stop witcha roomate
yo, her top good and her cooch great
but the way I was packing she was asking..."what you got in the suitcase?".
liked it tbh, felt a bit stretched
then I had a model with neat throat, that'll wobble ya knees slow
&not only does she Swallow a mean load she might just digeste a Washing machine whole
you were drunk when you did this weren't you lmao. another cool idea though
I RAP FOR THE FUCK OF IT, &'LL HACK U TO FUCKIN BITS
CROWDS WILL CLAP IF YOU STOMACH THIS..BUT UR NOT READY FOR THIS CAPITAL PUNISHMENT
capital flips are pretty done but this bar flowed nicely


Sporadic typist. Basically the nicest to ever grace the keys
Yall both cowards that hold no power n overnight i could raise a fleet.
simple but cool. little statementy but definitely some swagger to it
A text gawd that could write a lexicon just to flex on u schmucks
Physicals with no M.D. make yall play Russian roulette for a test of your nuts.
clean rhymes but not really digging the content
One word n my clan scrambles to grab ammo to squeeze
A click of animals n beasts that take more pills than Keanu Reeves.
nice
I keep sluts in a surplus,plus they call me sir. respect a Don.
Springs off bras come off n panties drop off broads due to my aggressive charm.
alright cool
U bums are finished. expose u cuz u duds are gimmicks.
Power of God is within this verse. U birds took hours n i was done in minutes.
kinda done idea but clean wording


close but I think on swagger the three were even but blanco had the slightest better wording so I give it to him

but i really don't know how these things work so feel free to discount this

v/blanco

jilti 11-03-2014 08:13 PM

@Sharp your vote is good, well explained. Btw segue is pronounced segway which means "leading into" or transition

Sharp 11-03-2014 10:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti (Post 431761)
@Sharp your vote is good, well explained. Btw segue is pronounced segway which means "leading into" or transition

Yeah the sensei with segue thing didn't make much sense to me but I left that in so you can explain it if I'm missing

~RustyGunZ~ 11-04-2014 12:08 PM

bishop was without a doubt the flowiest and the swaggiest

jilt had some breaks in his verse for me and un as well, blancos is the only one that was fluid

v/bishop

Verbal 11-04-2014 12:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti (Post 420949)
..due wednesday. i'm the new hensley & u two fools in shooters range
this username makes dudes fade away from the net faster than the bulls' MJ
i'm a pugilists sensei with segues, playing numerous head games
legends stay jotting notes, got niggas locked to posts like Kunta Kinte
commonly known to boost the death rate when toxicologists called in
listen man since bishop Fam, he'll get the exact same discipline that Chris Benoits' did
Rocky with heart & grit, boxing star making a mockery of this art
far beyond marginally smart. could start up a car without spark plugs or battery charge
5 bars released as dope, feds can't seize this coke keyed in minutes
squeeze and hold machine guns then reload each one before they're even finished

Jilti this verse has a sick scheme. The punchlines are cool. Kunta Kinte, Chris Benoit punches were the hardest to me.


Quote:

Originally Posted by Unfukwitable (Post 420981)
A tower to you damn chumps, a lonely camper
but Im a loose cannon, Fuck a camra, My mom use to stuff Gunpowder in my fukin pamper
I had a 5th of vodka and d'usse that i was sipping non-stop witcha roomate
yo, her top good and her cooch great
but the way I was packing she was asking..."what you got in the suitcase?".
then I had a model with neat throat, that'll wobble ya knees slow
&not only does she Swallow a mean load she might just digeste a Washing machine whole
I RAP FOR THE FUCK OF IT, &'LL HACK U TO FUCKIN BITS
CROWDS WILL CLAP IF YOU STOMACH THIS..BUT UR NOT READY FOR THIS CAPITAL PUNISHMENT

Unfuckwitable this is funny man. The jumps in tone is something that I dig. Random loose cannon type of flow.

"then I had a model with neat throat, that'll wobble ya knees slow
&not only does she Swallow a mean load she might just digeste a Washing machine whole"

This is my favorite line here. It's hilarious, right up my alley. Thanks.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blanco Bishop (Post 421350)
Sporadic typist. Basically the nicest to ever grace the keys
Yall both cowards that hold no power n overnight i could raise a fleet.
A text gawd that could write a lexicon just to flex on u schmucks
Physicals with no M.D. make yall play Russian roulette for a test of your nuts.
One word n my clan scrambles to grab ammo to squeeze
A click of animals n beasts that take more pills than Keanu Reeves.
I keep sluts in a surplus,plus they call me sir. respect a Don.
Springs off bras come off n panties drop off broads due to my aggressive charm.
U bums are finished. expose u cuz u duds are gimmicks.
Power of God is within this verse. U birds took hours n i was done in minutes.

Cool flow, lots of swag here Bishop. The punchlines don't feel quite as fleshed out as it could be, but I feel the realness of it. Very cool.


I feel that Jilti had the most creative verse out of the three. I'm going to give it to him.

Certain 11-04-2014 11:51 PM

I was going to vote on this, but I would have voted for Blanco Bishop.


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