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dead man 08-17-2019 03:36 AM

on: matter subjectivity through burial rituals
 
the

virtue of calm. Solomonic, worshipping palms
ask whats the purpose of it all aside from murder and law
cruise 30 or 40 every morning over birds to the slaughter
skulls on burning asphalt like a funeral alter
to kneel and pray another service to offer, purchasing coffers
worms absolving both our princes and paupers. lynch these officers, quick
outworld fringe of apartment, sloth-like drawn to his forests
heartstring orchestra slow waltzing via carbon assortment
remark, was it more of the same? another entendre
my declarative statements are truly like one of a kinda
it troubles the mind. truly my perception is dark
handing out my gratitude for sympathy karma
20 bucks at the door, another 50 for culture
plus whatever's left to kill my time / inhibit emotion
our stories are similar but we never expose them
mimicking social cues inside our physical hosts
inventive / resourceful / primitive / defective / remorseful
i'll light another camel joe. you bring the explosives
pick your poison: be it victim or torturer, make your appointment
it seems what mattered least to me was gravely important
so it is, if it was to be. so vague in it's origin
a Rorschach transforming if you stare for a moment
let me breathe. i'll be reminiscing photos again
regurgitating tragic til there's nobody left
Silverstein's sidewalk edge we're only a step
from soul ascendance posing as dead





dm

slecht 08-17-2019 06:40 PM

classic here.

plus whatever's left to kill my time / inhibit emotion
our stories are similar but we never expose them
mimicking social cues inside our physical hosts
inventive / resourceful / primitive / defective / remorseful
i'll light another camel joe. you bring the explosives
pick your poison: be it victim or torturer, make your appointment
it seems what mattered least to me was gravely important
so it is, if it was to be. so vague in it's origin
a Rorschach transforming if you stare for a moment

Geno 08-19-2019 11:21 PM

Fire, this stood out to me for some reason..

i'll light another camel joe. you bring the explosives
pick your poison: be it victim or torturer, make your appointment
it seems what mattered least to me was gravely important

Bars. Syl

big baby 08-21-2019 10:09 PM

deserves proper feed. will repost in a bit, sir.

JurorNumberSeven 08-22-2019 09:24 AM

Sick verse dead man. Bb wants to be you badly. 9/10 verse

big baby 08-22-2019 08:30 PM

hell yeah i want to be! only writer i read on this entire site. i skip guys like nyc and lars. samurais and bragging in foreign accents just ain't cutting it for me. substance is what I'm after and dm writes beautifully. wish i could touch certain topics as confidently and with info as he does!

NYCSPITZ 08-23-2019 11:05 AM

I agree, dm is by far the most original and best writer here imho. Why do you imitate his style does it assuage your intense angst and bring you a secondary sort of catharsis? Kind of weird come up with your own style lol. Black sorry about that I'll feed this properly later...

Sinacog 08-23-2019 02:23 PM

Hello, Dead Man.

I thought this was a good drop from you; you are assured in language arts and verbiage from writing. Good work, you are very talented. I enjoy your work. Keep writing!

big baby 08-23-2019 05:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by NYCSPITZ (Post 746323)
I agree, dm is by far the most original and best writer here imho. Why do you imitate his style does it assuage your intense angst and bring you a secondary sort of catharsis? Kind of weird come up with your own style lol. Black sorry about that I'll feed this properly later...

me and dm have a pretty cool recognizing of each other. normal stuff between normal people. you're literally the weirdest fucking loser loner here, in a site full of loser loners. following me around adorably leaving little diatribes of love by trying to discredit me. you haven't written anything of substance, probably ever and your only credit to relevancy is that you make up percentages around obscure bitcoin mock popups. you're a lonely freak, so please kindly fuck off. the regularly scheduled calling me by my name and a guess of where i live is bound to come, which only bolsters my lonely loser assumption i, and undoubtedly everyone here has about you. a place in which you constantly clamor for attention over people you perceive as beneath with, which is sad and i hope you seek help, samurai. other than the usual glossing over dms post or having something to say when i commend his writing, your time here is spent posting mining links and being a faceless desperate creep. reevaluate pls. kindly fawk off. clown

dead man 08-23-2019 07:11 PM

I consider both of you friends so the mutual hatred ITT is a bit jarring

Hope you guys can work it out. Thanks for reading

NYCSPITZ 08-23-2019 07:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by big baby (Post 746329)
me and dm have a pretty cool recognizing of each other. normal stuff between normal people. you're literally the weirdest fucking loser loner here, in a site full of loser loners. following me around adorably leaving little diatribes of love by trying to discredit me. you haven't written anything of substance, probably ever and your only credit to relevancy is that you make up percentages around obscure bitcoin mock popups. you're a lonely freak, so please kindly fuck off. the regularly scheduled calling me by my name and a guess of where i live is bound to come, which only bolsters my lonely loser assumption i, and undoubtedly everyone here has about you. a place in which you constantly clamor for attention over people you perceive as beneath with, which is sad and i hope you seek help, samurai. other than the usual glossing over dms post or having something to say when i commend his writing, your time here is spent posting mining links and being a faceless desperate creep. reevaluate pls. kindly fawk off. clown

Lol r u mad cristian gajardo of Piscataway New Jersey... dead man how's the windy City

Aero 08-23-2019 07:55 PM

worms absolving both our princes and paupers.


mimicking social cues inside our physical hosts
inventive / resourceful / primitive / defective / remorseful
i'll light another camel joe. you bring the explosives
pick your poison: be it victim or torturer, make your appointment
it seems what mattered least to me was gravely important



Good grief this was nice. I’ll have to read more of your stuff. I saw all the hype but never paid attention. B.B. might want to write like you but I’m going to take a stab at it soon.

big baby 08-23-2019 09:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man (Post 746337)
I consider both of you friends so the mutual hatred ITT is a bit jarring

Hope you guys can work it out. Thanks for reading

no hatred here i just legit think he's a piece of shit heh

Pharaohs Army 08-23-2019 09:58 PM

Well, considering NYC got robbed when it should have just been open for votes i think you should cut him a little slack. Just my opinion

Exis 08-24-2019 07:55 AM

First four bars were nice, what everyone before me quoted yep...Best bars no doubt.This was a as
wesome read Black, really was...

Stay uppity with it.

HollaFrontOG 08-25-2019 12:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man (Post 746052)


outworld fringe of apartment, sloth-like drawn to his forests
heartstring orchestra slow waltzing via carbon assortment
remark, was it more of the same? another entendre
my declarative statements are truly like one of a kinda

Like this part^


Good read. Always been a fan of the grimey, elevated vocab styles.

slecht 08-25-2019 12:28 AM

those lines I quoted might be the best I've ready from you, Dead.

slecht 08-25-2019 12:28 AM

read this a couple times.


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