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Hush 01-12-2021 10:41 AM

Rnd 1 - Dave vs Adverse - OPEN FOR VOTES
 
8 lines due tonight 1/12/21

Adverse 01-12-2021 10:43 AM

‘Cuz baby now we got bad bloooood

Let’s go Dave

evaD 01-12-2021 11:56 AM

Haha g’luck brother

Adverse 01-12-2021 04:41 PM

You got family? Pets? Say deuces. No truces when I empty shells
You pissed me off now I’m making EVERYTHING disappear like Zuch did with the NBL
Trying to prove your ass belongs? I’d rather have this stupid bastard gone
Next time they ‘remove you from the ‘Cord’ hope it’s weeks after u kicked the stool u standin on
This 4-5th gon’ flex, if I threaten it you’ll feel that chrome hit your chest
While Dave ain’t made a ‘scratch with them arms’ since the Tyrone Biggums sketch
Dude’s getting sprayed fast, I’m ruthless and stay strapped
So next time ‘a UPN dude gets hit with a 40’ it won’t be from Blue on the Chase App

evaD 01-13-2021 03:27 AM

I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss
The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss
Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus
I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou
My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty
Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body
Your mother must’ve been reeeeal ugly.. messed up grill n a big snout
The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree and it wouldn’t look out of place in this pig’s mouth

UPN Zuch 01-13-2021 03:37 AM

Adverse:

Some good light jabs. Liked the closer most.


Dave:

I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss
The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss
Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus
I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou
My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty
Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body

This is all dope. Closer was close to being quoted. Breakdown was LOTB. Best verse of the round.


Vote Dave

Blue Bayou 01-13-2021 11:42 AM

Ad cord concept was a cool discord attack line...chase app a good generic UPN concept and punch

Dave opener was a cool personal , breakdown flip was nice, headquarters a dope murder concept, wasn't a huge fan of the idiom flip closer

Got Dave here cool battle

Mac 01-13-2021 11:48 AM

You got family? Pets? Say deuces. No truces when I empty shells
You pissed me off now I’m making EVERYTHING disappear like Zuch did with the NBL
okk simple

Trying to prove your ass belongs? I’d rather have this stupid bastard gone
Next time they ‘remove you from the ‘Cord’ hope it’s weeks after u kicked the stool u standin on
nice

This 4-5th gon’ flex, if I threaten it you’ll feel that chrome hit your chest
While Dave ain’t made a ‘scratch with them arms’ since the Tyrone Biggums sketch
not feeling this

Dude’s getting sprayed fast, I’m ruthless and stay strapped
So next time ‘a UPN dude gets hit with a 40’ it won’t be from Blue on the Chase App
okk

vs.

I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss
The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss
loll

Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus
I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou
ehh why so many blue refs on this tourney

My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty
Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body
coool

Your mother must’ve been reeeeal ugly.. messed up grill n a big snout
The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree and it wouldn’t look out of place in this pig’s mouth
i dig this but im not sure why i feel its played


got dave here.. nice show both but got dave here more creativity

fraze 01-13-2021 02:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 798022)
You got family? Pets? Say deuces. No truces when I empty shells
You pissed me off now I’m making EVERYTHING disappear like Zuch did with the NBL
haha. memories, right?
Trying to prove your ass belongs? I’d rather have this stupid bastard gone
Next time they ‘remove you from the ‘Cord’ hope it’s weeks after u kicked the stool u standin on
little wordy but still hits
This 4-5th gon’ flex, if I threaten it you’ll feel that chrome hit your chest
While Dave ain’t made a ‘scratch with them arms’ since the Tyrone Biggums sketch
concept is hot but the angle is weird to me. would have liked different setup
Dude’s getting sprayed fast, I’m ruthless and stay strapped
So next time ‘a UPN dude gets hit with a 40’ it won’t be from Blue on the Chase App
light to me

Quotes: Zuch/NBL, removed from cord
Close: Tyrone Biggums

Solid verse. Creative references and you did a good job on the execution side also.

Quote:

Originally Posted by evaD (Post 798080)
I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss
The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss
nice personal
Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus
I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou
don't get this ref, sorry
My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty
Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body
this is borderline to me. kinda of creative, kinda also a variation of the standard 'chop up your body' punchline
Your mother must’ve been reeeeal ugly.. messed up grill n a big snout
The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree and it wouldn’t look out of place in this pig’s mouth
concept is cool, but something is missing to me in the punch

Quotes: opener
Close: headquarters, pig's mouth

Solid verse. Nothing was bad per se but there were a couple stylistic things that that didn't work as well for me and the missed reference hurts in a 4 bar contest.

Vote: Adverse I had Ad with a slight edge in a close battle. If Dave had switched out one of his bars for another quote that could have leaned the needle to his side. Good stuff on both sides.

Kill Spree 01-13-2021 03:20 PM

Thought as had some good concepts just worded a bit rough.... idk seemed a bit choppy I did like the cord angle and the chase app


I pretty much liked all of Dave’s verse tbh I got him taking this with the more polished/wittier verse

Fathom 01-13-2021 04:04 PM

Dave was solid throughout.
Ad opener aight, a bit wordy
cord concept ok flip, seen a few many recently
Chase app - ok

Dave just out punched him bar for bar imo. Cool key battle

V Dave


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