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UPN Zuch 11-09-2020 03:56 AM

WEEK 6: Wanderer 3-2 VS INF 3-2 WANDERER WINS
 
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Good luck, gentlemen

Wanderer 11-09-2020 07:33 AM

ok ok

Saint 11-09-2020 04:21 PM

10/12

Wanderer 11-10-2020 05:02 AM

12 sent brother

Saint 11-12-2020 01:59 AM

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.ph...hlight=Cashius

Cash is on standby. showinup would've left u badly disfigured
Klans in the picture; we all know Wands get a cast in the hands of a Wizard
Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus
Your wife loves her beef tender. fresh cattle raised & hung..
She's no AC/DC fanatic but would die for a shred of that Angus Young
I'm DAD, practically. last lesson learned from these gunshots..
Fuck covid, if a Corona'll Spike it's from allll the heat I eject at my sunspot
Ya writtens are worth shit, voting is doing you the bigger favor
Can't manage to 'Ship; Packing Slip.. ya basic content only gets little paper
His only chance now's to forfeit & take drastic ass measures..
Chucky problems... NEEDS to get out a body fast or end up in plastic forever

Wanderer 11-12-2020 02:39 AM

Ur verses at best are riddles.. we give 0 props & no thanks
With a style so hard to grasp it’s no wonder u’ve been dropped from the ranks
& they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen
I’ll say gluck but won’t mean it then ghost after the dub bruh
u only exit with a hint of sarcasm when a chick says sureee u can have my number
Wouldn’t say I’m certain but I’ll grant a heavy hunch
If Informal the best concepts we’d be using slang in every punch

Smod of War 11-13-2020 07:37 PM

Cash is on standby. showinup would've left u badly disfigured
Klans in the picture; we all know Wands get a cast in the hands of a Wizard
dope
Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus
lmfao
Your wife loves her beef tender. fresh cattle raised & hung..
She's no AC/DC fanatic but would die for a shred of that Angus Young
gone. So obscure but it’s good still
I'm DAD, practically. last lesson learned from these gunshots..
Fuck covid, if a Corona'll Spike it's from allll the heat I eject at my sunspot
no
Ya writtens are worth shit, voting is doing you the bigger favor
Can't manage to 'Ship; Packing Slip.. ya basic content only gets little paper
really wordy here, decent
His only chance now's to forfeit & take drastic ass measures..
Chucky problems... NEEDS to get out a body fast or end up in plastic forever
had potential to be so dope, setup was bad and overall it just didn’t hit as is

3 good
1 decent
2 misses

Vs


Ur verses at best are riddles.. we give 0 props & no thanks
With a style so hard to grasp it’s no wonder u’ve been dropped from the ranks
I thought you were going somewhere else with this, didn’t like how you finished
& they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
lmao I liked this
still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
lol good personal
Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen
pretty cool, I like how you used the barcotic style for this gun line lol
I’ll say gluck but won’t mean it then ghost after the dub bruh
u only exit with a hint of sarcasm when a chick says sureee u can have my number
nah
Wouldn’t say I’m certain but I’ll grant a heavy hunch
If Informal the best concepts we’d be using slang in every punch
is this wordplay? In for mull, idk. I’m even trying to say it like you British people but it’s not coming out good. A miss here

3 good
3 misses


Really close battle here, for a second I thought wanderer might have taken it but he had 1 too many misses. It was almost tied but that third miss took the W away from wanderer and gave it to Inf.


INF

UPN Zuch 11-13-2020 07:39 PM

Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus


I can’t deal with this shitttttt

UPN Zuch 11-14-2020 12:50 PM

Need votes here

Ajax 11-14-2020 01:19 PM

This was effectively a toss up to me. Both had some clever stuff and some lines that were either stretched or just didn’t appeal to me personally (gun bars, odd wordplay, etc). But, there was enough entertaining stuff there to make it a fun read... it’s just really hard to call.

Personal preference, I think Inf barely edged it out.. although I could see others liking Wanderer’s more. That’s how close it was. Cheers.

Scout 11-14-2020 06:18 PM

Inf

Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus


That was a banger right there, but most of your verse was overworded/trying too hard to make shit work. I thought your closer had potential but was botched. Angus young was just corny


Wand

they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen

This is kind of close, and hard to interpret. I can understand the lack of votes, unlike some battles...
But I did my research, did my re-reading, and I feel confident I didn't miss an idea. Just wasn't feeling most from Inf. Kudos for creativity, but
Voting Wanderer

UserName 11-15-2020 08:51 AM

Inf -

Cash is on standby. showinup would've left u badly disfigured
Klans in the picture; we all know Wands get a cast in the hands of a Wizard
Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus
Your wife loves her beef tender. fresh cattle raised & hung..
She's no AC/DC fanatic but would die for a shred of that Angus Young
His only chance now's to forfeit & take drastic ass measures..
Chucky problems... NEEDS to get out a body fast or end up in plastic forever

Wand -

they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen

Cool battle guys, I really fucked with INF's verse this week. I didn't think I'd like another Wand/Wizard line in my lifetime, but that was a fresh flip. The fetus line was maybe LOTB and the Chucky and AC/DC lines were dope to me as well. Overall very consistent. Wand had some shit too, and I dug the more lackadaisical straightforward diss style, in the opening bunch - but overall I dug Inf's concepts and wording a bit more.

This DESERVES more votes though, I could see people leaning the other way based on which style they prefer.

V - INF.

fraze 11-15-2020 11:16 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by INF (Post 792177)
Cash is on standby. showinup would've left u badly disfigured
Klans in the picture; we all know Wands get a cast in the hands of a Wizard
mixed metaphors on klan wizard vs wand wizard. wording is weird
Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus
see what you're doing but its a stretch
Your wife loves her beef tender. fresh cattle raised & hung..
She's no AC/DC fanatic but would die for a shred of that Angus Young
this is ok, needed better setup
I'm DAD, practically. last lesson learned from these gunshots..
Fuck covid, if a Corona'll Spike it's from allll the heat I eject at my sunspot
nice concept, wording is a little rough
Ya writtens are worth shit, voting is doing you the bigger favor
Can't manage to 'Ship; Packing Slip.. ya basic content only gets little paper
light
His only chance now's to forfeit & take drastic ass measures..
Chucky problems... NEEDS to get out a body fast or end up in plastic forever
not for me

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer (Post 792182)
Ur verses at best are riddles.. we give 0 props & no thanks
With a style so hard to grasp it’s no wonder u’ve been dropped from the ranks
this is clever
& they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
nice wording. light punch
still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
cool
Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen
ok
I’ll say gluck but won’t mean it then ghost after the dub bruh
u only exit with a hint of sarcasm when a chick says sureee u can have my number
meh to ok
Wouldn’t say I’m certain but I’ll grant a heavy hunch
If Informal the best concepts we’d be using slang in every punch
cool idea but wording is off

INF had angus young and corona spike. Most of the rest missed to me, needing better punches.

Wanderer had a nice drop over all. hard to grasp, truly beats, and MRI were all nice. Consistently good wording through the verse even in most of the misses.

Vote: Wanderer

evaD 11-15-2020 12:22 PM

INF’s cord line was a banger but didn’t make sense as wanderer isn’t in the cord. Both were inconsistent here. Wanderer has two bangers in beats me and MRI. I like just one gun bar in a verse and this one was cool. INF your Angus bar was clever but also I don’t really see the diss angle. It’s like clever conceptually but his wife likes young beef? Beef doesn’t work in this concept, to me anyway. Wand I’ve seen you come better but you had the higher highs and just edged it.

Vote - wanderer

Destroyer 11-15-2020 02:08 PM

I have wanderer taking this pretty handily as he cleaned up his wording and I thought his verse was pretty mean
Beats me was lotb easy
Inf, opener was almost there. Angus young was ok

V/wand

Mac 11-15-2020 03:22 PM

Cash is on standby. showinup would've left u badly disfigured
Klans in the picture; we all know Wands get a cast in the hands of a Wizard
not getting this

Huge head, emaciated body.. fuck life abort & just cease it
Of course u'd let shit in the 'cord come between us you're a proportionate fetus
this sounds good but not feelign the concept

Your wife loves her beef tender. fresh cattle raised & hung..
She's no AC/DC fanatic but would die for a shred of that Angus Young
lol

I'm DAD, practically. last lesson learned from these gunshots..
Fuck covid, if a Corona'll Spike it's from allll the heat I eject at my sunspot
okk

Ya writtens are worth shit, voting is doing you the bigger favor
Can't manage to 'Ship; Packing Slip.. ya basic content only gets little paper
eh

His only chance now's to forfeit & take drastic ass measures..
Chucky problems... NEEDS to get out a body fast or end up in plastic forever
okk


vs.

Ur verses at best are riddles.. we give 0 props & no thanks
With a style so hard to grasp it’s no wonder u’ve been dropped from the ranks
ok

& they call ME wanderer?? grab this cunt a chair..
Ur the one who’s text credentials have gone on a walk to fuck knows where
eh

still winning in a way despite putting up a harmless fight
Ur shit well & truly beats me... I can’t understand a damn bar u write
statemnt

Still play textee on ur phone but nobodies headache on the scene
Check my 9 fam. MRI scan; when the slide move it puts ur brains on the screen
decent

I’ll say gluck but won’t mean it then ghost after the dub bruh
u only exit with a hint of sarcasm when a chick says sureee u can have my number
okk

Wouldn’t say I’m certain but I’ll grant a heavy hunch
If Informal the best concepts we’d be using slang in every punch
lol


got wanderer here.. didnt understand much of inf verse even though it was pretty smooth flow wise. not so bad though


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