Ness vs Ullr - Ullr wins
Black August
SUMMARY OF RULES: Verses are due October 4th WEDNESDAY at 11:59 P.M. Pacific/West Coast or THURSDAY October 5th 3:00 AM Eastern / 6:00 AM THURSDAY October 5th Central European/London Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words). [color=red]Voting closes when a clear winner is voted for. Competitors must vote immediately on the other match. Failure to vote will result in being a faggot for a significant portion of ur life. WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? You can technically start a life of faggoting immediately but its a slippery slope. so.... All competitors must vote on as many battles as possible duh u bum ass idiots Topic:: uh none wtf don't u know what this is? @Ness @Ullr |
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Yoo @Ullr, I haven't really had time to write as I've had other battles to write for and irl commitments. Any chance you'd be down for a 12/24 hour extension? IK you probably wanna take a bit of extra time polishing your verse as well being as you haven't posted yet. Lmk, I'll try and get something in by tonight if i don't hear back from you.
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Beside a trickling stream, I walked and wondered,
wandering off, my course with rocks asunder the rolling rumble of distant thunder, I twist and stumble as I stop encumbered a pack on my back carrying food and supplies, fruits into slices and a sandwich for lunch each footfall with fervor, each lands with a crunch a hike through the mountains, such a beautiful sight the night is surrounding, must make use of the light my boots are in flight as I leap atop rocks down to the lakeside, and my seat on the docks... The sunset brilliant blood orange o'er distant hills pop the top of my bottle, tipped to the glass until my pilsner spills froth pouring out, a beer to relax my pole in the water, filled with cheer as I bask a clear night, not a cloud around crickets chirping soft, surrounded with sound I tilt the rod, lowered down to the ground and brace for the tug, a fish is bound to come out... Eyes heavy, my time to relax Surprised with a bite, barely in time to react the line almost snaps, but stays steady slowly pulling the reel, already tasting the breading imagining the grill, and the gravy I'll be spreading... A hard whip, this sucker's tough! clutching sharp with my grip, my thumb spinning up finally approaching, incoming my triumph, I can feel the fish closing, stomach rumbling with violence with a splash, the fish breaches the surface and lands at my feet, I see what I'd emerged with... A boot. God damnit. |
@Ness you have two hours
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My bad, lost interest in writing for this tb100. key styled something quick up for ya'll just now though
“Don’t go into the light” No one is scared of dying the terrifying part is regarding death. However, pain, misery, crying all alleviated when we start discarding breaths. So in a way, the greatest gift we can receive is a coffin maybe everything slips away when we go to sleep in the boxes Death can be peace, saving you from when your days are obnoxious Don’t go into the light, that is unless you want to stop feeling so mad. In that case, sprint towards it, disregarding every fear you’ve ever had So, when you put it like that, is it really that bad? |
Ullr's verse about catching a boot while fishing was the winner here.
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Yep, def a win for ULLR on this one
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little bit of rough terrain with some of the lines for ullr, not sure if he knows what usunder means either, some lines missed, forced, no rhymes, etc. but... better than ness, though if ness had held the feel of the first four lines for the entire piece (even if it were as short) it would have had my vote.
mvgt ullr |
So it’s clear ullr has a ready a verse set. While ness flew of a whim and probably freewrote his verse on the spot. Feeling ness’ overall idea tbh but ullr came prepared and basically showcased a more thought out verse. If we was judging solely on concept and creativity ness might of had a chance, but ullr was thorough so he gets the vote. Thanks fellas
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Thanks for all the votes guys, not sure how ya'll do things here but a 3-0 where I'm from is a K.O. And @Innovator yeah, this was a key style, hence the small line at the top. Ullr is actually one of my good friends so I had spoken with him before hand, but due to some shit going on I just wasn't feeling writing for this at all. Hit him up and told him I wasn't dropping but ended keying this up on the spot anyway. Good luck moving forward in this
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Ullr comedic twist ending to what seemed a serious piece gives him a clear win here. Random but funny. Hate to nit pick but there was a bit of mis-matching syllables without sounding like a dick but overall imagery was dope n the verse did what it set out to do, very good execution. Tighten that pen ullr, good verse Bro!
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