Proper verse with Lots of words
 

@White Earl
What you think of this?, for only my second try.

I like this man lyrics are cool, beat is cool as well. I do like your voice too I just feel like you could maybe bring the intensity to a higher level, it just sounds like you’re speaking to your audience instead of rapping to them. It might also help to throw down another track or two of vocals and layer them, I understand this was probably just something you throw together quick and didn’t really get too deep into the mixing process. Just some ideas from my standpoint, keep spitting man

Thanks for the feed @Adverse.
@corleone I know you'll like this man lol. Check it

Pretty good for early stuff man, flow is decent, and stayed on beat most of the time, lyrics wise I felt you were just making sure your were rhyming, content wise seemed like a freestyle. "my rhymes are worth their weight in carrots?" LOL

keep going its gets easier the more you do fo sho

lmao I think he meant as in 24 carat gold. Not in the Bugs Bunny sense.

Good grief

makes the line even worse, as that's not measurement of weight but purity if referring to "karat"

word

basically said his rhymes hold no weight, and I agree

marching towards the dawn, sword are drawn

this was dope. ^^^^

early1...thanks cor

shoutout to "Murkin_Dem"...
LATE EDIT**** Shoutout to BOTH (Murk too), BUT It's
"beingmyself0009" who wrote the bar: *****if this guys still ANYWHWERE on Text sites (@diablo @dull_boy)...not sure of other aliases...but at least back to 2011-2012 timeframe..
I saw him on Youtube, but pretty sure he may have been somewhere else...
He's the only bar I KNOWINGLY bit in this:

this beat is my new diet; (&)u should try it
good looks beingmyself0009; sick line and good little rhyme