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Fig 08-02-2020 07:10 AM

I'm trash now but I feel fine.
 
My life is a Joe Rogan podcast;
I showboat and bombast.
Trip until I'm godsmacked like totems on the tarmac.
if I said it just forget it then, pathetic with prophetic sense.
Eclectic mesh of fire memes and self prescribed medicines.
Hung to dry degenerate.
Mopey guy excrement.
Opening my eyes to things encoded in the skies...
And knowing that it's lies.
Poking fun at times because it's coping in disguise.
Plagued by inertia like the loading screen of life.
Stayed the same styled person that I've forcibly denied.
What's a mile high excursion when the earth beneath provides?

Exis 08-03-2020 10:37 PM

This would fly in audio...thought flow wise shit hit, middle section was nice Fig.Should be more active...unless you have 37 names like most cats ;)

Rtf sometime...stay upright bro.

Adverse 08-04-2020 09:50 AM

This is dope. I agree would go a long ways in audio dope flow and vocabulary was top notch

Zaddy 08-04-2020 11:16 AM

Absolute fire

Props!

Hush 08-04-2020 12:40 PM

Nice

Etherwave 08-23-2020 10:42 AM

Good use of vocab which is something I admire in any piece. No missteps in flow. Great piece!

Objective 09-01-2020 10:18 PM

Enjoyed it quite a bit as well, short and sweet. Left me wanting more tho, might be the effect you were looking for. Also like the idea of an audio of this, the way it ended I envision a back'n'forth dialogue on social commentary and reflection of self. Either way, good read, stay up.

Geno 09-01-2020 11:11 PM

Fig da gawd


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