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Pharaohs Army vs. Jilti {Jilti wins}

10-16 lines due monday
Match first to drop
@Pharaohs Army

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*i will be making votes by late Saturday or early Sunday

(oh)i know what they sayin now: "jilti is Padding-'is-Record"- but even though you've beaten me,Previously
real emcees know- that i'm actually better..
i don't need til mon-day for sharp words and tactical letters
and if you've started another 1 of your Half-Ass\lame-ass Drops u will have 2 amend it
hmu in the pm's u overrated fuck- igots battle Concepts ta lend you.
cryin about the streets 'v L.A.. 'en "you dunno what i BEEN thru!" :-(
here i am Again Dude.. what u gonna DO?
and don't even start , with those Mixed Martial Arts
perceived as a relative novice, i said to myself
"i have a decent Chance- with HIM on the card."
but hey, jilti, don't feel bad- you can't win'em all
i know you're busy anyway, living the hood life- writing garbage on Internet Forum WALLS.
i mean. fuck, was i the start of your fall?
was it my Fault?,
u got jealous when you saw your bitch's phone 'n how she Took all my Calls?
she was pleading me"traverse the country"- so she could suck on my balls.

this like our fourth time battling. sword, knife stabbin' ribs in
everyone'll see how much Guts the Army has without ever going on a mission
listen.. it's saturday night, bout to Head Out the Door y'all
hopefully u do the same when driving by a center divider reinforced wall
close to fallin off the edge. at the Breaking point, feeling pissed
one little twitch'll make me Snap,Arm.. then you'll know what mma really is
silly kid. ur verse ran outta steam early. fizzled out between wording
but we don't have to wait til the end to Catch a Phar Fade, & see him hurtin'
this girlie not a child of the military, but its the same meaning too
cuz when u hear Army Braaat.. that's me calling ur name when i shoot

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army (Post 530917)

(oh)i know what they sayin now: "jilti is Padding-'is-Record"- but even though you've beaten me,Previously
real emcees know- that i'm actually better..
no
i don't need til mon-day for sharp words and tactical letters
and if you've started another 1 of your Half-Ass\lame-ass Drops u will have 2 amend it
poorly written
hmu in the pm's u overrated fuck- igots battle Concepts ta lend you.
cryin about the streets 'v L.A.. 'en "you dunno what i BEEN thru!" :-(
what are you trying to say?
here i am Again Dude.. what u gonna DO?
and don't even start , with those Mixed Martial Arts
just a filler bar, you could have made it into something
perceived as a relative novice, i said to myself
"i have a decent Chance- with HIM on the card."
ok
but hey, jilti, don't feel bad- you can't win'em all
i know you're busy anyway, living the hood life- writing garbage on Internet Forum WALLS.
this one was good
i mean. fuck, was i the start of your fall?
was it my Fault?,
u got jealous when you saw your bitch's phone 'n how she Took all my Calls?
she was pleading me"traverse the country"- so she could suck on my balls.
cool

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti (Post 531149)

this like our fourth time battling. sword, knife stabbin' ribs in
everyone'll see how much Guts the Army has without ever going on a mission
good multis
listen.. it's saturday night, bout to Head Out the Door y'all
hopefully u do the same when driving by a center divider reinforced wall
cool
close to fallin off the edge. at the Breaking point, feeling pissed
one little twitch'll make me Snap,Arm.. then you'll know what mma really is
well played off his line. good
silly kid. ur verse ran outta steam early. fizzled out between wording
but we don't have to wait til the end to Catch a Phar Fade, & see him hurtin'
haha good
this girlie not a child of the military, but its the same meaning too
cuz when u hear Army Braaat.. that's me calling ur name when i shoot
killed it with this

fair is in vote goes to jilti

Jilti, continue to work on complexity on your bars. gj tho

Army you need to work on making your lines make sense, and relevant. dont just put fillers that dont make sense.

yeah, that style won't cut it here, pharoah
this the elite of text
you had almost one punch with the 'took all my calls' bar
but still just straightforward statement shit, no wordplay, no nameplay, boring dreck
didn't even have to read past jilt's opener.
he killed you

v/jilt

Think jilti got this comfortably. Wasnt feeling other dude much at all. Eh. Yeah vote jil

pharoah was just talkin lol
jilti's opener and closer were bangers

v jilti

Jilti bodies here.

PA you need to take a look at some battles and get the idea of set up. Punch. Concept. Wordplay. Personals. Creativity. Homophones. Anything. Rather see played stuff. This came across as a 13 year old in the early 2000s who had just discovered eminem. Not good dude.

vote - Jilti

Took this confortable. Co sign with the rest of the voters. Pharoahs had 1 decent line while Jilti came around with the total package

Yeah jilti took this easy just for simply having punches.

Vote- jilti

Pharaoh has to rhyme

Name play every bar by JIL was gay as fuck but he had the better verses, hands down.

Phar Fade and Snap Arm were cool

Jilt got this easily

Jilti put on a clinic here.

It was over at his second line with the head out the door shit, just more creative angles and better wording, more effective punches overall.

Not a lot to really say.

I finally got pharoahs rhymescheme lol. Abab but nice stuff flow coolbut no ounvhes where as jilti just went on cruise control with this showcase I must call it rather than battle.

V. Jilti for overall bars

J had a better verse than P
P practice you'll get better

vote- J

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army (Post 530917)

(oh)i know what they sayin now: "jilti is Padding-'is-Record"- but even though you've beaten me,Previously
real emcees know- that i'm actually better..
i don't need til mon-day for sharp words and tactical letters
this bar structure is fucking weird. you gotta come dope to pull this kinda shit off and this was meh. punch is also kinda nonsense.
and if you've started another 1 of your Half-Ass\lame-ass Drops u will have 2 amend it
hmu in the pm's u overrated fuck- igots battle Concepts ta lend you.
cryin about the streets 'v L.A.. 'en "you dunno what i BEEN thru!" :-(
i have no idea what this is supposed to mean. it does feel like i diss but i couldn't tell you why or how.
here i am Again Dude.. what u gonna DO?
and don't even start , with those Mixed Martial Arts
perceived as a relative novice, i said to myself
"i have a decent Chance- with HIM on the card."
i like some of the internal rhymes here but this is a battle. you need to attack stronger than this.
but hey, jilti, don't feel bad- you can't win'em all
i know you're busy anyway, living the hood life- writing garbage on Internet Forum WALLS.
weak diss, but this is in the direction of better
i mean. fuck, was i the start of your fall?
was it my Fault?,
u got jealous when you saw your bitch's phone 'n how she Took all my Calls?
she was pleading me"traverse the country"- so she could suck on my balls.
this is a diss but you're still missing any sort of punch.

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti (Post 531149)

this like our fourth time battling. sword, knife stabbin' ribs in
everyone'll see how much Guts the Army has without ever going on a mission
meh. you can do better than this.
listen.. it's saturday night, bout to Head Out the Door y'all
hopefully u do the same when driving by a center divider reinforced wall
wording is off here. need this to be harsher.
close to fallin off the edge. at the Breaking point, feeling pissed
one little twitch'll make me Snap,Arm.. then you'll know what mma really is
light but this is ok.
silly kid. ur verse ran outta steam early. fizzled out between wording
but we don't have to wait til the end to Catch a Phar Fade, & see him hurtin'
not feeling this
this girlie not a child of the military, but its the same meaning too
cuz when u hear Army Braaat.. that's me calling ur name when i shoot
light. kinda meh, kinda ok.

jilti didn't really seem very into this battle and pharaoh seems to be still getting used to text battling so this was a little disappointing to me. jilti ive definitely seen better stuff from you, but i guess you saw his verse and didn't really care.

pharoah was interesting to read, but more for the unusual structure and rhyme schemes than any of the battle content. seems like you might be transitioning from a different writing style, so keep in mind the biggest thing is battles is to bring the punches. you need some sort of flip or interesting concept for your bars.

either way, i have jilti winning this with a better verse, even if it had a few weak points.

Vote jilti

this is a great thread.. every comment.. thank you all for taking the time. it's registering (finally). btw i'm bein deadass