being. deadman
the stagger home of a drunkard. passed with no introduction
Battletoads into lunch with the smell of casserole in the oven cooked yesterdays. lit tomorrow’s. quick to follow happiness is a model ship. I spotted it within a bottle drink to wallow in my own filth. Netflix, no chill got a phone bill where I owe zilch. my posts real oatmeal molehills for breakfast. i spoon fed you my lies with a pearl necklace in mind. the thought semen-ted inside ever the bridesmaid, never the groom. gender confused textbook buffoon, social justice warrior millennial fool brexit is cool. recyclings fun. try it for once eco brick modular furniture. plastic by-products suck life of a humous-eating fuckin’ vegan. save ur sympathy text picking at vegetables. is it any wonder I wish I was dead quick to contest a grammar nazi. google genius in waiting fair trade coffee shop revolutionary meaningless statements i need a vacation. i need a vocation. can’t be jobless forever logically whether I like it or not it’s time I got it together constantly never acting my age. puerile Peter Pan feeling angst under my mothers ceiling fan. I’ll never be a man easy as @Pharaohs Army |
Technical aspects 10 out of 10.
Subject matter and wording 5 or 6 out of 10. You definitely nailed the style. Next time make it about booze, ashtrays, amps, and ennui. |
lmao I didn’t realise you were critiquing them
you just said you couldn’t do the technical things so I keyed something to show you how ill do one with more “deadman” content next |
This is not good.
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yeah, idk man. i guess? sorta kinda?
its a flattering gesture so thanks |
in retrospect this wasnt all that bad. but bb does it better
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I enjoyed this as a lars verse.
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ngl parts were humorous. it was vaguely deadman-y after 'pearl necklace'.
also significantly better than any imitation i remember pharaoh conjuring so, to that end, job done. |
Eŋg is garbage.
That is all. |
aero wrote it
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i searched for a stilted wordplay in this post but found none. you got me. |
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