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UPN Zuch 12-01-2020 12:19 PM

WEEK 9: Fracture 3-1 VS Wanderer 5-3 FRAC WINS
 
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Good luck, gentlemen

Wanderer 12-01-2020 01:46 PM

Ok..

Fracture 12-01-2020 01:50 PM

14 cool?

Wanderer 12-01-2020 01:58 PM

Sure dude.. this should be good

Wanderer 12-03-2020 03:56 AM

ended up with 16.. sent @Fracture

Fracture 12-04-2020 10:17 PM

Y
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Im a god to my peers, every slaughters revered
& now that destroyer has dementia youre not even the best wanderer here
You dont have bad ideas but youre sorry with words
A good wand verse is a needle in a haystack, that a junkie already searched
Keep you alive until everyone you knows souls vanquished
Bury ya crew.. Now u like garth, got friends in low places
He a pussy whos forever inside and never wins fights
You aint about the hard knocks.. This rapist prefers the element of surprise
Ill break ya ribs in, make your chin split
An uppercut will have this challenger mid air exploding on some '86 shit
Ya chicks clit looks like a portal. Shes had many dicks
Lost my rubber in her.. Hoffa will be found before that jimmy is
After one sniff you can tell that bitch is just spoilin
Yea I still piped her down, at least the pieces of her that fit in the toilet
Its so sad... Wands nbl run looks more like awkward steps
Your record stinks.. Ill use it to throw the homicide detectives off my scent

UPN Zuch 12-04-2020 10:39 PM

Wanderer verse:


Ajax made you cry when he asked if you were off your meds, well..

Fuck ya brewed up feelings. Act cool but we can smell tears
More than bottled up emotions.. they been aged in a barrel for at least 12 yrs
Nothing scares me.. No crew or cartel, yo
To be Blunt.. ur in over ya head with an assassin like she was in Sicario
Im dope.. this snitch’s soft bars have never been fire
I must confess; shit u say makes me seem even more killa like ya wearing a wire
If I’m not feeling plan A, I’ll write bars as backup & still wreck it
u’ve got Beelines planned.. so when u get stomped u can dash for the exit
U want fans on NC but who the fuck is this geek?
G’luck tryna jumpstart a following when u probs get followed & jumped every week
We won’t get along & that’s a statement of pure facts
If I ever hit it off with u it’s a piece of ya cranium with my bat
Kill u on ur travels. U created this situation..
So when my last resort is violence urs is the next place u go on vacation
Ur winning never. Grab the tools & ur shit’ll sever
Givin’ u no chance. Middle-aged romance; these 2 40’s spark til they click together

fraze 12-05-2020 12:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Fracture (Post 794910)
Im a god to my peers, every slaughters revered
& now that destroyer has dementia youre not even the best wanderer here
this is cool
You dont have bad ideas but youre sorry with words
A good wand verse is a needle in a haystack, that a junkie already searched
cool idea. this almost misses to me without saying 'find' somewhere, but i'll give it to you
Keep you alive until everyone you knows souls vanquished
Bury ya crew.. Now u like garth, got friends in low places
ok. kinda light
He a pussy whos forever inside and never wins fights
You aint about the hard knocks.. This rapist prefers the element of surprise
this doesn't rhyme to me and the wording feels off. concept is ok.
Ill break ya ribs in, make your chin split
An uppercut will have this challenger mid air exploding on some '86 shit
nice concept. wording is just good enough to make it hit
Ya chicks clit looks like a portal. Shes had many dicks
Lost my rubber in her.. Hoffa will be found before that jimmy is
this is cool and very creative but not the hardest hitting punch.
After one sniff you can tell that bitch is just spoilin
Yea I still piped her down, at least the pieces of her that fit in the toilet
this is ok. pieces bars are over done but piped her down was a fresh flip
Its so sad... Wands nbl run looks more like awkward steps
Your record stinks.. Ill use it to throw the homicide detectives off my scent
don't like your wording but this is still cool

Quotes: dementia/wanderer, needle/junkie, challenger, piped her down
Close: garth, jimmy hoffa, record stinks

You have some dope ideas, I can't really front on you. Stylistically I don't like the way you angle some of your punches but you consistently bring fresh concepts so keep doing you.


Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer (Post 794913)
Fuck ya brewed up feelings. Act cool but we can smell tears
More than bottled up emotions.. they been aged in a barrel for at least 12 yrs
i see brewed/bottled/barrel but this isn't worded harsh enough for me. saying he was holding back emotions for 12 years isn't really a diss
Nothing scares me.. No crew or cartel, yo
To be Blunt.. ur in over ya head with an assassin like she was in Sicario
get the Blunt flip. similar name flips have been done. over ya head with an assassin is a ok angle, but its a pretty light diss
Im dope.. this snitch’s soft bars have never been fire
I must confess; shit u say makes me seem even more killa like ya wearing a wire
i don't get this wordplay to be honest. maybe i'm dumb, but usually that means its a stretch anyway
If I’m not feeling plan A, I’ll write bars as backup & still wreck it
u’ve got Beelines planned.. so when u get stomped u can dash for the exit
this is dope. one of my favorite lines this week
U want fans on NC but who the fuck is this geek?
G’luck tryna jumpstart a following when u probs get followed & jumped every week
'probs' waters down your punch. bar is also kinda light.
We won’t get along & that’s a statement of pure facts
If I ever hit it off with u it’s a piece of ya cranium with my bat
wording is a little awkward. hit it off is pretty simple
Kill u on ur travels. U created this situation..
So when my last resort is violence urs is the next place u go on vacation
i don't like the way you worded the punch but this is still cool
Ur winning never. Grab the tools & ur shit’ll sever
Givin’ u no chance. Middle-aged romance; these 2 40’s spark til they click together
idea is ok. 2 guns clicking together is light as a punch

Quotes: Beelines, last resort
Close: opener, Blunt, middle aged romance

You have some nice bars in here but there were a couple things that were light to me with the angle you took on them. aged in a barrel, over ya head, click together.... all were cool concepts to me that weren't worded harsh enough to outweigh the punches from Fracture.

Vote: Fracture I have Fracture with more quotes here. Dude has a lot of fresh concepts, he didn't leave a lot of room for mistakes. Wanderer had a nice verse but a couple misses is enough to make you lose against this kind of competition.

Scout 12-05-2020 01:51 PM

Frac

Im a god to my peers, every slaughters revered
& now that destroyer has dementia youre not even the best wanderer here

You dont have bad ideas but youre sorry with words
A good wand verse is a needle in a haystack, that a junkie already searched
Ya chicks clit looks like a portal. Shes had many dicks
Lost my rubber in her.. Hoffa will be found before that jimmy is

Hard knocks & challenger were close. Both dope ideas, just not feeling the execution of em
Cool verse, tho not as consistent as yours usually are
Opener is fire and possibly lotb. Haven't read wand yet


Wand

If I’m not feeling plan A, I’ll write bars as backup & still wreck it
u’ve got Beelines planned.. so when u get stomped u can dash for the exit
Kill u on ur travels. U created this situation..
So when my last resort is violence urs is the next place u go on vacation

Almost didn't quote last resort. Lazy execution
Seemed like an off week for you my dude. I was really looking forward to this one too

Frac got it

Swerve 12-05-2020 07:19 PM

Im a god to my peers, every slaughters revered
& now that destroyer has dementia youre not even the best wanderer here
Ill break ya ribs in, make your chin split
An uppercut will have this challenger mid air exploding on some '86 shit
Ya chicks clit looks like a portal. Shes had many dicks
Lost my rubber in her.. Hoffa will be found before that jimmy is

piped down and record stinks were awful, but the quoted 3 were solid. wording on challenger made it tight. otherwise consistently ok.

vs.

If I’m not feeling plan A, I’ll write bars as backup & still wreck it
u’ve got Beelines planned.. so when u get stomped u can dash for the exit
U want fans on NC but who the fuck is this geek?
G’luck tryna jumpstart a following when u probs get followed & jumped every week
Ur winning never. Grab the tools & ur shit’ll sever
Givin’ u no chance. Middle-aged romance; these 2 40’s spark til they click together

the two lines I quoted first were very nice. bottled line was killed on execution but was almost there. the misses were a lot bigger than Fracs though - like that hit it off line was just awful. the click 40s idea was dope, but their was no punch.

V/ Frac

iSpaz 12-06-2020 01:40 PM

Im a god to my peers, every slaughters revered
& now that destroyer has dementia youre not even the best wanderer here

You dont have bad ideas but youre sorry with words
A good wand verse is a needle in a haystack, that a junkie already searched
He a pussy whos forever inside and never wins fights
You aint about the hard knocks.. This rapist prefers the element of surprise

Vs

Fuck ya brewed up feelings. Act cool but we can smell tears
More than bottled up emotions.. they been aged in a barrel for at least 12 yrs
If I’m not feeling plan A, I’ll write bars as backup & still wreck it
u’ve got Beelines planned.. so when u get stomped u can dash for the exit
We won’t get along & that’s a statement of pure facts
If I ever hit it off with u it’s a piece of ya cranium with my bat

V/frac. Would have voted wand if frac didnt have that first bar, it was fire

evaD 12-07-2020 02:59 AM

This was a good battle both had some fire

Frac opener was fire and an actual fresh name flip on wand is impressive this days. Probably lotb. Tbh I liked the entire verse except the closer.

Wand - sicario and beeline were dope. Hit it off was nice but the rhyme is off so isn’t quite a haymaker. Opener could’ve been worded better and last resort definitely is a concept but could’ve been angled harder I think.

Nice showing from both but Frac opener killed it and he had less misses

Vote - frac


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