Netcees - "Roses" - Club Remix - Dope Girl (no-show verse) feat. Pharaohs Army

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"Roses" - Club Remix - Dope Girl (no-show verse) feat. Pharaohs Army

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dope girl (Post 830761)

"Roses"
He make sure I'm tight.
He there to make sure everything alright,
My baby buy me anything.
He brought me Diamond ring,

(Yea) She be my Ice Queen
,'Y'she Got tha diamond ring!
All the fine things; she ask-me "daddy: 'watya' !buy me?!"
yo 'n she say-

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dope girl (Post 830761)

My man never leave me lonely.
I ride him like a pony.
I got a myself a good dude.
He bring roses to keep me in the mood.
Roses really smell like Vallina,
I'll be your Baddie.
He want me cause I got a phatty,

[ha-ha..ur trunk ma?, or the joint(''t's)makin' ya chatty?]

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army (Post 830782)

Gladly Smoke A Fatty On Saturday So I Can Be Happy

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army (Post 830782)

Never fear, daddy. I got that ear candy…Don’t Be Mad@me!...

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dope girl (Post 830761)

I want a baby.
I make you my baby daddy,
I'm the one he wanna know.
He dig my flow,
He said it's flawless.

She('s) got-me-hot;
like she read my thoughts
On the streets?I wanna be-a-boss
-SETTLE DOWN w/ ICE-queen.
don't b mad@me, ice queen

her Flow's Flawless, we Drop Club Hits - from 'Norleans',ta Boston...

...all-she-want some Roses~

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dope girl (Post 830761)

My baby buy me anything.
He brought me Diamond ring,(X2?)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vwWLuxbIsJo

fuckin' RAWWWW Lol.

So bendable that flow here...

@Dope girl's most technically sound piece by far...every word here of hers was used, and that closing "Hook" couplet is her 3rd and 4th line.
the "phatty" couplet in the next stanza is just fire from a technical standpoint. She used "cause" perfectly. NOT "because, bcuz, cuz",,, just the proper cause for the bar.
EXCELLENT, my ice queen.

Thanks

This is off the hook

I kinda "know what you're doing" hun.
At this point in the game.

It's called inflection. Your whole verse is able to be delivered in many different ways.

@Everyone notice:
-the extra rhyme of "roses" 3 lines BELOW "lonely", allows for a "flow style #2" for sure...in other words alternative deliveries
-the phatty line i referenced before, notice the beautiful "want"/"got" internal rhyme,
-and of course, the actual closer...the final 3 lines can be said medium(normal), OR FAST & SICK/syncopated
I'm the one he wanna know.
He dig my flow,
He said it's flawless.
Indeed, DG..Let's gooooo...draw out that flawwless, for norleans to boston lol

You focused on technical /flow and it showed this week- I've never seen your verse so tight, pardon the word.

Thanks for the feedbacks <3

you are a good writer too

No prob. All I really need to hear feedback wise. Simply put. I should of course “relax” now, but I’ve committed to so much feedback or vote that I might have to wait till Sunday to return to hibernation. and end the vortex.

And Up, for her brand new one.
Get it?
for-her-brand-
worst wordplay.

3/5 EDIT:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dope girl

Hello

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ONE TAKE ALL IT TAKES LOL
Of course we'll just loop a few and work it out later. @Dope girl
MY VERSION in MAY - U SHOW ME YOURS?!!!
Much love,
~PA

Audio Take (Unpolished)

https://soundcloud.com/user-33750237...-for-dope-girl

Here hun
@Dope girl

Not sure if I am going to mix this...
If my friend does it later this month I will post the new/polished but...

?NETCEES HAS TO SEE THIS RIGHT?
Hope you like it.
Great verse DG.

~PA