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Incredible 06-04-2018 11:28 PM

WK 5: Championship: Cred 2-0 vs. DynamiCz 2-2 - DynamiCz WINS!!
 
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@Cred @DynamiCz

Cred 06-05-2018 07:21 AM

My nigga.


Cash..

DynamiCz 06-05-2018 10:17 AM

Fammo

iN....

DynamiCz 06-07-2018 08:30 PM

16 magazines in the clip ready homie!
@Cred

DynamiCz 06-08-2018 11:30 PM

Today I'm putting the preacher to work, you in a box we ammo the weapons
On signal! Emerge and see flashes from a line of vehicles-funeral procession
Cred the new dynasty? My motive to kill will leave everybody dying
Shots fired! When you see pops fuck up a empire-it ain't Lucious Lyons
We both talking with guns, shit get heated when I remove the sleeve
This jew lie? Two palms on the grip when I shoot-NBA Summer League
Lets talk recoil! Aim at his mental soon as I get the 12 gauge pump in
From a bridge! Make you freefall with ropes to your ankles-that's bungee jumpin
I learned by you! If my weed Blue Magic-i probably would of smoke blue too
I stay running the mac, if it break I know how to fix it myself-computer guru
Soon as you roll a backwood, your hands crumble the leafs from flinching
Homicide you missing! Tourney partner gone need a fill in like a nail technician
I know a blood that watch nickalodeon, still run in the event & pull ya card
The wrong tone, I'll have Slime cover up a star on stage-Kids Choice Awards
Simple punches vs haymakers-This Tyson before they had his boxing rep diminish
2 Piece w/ the combo, have you seated w/ the double decker-you in a bus from british!

Incredible 06-09-2018 08:35 AM

Cred no shows! DynamiCz is the new Champion!

GUDELJ 06-09-2018 02:45 PM

The champ deserves some feed fellas

]Today I'm putting the preacher to work, you in a box we ammo the weapons
On signal! Emerge and see flashes from a line of vehicles-funeral procession
emergency wp is old but I liked how you did this and flipped It. Cool
Cred the new dynasty? My motive to kill will leave everybody dying
Shots fired! When you see pops fuck up a empire-it ain't Lucious Lyons
yooooo I fuck w/ it!
We both talking with guns, shit get heated when I remove the sleeve
This jew lie? Two palms on the grip when I shoot-NBA Summer League
mmm I think the problem w/ this is pullin the Jew reference out of the air, has no relevance to cred so it hurt this here
Lets talk recoil! Aim at his mental soon as I get the 12 gauge pump in
From a bridge! Make you freefall with ropes to your ankles-that's bungee jumpin
ok
I learned by you! If my weed Blue Magic-i probably would of smoke blue too
I stay running the mac, if it break I know how to fix it myself-computer guru
alright this is cool but doesn’t have much impact as a punch tho
Soon as you roll a backwood, your hands crumble the leafs from flinching
Homicide you missing! Tourney partner gone need a fill in like a nail technician
lmao this made me laugh. Pretty creative I liked it
I know a blood that watch nickalodeon, still run in the event & pull ya card
The wrong tone, I'll have Slime cover up a star on stage-Kids Choice Awards
you know I love me some cartoon bars, this was cool
Simple punches vs haymakers-This Tyson before they had his boxing rep diminish
2 Piece w/ the combo, have you seated w/ the double decker-you in a bus from british!
nahhhh. British isn’t the term you’re looking for. It’s britain lol. I see what you were going for but didn’t work out


Overall pretty cool verse, congrats on champing regardless if it’s a no show or not

Lenox 06-09-2018 03:28 PM

Dy: nba summer league, tourney partner lol, kids choice awards,

Lenox 06-09-2018 03:29 PM

Nice verse bro

Jabari Black 06-09-2018 07:38 PM

Today I'm putting the preacher to work, you in a box we ammo the weapons
On signal! Emerge and see flashes from a line of vehicles-funeral procession

(Ha! This is a good opener! ‘Emergency flashes from a line of vehicles’ is a very long phrase and you flipped it perfect.)

Cred the new dynasty? My motive to kill will leave everybody dying
Shots fired! When you see pops fuck up a empire-it ain't Lucious Lyons

(Nice)

We both talking with guns, shit get heated when I remove the sleeve
This jew lie? Two palms on the grip when I shoot-NBA Summer League

(This was okay. The concept is creative. I know some folks use Jew as just a slang term but feels kinda forced in to make the wp fit. Then I can’t put my finger on it but NBA summer league doesn’t seem like the right metaphor to me.)

Lets talk recoil! Aim at his mental soon as I get the 12 gauge pump in
From a bridge! Make you freefall with ropes to your ankles-that's bungee jumpin

(Decent. The punch was simple here. I do like that you’re able to have a wide variety of attack bars as opposed to all gun bars. Personally, I’m not opposed to all gun bars but it does make your verse feel fresh and creative)

I learned by you! If my weed Blue Magic-i probably would of smoke blue too
I stay running the mac, if it break I know how to fix it myself-computer guru

(Pretty good. Not too direct but the line itself is good)

Soon as you roll a backwood, your hands crumble the leafs from flinching
Homicide you missing! Tourney partner gone need a fill in like a nail technician

(Ha this is fire!)

I know a blood that watch nickalodeon, still run in the event & pull ya card
The wrong tone, I'll have Slime cover up a star on stage-Kids Choice Awards

(Yep this is good. I’ve heard a slime/blood/Nickelodeon flip before. It wasn’t close to this line but it did take away from the line slightly)

Simple punches vs haymakers-This Tyson before they had his boxing rep diminish
2 Piece w/ the combo, have you seated w/ the double decker-you in a bus from british!

(Good closer. Letting ‘British’ slide even though it should be ‘Britain’. This was pretty clever)


Dope verse man. Really wish Cred woulda showed because this match coulda been crazy. For two punchers, y’alls styles are so different it woulda been dope to see y’all styles clash again.

Anyways dope verse. Two things stand out to me. One is the creativity. You’re able to come up with dope concepts and your wording, it’s like your painting the picture and we can ‘see’ he punch.

Second, on the technical side, you’re able to flip long phrases (ie the funeral procession line).

Congrats on becoming champ. Even with the no show I feel it’s well deserved.

Schadenfreude 06-09-2018 08:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DynamiCz (Post 672245)
Today I'm putting the preacher to work, you in a box we ammo the weapons
On signal! Emerge and see flashes from a line of vehicles-funeral procession
Decent, but the execution could've been smoother
Cred the new dynasty? My motive to kill will leave everybody dying
Shots fired! When you see pops fuck up a empire-it ain't Lucious Lyons
Would've been more effective if he had a crew
We both talking with guns, shit get heated when I remove the sleeve
This jew lie? Two palms on the grip when I shoot-NBA Summer League
He's hispanic, not jewish & again overworded, get the punch off quicker
Lets talk recoil! Aim at his mental soon as I get the 12 gauge pump in
From a bridge! Make you freefall with ropes to your ankles-that's bungee jumpin
Clever
I learned by you! If my weed Blue Magic-i probably would of smoke blue too
I stay running the mac, if it break I know how to fix it myself-computer guru
Blue reference was rendered irrelevent, because it doesn't relate back to the punch. Overall cool, just get more personal.
Soon as you roll a backwood, your hands crumble the leafs from flinching
Homicide you missing! Tourney partner gone need a fill in like a nail technician
Another irrelevent set-up, concept's fresh, but you didn't make it relate.
I know a blood that watch nickalodeon, still run in the event & pull ya card
The wrong tone, I'll have Slime cover up a star on stage-Kids Choice Awards
Lol I actually like this, nostalgia reasons.
Simple punches vs haymakers-This Tyson before they had his boxing rep diminish
2 Piece w/ the combo, have you seated w/ the double decker-you in a bus from british!
Seen the concept utilized better.

I think I've told you before that I like your concepts, you just need to get harsher, cleaner execution. Get more personal & specific to your opponent & whatever personality/persona they're own for. Also pay closer attention to the longwinded manner in which you word ya bars. Even use a syllable count if necessary, at least until you write/read more naturally. Otherwise good verse tbh, nowhere near wack, just not as polished as it could be, 100.


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