Phobias/Supernovas
 

Trying something different out musically, hopefully y’all enjoy it, or ridicule it, it really doesn’t matter.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X7egRW070vo

not my cup of tea

bit too emo for my liking

also kinda just cliche lyrically; sleepless battles - reapers shadows. had a grip - losing hold etc.

its healthy to try different shit & express youself though - as cliche as that sounds lol so word on that.

Word man, appreciate the listen though

Way better than I expected...it is dope but seems like a few more takes to make it more polished. When you stated hope supernova part it abrupted killed the vibe... I would have to say that it was off beat on the patterning..so would work on that part to figure how to make it mesh like butter..feel me? Cadence, flow, rhythm wise.

"If i gotta go hope is beautiful as a super nova" felt to wordy and forced as fuck flow wise and sounded wierd. Also you obviously have text roots Which made some of your actual rhymes come off forced a few times.

Otherwise yo, i honestly thought this shit was super dope. Loved what you did.

I reuploaded and fixed the last line hope it flows better now @Master Rock @White Earl http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5PLqR_u1SQA

Also uploaded one more if you guys feel like checking that out

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r5CqVTmTo8c

Thanks for listening

Reallyike the first beat.. hope you're ok <3

I’m doing alright man, my mental health went to shit for a couple months but getting back to writing music has actually helped quite a bit.

I don’t don’t really fuck with this sort of subject matter. My little brother committed suicide for one, and I get depressed as well although I don’t tell anyone about it and doubt people can tell.

Musically I liked both beats, props if you made them, if not well.. not. You didn’t seem to flow with either of them all that well though. Your voice sounded fine for this type of thing etc though.

The first song sounded a lot smoother, as far as flow goes than the second one. Either way not bad, and if making depresso type music helps you then more power to you I suppose.

Madd props on taking the constructive criticism and rocking with it...now the track flows without a hiccup. I haven't peeped the second track but will as soon as I can and leave feedback on that one.

Loved the beat but I wasn’t crazy about the writing or delivery. I’ll take some time and come back with something more meaningful

Keep going

agreed with this btw.

& your seconds takes a fair bit better - particularly on the lines niggas told you about.

hemmingway had a shotgun joint was aiite also

i dont hate the vibe - just not my thing where im at currently - but i can appreciate the expression

then write & make more bruddah.