RND2. Remy LeBeau vs Witty {Remy Lebeau wins}
Battle Arena Tournament @Remy LeBeau @Witty Rules Due Dates:
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I don't blame you. yo. I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you |
/fox
Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. :) |
I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too
So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? nice! Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep ill ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time cool We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee decent Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you decent best verse i've seen on this site so far - i haven't read many - started off real nice and flaked towards the end - some of the latter bars got a bit lazy - weakest was the young zee line - didn't roll off the tounge as well as you started - but still very solid- good job. v Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. nice All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. okay lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. cool I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. nice U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. cool another solid verse - overall it was solid i don't have too much to critique in particular - i could be missing some of the lines because of personals - i think if you threw in a few multis this verse would have been way hotter. overall - vote Witty - this was a verse close battle - not much between the two verses but Witty had my favourite bar of the battle - good job to both. |
I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too
So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? - basic and old concept - did this back in 04 Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep - tough ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time - lol good We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee - good Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you - kind of falls in same cat as your opener, bro vs Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. - this doesn't make much sense - pink's lip? grammatically incorect as well, it would be pink lips All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. - nah friends owned/friend zone play? nah... mine was better on Unfuk back on RB in LLL lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. - this was tough tho I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. - madddddd wordy but dece U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. - madd wordy again but dece pretty even match here, 3 good bars from each but think witty wording helped his concepts transition a lot cleaner and smoother as where remy shits were long winded. tough call here but I'm going to edge this one too the witness for the simple fact, his misses were just slightly better and bar for bar, he got 1 off on remy. the witness 1 mean bar and 2 good ones as where remy had 1 mean bar and 2 dece, so thats where the decision came from otherwise this can go either way depending on preference witty w/ the edge |
Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep
Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time vs. Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. wasnt didnt ones opener and closer kinda hurt the verse overall one got this to me slightly even tho the other had the LOTB w/ rem sleep, he didn't give me that extra bar for the finish.. v/Remy |
Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep
Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee vs Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. Bit surprised here. Witty came wit it. Remy slacked. Thats jus how i seen it here. Remys punches weren't really harsh as im used to seeing him drop. Witty showed up tho n took the cake here. Young zee n rem dirt lines were nice. Wording was on point too Vote - witty |
[QUOTE=Witty;518521]^Aye...you realise you're in this tourney...right?? But you STILL think I'll win lol
I think like...yea...he prolly did know he was in the tourney too....probably I don't blame you. No really i think that...nevermind yo. Yo? R u gonna spit er wat fagut? I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? Well see I don't think that ...lol...nah...this was ok Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep Not bad ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time Can't make repayments in time? This is worded weird. Concept is cool tho We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee Meh Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you Statement an it wasn't that hard hitting to me /fox Frog Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. Seen too many pink slip lines before....aan has he even been in a pink slip scenario recently? This a miss for me All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. This is fire lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. Never seen it? I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. This a ffeed? Or coincedental. ...either way just a bland statement to me U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. This is ok :) Fuck u smiling at? Idk guys in didn't love this battle. My fav line was the friend zone shit from Remy ......lot of other shit I just wasn't digging from both....witty had some ok jabs but I'm Givin it to Remy for the Haymarket V remy |
I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too
So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? legit thing to state but you can make statements like that sting more imo Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep The more I think of it the less it works... good delivery though ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time ok We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee See where you're going with it but it's light IMO Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you another statement that is a personal idea but you can do more with imo Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. not feeling that All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. cool but the delivery is a lil boring to me. stilla legit hit lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. I want this to work but what is the flip? fox catcher? fox catch 'er? I get what you're doing but this could be harder imo I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. more of a statement but legit ammo to use. witty had 2 of these so I can't fault you any more than I did with him U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. cool idea but wording was dense uhhh fuck lemme get back to this |
rem sleep
vs Foxcatcher, voided got rem w/ one more quote wasn't feeling the opener from wit, just a lot of statementish stuff rem sleep was cool tho v/remy |
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Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep
Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep this line was RETARDED Witty had the best bar in this battle, but the rest of his verse didnt age well. Meaning when I first saw It I was like damn sick verse, but when I read it again today I was like damn this shit light. This is the first time I saw your angles miss in a battle. The personal route is sink or swim, u had a great idea with him basically saying he tought u was gonna win, and to me u didnt use it well at all. That hurt you. Then u had two reference punches one to eminm and one to gamble, those both missed to me. I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. This line is an example of going to personal route and having it come up roses. This line was mean af. So was the friends zone line, slight reach but it worked. Remy has a tendency to over word his lines which cant hurt, as u can see it ruined his closer. Opener was the same as friend zone, slight reach but managed to connect. This was Wittys to win if he came like he has in the past rounds. v/Rem |
Witty
Opener was an ok straight forward personal shot, I liked the next 3 but wasn't feelin the closer much remy Opener sounded weird, Next 2 were ok, winning the tourney coulda been less stretched n closer was cool Close match, I gotta go witty here tho man I felt his hits were harsher I mean rem was creative but execution was soft on a few but def a enjoyable read.. Gl Vote witty |
4-4 tie
must win by 2 |
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Help us decide this battle please. |
Tough one to call. Witty had the opener for me and I also liked the concepts to rem sleep and card charged. Only issue with them was there wasn't enough sting. Wording hurt the card charged. Great ideas slightly missed. All three quotable though
Remy who I shall refer to as Remus because my predictive text prefers it (its cool it means werewolf or some shit) had the friend zone line which was by far the bar of this battle. He also had a good concept with the fox catcher but just fell short again maybe it was wording and I also liked the sucked dick void bar that was good Overall not much in this battle but I feel Remus deffo had the harder hits. Both had great concepts throughout that went a miss in the actual punch. Vote remy |
Ehhhhhhhhhhh...
Witty had a boring opening punch, sure it might have been personal, but there was nothing really intelligent or creative done with it. Those lines suck unless they're harsh and assholish. REM sleep was cool but nowhere near as hype as Hush made out, there's been a couple REM lines done lately tbh. Lol. plus i hate the fuck outta using half a name or initials or some lame shit. maybe not half a name, but come on, its not pronounced AR EE EM its Remy and you know it. thats cheap. card charged was okayish. if your gonna use a current event, make it good. that straight flopped. hated how you used the same multi at the end as you had at the start of your verse too. its pretty sad cause i found this setup more humourous than i did remys verse/punches: lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. legit lol'd rest was pretty ass, guess you slept on him. pinks lip was a cool idea. foxcatcher was okay. everything worded awfully though as if keyed up. honestly, youve only yourself to blame here if he gets it. im giving a slight edge to remy on this one, based solely on his slight creatviity in pinks lip and foxcatcher. rest was ass. |
I'm your dark horse, killing all these veteran dudes and beheading 'em too
So, yo, Remy Lebeau... ...How you gonna compete, when u already admitted i'm better than you? Not the hardest opener. Statementish. Idgaf how many boys u got, you can still get this work if you're ten deep Gat make his eyes roll back in his head...then in the dirt is where REM sleep Jesus Christ. Dope. ^That's smart bars, here's another, I know his custom title plays on his mind He always get his card charged...cuz his broke ass can't make repayments in time Ehh We're chums b, but friendships a fine line, this a race i gotta win cuz I'm hungry Try to get past, i'll forget u exist so fast u'll think i'm slim n ur young zee Ehh again. Everyone thinks ur gamble, but I know ur rly just some lame veteran dude knew you weren't him when I saw ur bars...cuz even he is WAY better than you Statement closer. Didn't feel it tbh. Vs. Archives show he duck ban battles ALOT, I see fgts like him everyday in the world. Bitches never let em see the pink's lip.. n he avoided those matches like they was a girl. Ok All ur pics show girls keeping their distance, quit grasping for attention. U prob talk shit then watch as ur friends owned.. while girls do that n laugh at ur intentions. This was nice lol @ ur wrestling post, u prob think gay marriage = evolving. Yall seen the foxcatcher.. thats the only type of love story he'll ever be involved in. Eh I said u the dark horse but honestly- ya talent need to take some roids. Lol @ u winning the tourney.... Every text battle u had in the past u either no showed, or sucked a mods dick to make it void. Naw, not feelin U know wrestling's fake, easy bro I know to u that's some tragic shit. the fights are scripted.. but u fight to write a script where ur tag partner doesn't have to flip. Ok at best closer This was close. Took me a cpl reads to determine a winner... & I'm barely edging it to Witty. Both were just about even tbh, but Witty's haymaker REM line was nuts as fuck & LOTB... to me it outweighed alot of what Remy dropped & made up for his statementish misses. Remy had the friend zone shit which I thought was pretty nice.. & he didn't have as bad of misses as Witty did.. but to me that LOTB helped Wit edge this. Close, & props to both. Vote- Witty |
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