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Spoken 07-18-2013 07:06 PM

Write Night II: Adonis Vs. Coup - ADONIS WINS
 
TOPICAL KEYS TO GREATNESS

Welcome to the 1st Round

His Brothers Keeper

15 minutes to write 10 lines

G'Luck and make it dope



@Adonis
@Coup

Adonis 07-18-2013 07:17 PM

Fathom...a blood line of the first kind.
Famous father god tailored with loves twine.
A mother broken off from inside.
Molded to birth both of us in dim light.
Two brothers, young, creating seeds of all man.
One truely loved, the other jealously stands.
Enoughs enough, gripping hatred in rock.
Blood shed from jaw, god angered in awe and shock.
Adam sentenced to death, Cain soiled gods people.
Life is beautiful, but only when satan's not my brothers keeper.

Coup 07-18-2013 07:25 PM

That knife in his back was tipped in a virus
Felt it spiral up into his iris, ripping his life with
A cold chill, as he slumps into the hollow of a fox hole
As million screams trill onward, following the drum roll
In between no-mans-land and the safety of a trench
The bullets rip and hit, blades swirling and drenched
He lies there as boots and bayonets march past fast
Soiled in his own blood, at the hands of the last man,
Who would ever seem to do him in...in a derange manner
It was his partner, his 6 man, ....his brothers keeper

Fig 07-18-2013 07:27 PM

V/Adonis felt way more emotion in his. loved the cain and able allusion

Spoken 07-18-2013 07:28 PM

fuckin dope

shit i have to choose one

V/Adonis

Geno 07-18-2013 07:28 PM

good battle here, thought yall both seemed equally there topic wise -just a hgair bit of stray from each end. though coup had the dominant flow but honestlky feel adonis took the concept and stayed true to it a little nbetter. so even with a less enjoyed flow i feel adonis takes it.

v-adonis

NYCSPITZ 07-18-2013 07:31 PM

v/coup

Darth Yoda 07-18-2013 07:35 PM

Wow! this is exciting! I loved both! Very short lines from each, which was wonderful, adonis had the nice thought, but I loved coup as well!!!

it's taste wise, and I loved coups!

I am voting for coup, best of luck gentlemen.

Spoken 07-18-2013 07:47 PM

uppin over for a clear winner

Atomic 07-18-2013 07:47 PM

v/ coup

Rawn M.D. 07-18-2013 08:03 PM

V adon

better content to me

Meth 07-18-2013 08:09 PM

Adonis


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