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RND2 - En Sabah Nur vs Unfukwitable - UNFUKWITABLE WINS BY NOSHOW

RND2 Survivor tournament
Verses 10 lines min/max
a ko win guarantees you entry to next weeks battles
due - wednesday midnight
IF YOU DONT VOTE YOU LOSE VOTES AND ARE MORE LIKELY FOR ELIMINATION
I will pm everyone for there nominations once battles are getting voted on
you can nominate anyone on your team who hasnt won by KO
the losing team will lose 2 people, its double elimination, if its a draw one from each will go

@Unfukwitable @En Sabah Nur

Going to need an extension.

@En Sabah Nur aka Apocalypse/

Gin&Juice got this dude tricking on hoes w/ out a peep,
U'll see sluts 'blowin En dough' like Snoop Dogg rollin dwn the street.
U beg for pussy & get denied, I fuck hoes for fun,
&Ur Going thru a Dry spell that'll take more than Witch Rituals to overcome.
Ur a pain to me & ur Mom.. Just stop, dawg please,
When Im around Lypse tick'n us off, Due to her smudging hers on me.
I heard this fag swallows semen biscuits til he hurls, guys;
He's been draining pricks enough to replace Syringes worldwide.
Music? If I drop a EP I'll get calls to sit with Execs.,
If you drop something & get rings its only due to a ripple effect.

Cool verse. Liked the first two bars and the last two

Dry spell made me chuckle.

No @ Semen biscuits.

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Originally Posted by Unfukwitable (Post 441908)

@En Sabah Nur aka Apocalypse/

Gin&Juice got this dude tricking on hoes w/ out a peep,
U'll see sluts 'blowin En dough' like Snoop Dogg rollin dwn the street.
This was cool. Not a harsh punch but a jab.
U beg for pussy & get denied, I fuck hoes for fun,
&Ur Going thru a Dry spell that'll take more than Witch Rituals to overcome.
Cool concept. I feel like "Witch Rituals" sounds awkward in succession tho.
Ur a pain to me & ur Mom.. Just stop, dawg please,
When Im around Lypse tick'n us off, Due to her smudging hers on me.
Not really feeling this one.
I heard this fag swallows semen biscuits til he hurls, guys;
He's been draining pricks enough to replace Syringes worldwide.
Cool.
Music? If I drop a EP I'll get calls to sit with Execs.,
If you drop something & get rings its only due to a ripple effect.
Cool concept but I feel you could've done more with it.

Not a bad verse, but not one of your strongest either. I feel like some of the execution was down compared to other verses I've seen from you, but the concepts were good.

Snoop was cool idea but felt like a better flex line
Dry spell was ok
Lypse sticking was kinda stretched
Pricks was pretty basic
Closer was cool, my favorite line

Gin&Juice got this dude tricking on hoes w/ out a peep,
U'll see sluts 'blowin En dough' like Snoop Dogg rollin dwn the street.

concept there but the execution sucks. I think you could have executed this a tad bit harsher, something like; If any sluts blowin en dough, she looks like snoop dogg or something to that effect. Has more of an insult'ish impact.

U beg for pussy & get denied, I fuck hoes for fun,
&Ur Going thru a Dry spell that'll take more than Witch Rituals to overcome.

same as above.

Ur a pain to me & ur Mom.. Just stop, dawg please,
When Im around Lypse tick'n us off, Due to her smudging hers on me.

yea, this was a stretch. creative attempt but stretched to say the least.

I heard this fag swallows semen biscuits til he hurls, guys;
He's been draining pricks enough to replace Syringes worldwide.

again, you could have gotten harsher and used more of a relevant tie in on the concept.

Music? If I drop a EP I'll get calls to sit with Execs.,
If you drop something & get rings its only due to a ripple effect.

this was ok, I suppose.

conceptually your dope, NOQ but your executions lack. I think if you were to put more thought in to your executions and make them as harsh as possible, you'd be better off, my dude. decent drop, I'd say one of your weaker ones compare to your other verses i've peeped from you.

v/The HOE show'r. Lol