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[Round 1] 5. Resin/Saint vs 8. cum boyz [cum boyz advance]
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Check in by 12/31/2021 at 11:59 p.m. EST You won't be disqualified if you don't check in, but please just do it. It's a common courtesy ----------------------------------------------------------- Verses due Tuesday, 1/4/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST (yes, Eastern) It's a lot of time and not a lot of lines, don't ask for extensions ----------------------------------------------------------- 8 lines per team, no more & no less If both teams agree to it, you can do more than 8 lines. 8 is the absolute minimum. ----------------------------------------------------------- All the usual rules apply (No biting, recycling, pm'ing for votes, etc.) If you complete your verse early, feel free to post it or send it to me via PM. I will only post verses once both teams have submitted. Don't bitch about votes. If you have any complaints, PM me directly and I will assess the situation. Votes without explanations or that appear to be aliases will not be accepted @Resin M-I-C @Saint @bare ryu @Answer |
bare ryu/Answer
asian house party…til shots from the 12 gauge start disturbing the function you’ll see more kicks at the front door than people observing our customs dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in |
Answer/Bare Ryu
Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair. That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming. AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare. send em back to RR w/ news our levels just too high.. ya'll carrier pidgeons on our path.. footnotes who'll end up cutting ties. |
Answer / Bare
Kickd at the door was nice / dont like avy bars & I'm not going to look his up / red rover was cool but arm bars are overdone / Aladdin treasure I wanted to like it bc I like your Disney bars but this was too wordy. Resin / Saint Curl bang the payoff just isn't there for this / you be yalling speech? Nah this ain't it / auto family running bar NICE! / carrier pigeons creative but no sting Answer and Bare had slightly better content. Vote: Answer / Bare |
asian house party…til shots from the 12 gauge start disturbing the function
you’ll see more kicks at the front door than people observing our customs I read this before the edit and liked the original version a lot. This is still good but you should’ve left the wording alone IMO. This format is safer I guess? dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press OK this was really annoying bc where the fuck is Resin for me to look at his avvy. I had to fucking search his name and look at it and then come back to this thread. This is good. The “I’m” should’ve been an “&” though - would’ve been a smoother wp. whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body The wordplay is fire but it’s more of a flex than a diss. droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in Nice. Dig it. Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair. Good. If you could’ve worded ‘bangs’ in there rather than ‘bang’ it would’ve been even better to tie in with the hair wp. That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming. Seen/used the toast wp but the personal tie in makes this cool. The wording could better. ‘A therapist is coming’ isn’t harsh enough. AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare. Niiiiiice. I dig this. send em back to RR w/ news our levels just too high.. ya'll carrier pidgeons on our path.. footnotes who'll end up cutting ties. Cool idea. The footnotes wordplay is fresh and creative. The cutting ties add on is worded a little clunky. Some good bars in this battle. Sorry you’ve gotten no attention on it yet. Inf had some creative wordplays and the flintstones bar was really good but otherwise answer was just more consistent at executing his concepts well. Had that one bar that was maybe misplaced in a battle but otherwise it was a really solid verse and would’ve been hard to beat. V/ Answer |
asian house party…til shots from the 12 gauge start disturbing the function
you’ll see more kicks at the front door than people observing our customs I liked it, felt it could have hit harder maybe or been worded more harshly but not bad, just a light jab thrown. dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press I preferred the wording on this one, more aggressive and attacking the opposition. I’m not overly a fan of lines about people’s avatars to be quite honest, and it’s not like these two are unknowns with nothing to use against them so there should be a trove of stuff that could have been used other than the angle. This wasn’t bad; I just felt more could have been done and better utilised. whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body We’ve seen a few of these done similarly, off top I recall a trust exercise flip on a similar idea so I can’t give us as many props as I may have but I do appreciate the red rover twist on the older catching body idea. It’s executed well too. droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in This is good, nice concept to it, maybe a little wordy to have to get the full thing out but I fucked with it. Left field kind of attack and unexpected. |
Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair
scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair. I like this conceptually, the execution kind of let you down here to be honest. A lot of the time I enjoy the simple but effective route, this one seemed almost too simple a connection with the similie and that left it falling a bit flat to me right when it came to where the zing was needed. That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming. LOL I liked this right here, nice bit of misdirection earlier on to set up for the payoff. Nice little personal attack and this was done well. AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare. I’ve seen the Flintstones car referenced previously on diff lines but not around the Auto got ya whole fam running bare idea so this one gets props from me, I liked both the concept and execution here. It’s worded well, and it’s fresh to me, only mark against it for me is that it’s a generic insult where I prefer personals. send em back to RR w/ news our levels just too high.. ya'll carrier pidgeons on our path.. footnotes who'll end up cutting ties. Nice idea, not seen this done before either so it’s fresh to me. Again, I would have preferred something personal myself but as a generic bar it works and was worded well enough to hit. Vote - Answer/Bare Ryuu |
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asian house party…til shots from the 12 gauge start disturbing the function
you’ll see more kicks at the front door than people observing our customs this is hilarious. Idk if bare is also Asian but thats the impression I'm getting here. Could still work if he's not, but would be weird to say 'our'. dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press this is good use of the avy but it turned into me finding resins last post to explain it, kinda like having to Google a joke. Works, but the search hurts the impact whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body the is swaggy as fuck but isn't the hardest punch. Still a good bar droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in had to google, sorry. Dope idea but it's referencing a scene from a decades old movie that might not be fresh in everyone's head Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair. fire That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming. funny but something about thr delivery doesn't do it for me. Still funny enough to hit AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare. this feels like the kind of bar that made Jabari black so good. I fw it send em back to RR w/ news our levels just too high.. ya'll carrier pidgeons on our path.. footnotes who'll end up cutting ties. great technical writing but it doesn't do it for me as a punch Close, want to reread this later and vote Reread, slight edge for inf and resin. Thought they had harder hits but it's close. Answer nailed the prediction on this being the closest of the round imo. V/res/saint |
I swear i broke down this battle twice and it never posts.. wtf
dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in vs Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair. That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming. AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare. close battle here.. The Jessica Rabbit line had me like woaaa this is fire.. Answer cumz also had some good stuff like the avy line which made me LOL but was not as hard hittin as the jessica rabbits for me.. even being a personal. this could go either way tbh but I'm edging with resin/saint here with the LOTB.. matter of preference |
Answer/bare
Opener was cool, rest was solid, closer was a little clunky but cool concept Resin/Saint Opener was dece, speeeeech was jokes, last two bars kinda fell off, Cartier pidgeons was wtf. Too much going on there. After reading the start of resin/Saint verse I thought they were gonna pull out the W, unfortunately it fell off while answer/Ryu stayed the course with more solid stuff. Cool battle Vote answer/ryu |
probably the battle of the round displaying the most creativity, which i appreciate
answer and ryu-- tbh there wasnt really any misses.. aladdin treasure was worded great, clever, but at the end of the day its a disney reference and corny af by default. observing customs was sick, inclined to press was pretty cool and red rover was my LOTB Resin and Saints-- Jessica rabbit grew on me. good imagery, pretty original, only slight is kind of like the disney ref, and also the flinstone cars.. guys wtf is going on with these dope worded ideas that are cheesy in nature. takes away heat. speech was line of the verse, and the closer was way too wordy with little to no mustard gotta go with answer and ryu... more aggressive verse with lotb |
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