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Group Therapy Session (ft. Neighbor and Vulgar)
Equipped alien weaponery aimed directly at the planes trajectory
Traverse this plane wit telepathy; levitate out a blackhole wit a sign that reads... "R.I.P Malaysia Flight 370" Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue Mordors hordes weapons in view, fire at will; Admire the skill aim skyward and reel; drag ya leader back to the frontline and funeral pyre the kill Ya Lord Sire forreal; from start to finish I create and flow well I'm even a motherfucking psychopath at the check-in... welcome to Bates Motel. Mix Vodka, Kahula and Baileys - that's a recipe for disaster Getting Drunk in Washington protesting funerals with Westboro Baptists after You forced this laughter watch you grab ya throat vomiting Addicted to holy water promethazine ready to accept Morpheus peace offerings A cult following, popularity is the reason they rally Describing my crew? the Term 'In' is Welcome... more than Walking Dead's season finale Group Therapy session, psychiatrists diagnosis is clear and the beast inside is starting to tick... Captain Hooks Crocodile is near The Glock 9 that I'm grippin could start a bonfire.. I'll hog tie ya division A dogfighter w/ SWAT sniper precision; my strong right'd make God cry in submission W/ shots primed to go online in an instant, put the pistol-grip to ya neck Rippin into ya flesh; the grimmest picture of Death's sickle swingin in synergistic effect Constructin your fate w/ multiple blades I culled from the Ancients Approach your city carryin the skulls of the vanquished like the hull of a slave ship Summon the strength of Goliath.. hit like a Congo viper hocking saliva Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor A locust swarmin out the lotus blossom, the wrong one to go to war w/ Ronin swordsman in cloaking armor like a Trojan horse full of Roman Spartans A polar storm shiftin the global orbit, reached the pinnacle of lethal cynosure My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature Brain fires impulses from pilot's controls.. process data w/ dire results My mind make a diamond corrode; to write what I know'd leave you white as a ghost Or w/ Meyer syndrome.. I'm Einstein if he wired his skull to a nitrogen bulb A dynamo clone in a scientist's coat, deciphering rows of binary code I'll take a fictional setting and rake the thistle and webbing Nabatean idioms reckoned I'd face a zillion legends To skate the literal tempests - my ancient friends wouldn't mention Inept friars, protect ya neck fibers when I'm raving to GZA with clenched fists Let's make it simple as Reddit; if Para & Saber's gripping the weapon you're off to a rocky start boxin' with the old guard like Mason Dixon's obsession Just taste the venom, accept it - Pagan riddles erected If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments Overhaulin' with no balls - couldn't even scrape the Michelin's melon I'm eight parts phalanx, nine percent gold digger Five percent 5-Percenter, cypher set stone slinger Prescribing final deaths to idle lines of vets, no zingers cause V's an unsympathetic, isometric cybersect CoHpe stickler Megatron rebuilt by Chevy, the system's not gonna fall The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws Enough subtle teasing. No longer preachin' to Priory's A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory Another creature entirely with another creature inside of me @Neighbor @Vulgar |
Good shit, boys
Para started it off w/ the imagery & Vulgar's closer sealed the deal |
Nice work boys. We should do this again, consider this a warm up.
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This was coollllllll. Preferred Para's mid section & both neigh and vul's ending sections.. Good lyrical work out fellas.
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Constructin your fate w/ multiple blades I culled from the Ancients
Approach your city carryin the skulls of the vanquished like the hull of a slave ship imagery of this dopeeee A polar storm shiftin the global orbit, reached the pinnacle of lethal cynosure My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature dope. A+meta I'll take a fictional setting and rake the thistle and webbing Nabatean idioms reckoned I'd face a zillion legends lol leading off with this was a perfect intro Enough subtle teasing. No longer preachin' to Priory's A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory Another creature entirely with another creature inside of me when I read this I knew I had to come correct I think every verse complimented each other I like that you guys have lil metaphors littered throughout tied together, I can't write like that unless I try real hard yet it seems it comes effortlessly to you guys lol its kinda weird both pretty sick, I love writing drops like this we get in another session anytime |
Okay, DG's piece has more feed than this
Drop links & I'll get 'em |
Skimmed through it; disgusting shit. I'll edit this with feed later.
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A cult following, popularity is the reason they rally
Describing my crew? the Term 'In' is Welcome... more than Walking Dead's season finale dope Constructin your fate w/ multiple blades I culled from the Ancients Approach your city carryin the skulls of the vanquished like the hull of a slave ship Sick RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments Lmfaoo Dope shit, all 3 murdered this |
Wrote a long feedback, did it get deleted? Will edit this within the day.
Thought neighbors hull of a slave ship line was absolutely cool. The leading up to it was nice, and the obscure reference to a ships hull is actually quite a zinger. Also, the pirate like theme is awesome. I love pirates. Skulls of the vanquished. I read this verse first. Getting Drunk in Washington protesting funerals with Westboro Baptists after You forced this laughter watch you grab ya throat vomiting Addicted to holy water promethazine ready to accept Morpheus peace offerings - Paradigm Awesome. The wording was a bit off kilter. But that was good enough for me. I'm not that big on flow nowadays because I'm getting old. But this was pretty cool. Actually awesome insane imagery. Not exactly my cup of tea, but still good enough to give credit too. lol. "I'm eight parts phalanx, nine percent gold digger Five percent 5-Percenter, cypher set stone slinger Prescribing final deaths to idle lines of vets, no zingers" Sounds like something I'd rhyme that you wouldnt like. Your entire piece was like this. Dope. |
This is dope as fuck when I get on my lap top ill drop better feed
But damn shit was a dope read |
Equipped alien weaponery aimed directly at the planes trajectory
Traverse this plane wit telepathy; levitate out a blackhole wit a sign that reads... "R.I.P Malaysia Flight 370" lol.. cool opener Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue Mordors hordes weapons in view, fire at will; Admire the skill aim skyward and reel; drag ya leader back to the frontline and funeral pyre the kill nice Ya Lord Sire forreal; from start to finish I create and flow well I'm even a motherfucking psychopath at the check-in... welcome to Bates Motel. Mix Vodka, Kahula and Baileys - that's a recipe for disaster Getting Drunk in Washington protesting funerals with Westboro Baptists after You forced this laughter watch you grab ya throat vomiting Addicted to holy water promethazine ready to accept Morpheus peace offerings cool imagery A cult following, popularity is the reason they rally Describing my crew? the Term 'In' is Welcome... more than Walking Dead's season finale Group Therapy session, psychiatrists diagnosis is clear and the beast inside is starting to tick... Captain Hooks Crocodile is near dope The Glock 9 that I'm grippin could start a bonfire.. I'll hog tie ya division A dogfighter w/ SWAT sniper precision; my strong right'd make God cry in submission ha, ill W/ shots primed to go online in an instant, put the pistol-grip to ya neck Rippin into ya flesh; the grimmest picture of Death's sickle swingin in synergistic effect Constructin your fate w/ multiple blades I culled from the Ancients Approach your city carryin the skulls of the vanquished like the hull of a slave ship fire Summon the strength of Goliath.. hit like a Congo viper hocking saliva Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor A locust swarmin out the lotus blossom, the wrong one to go to war w/ Ronin swordsman in cloaking armor like a Trojan horse full of Roman Spartans A polar storm shiftin the global orbit, reached the pinnacle of lethal cynosure My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature Brain fires impulses from pilot's controls.. process data w/ dire results My mind make a diamond corrode; to write what I know'd leave you white as a ghost Or w/ Meyer syndrome.. I'm Einstein if he wired his skull to a nitrogen bulb A dynamo clone in a scientist's coat, deciphering rows of binary code insane creativity till the end I'll take a fictional setting and rake the thistle and webbing Nabatean idioms reckoned I'd face a zillion legends interesting opener, nice flow To skate the literal tempests - my ancient friends wouldn't mention Inept friars, protect ya neck fibers when I'm raving to GZA with clenched fists Let's make it simple as Reddit; if Para & Saber's gripping the weapon you're off to a rocky start boxin' with the old guard like Mason Dixon's obsession nice Just taste the venom, accept it - Pagan riddles erected If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments lol dope Overhaulin' with no balls - couldn't even scrape the Michelin's melon I'm eight parts phalanx, nine percent gold digger Five percent 5-Percenter, cypher set stone slinger Prescribing final deaths to idle lines of vets, no zingers cause V's an unsympathetic, isometric cybersect CoHpe stickler CoHpe still going btw? dope flow Megatron rebuilt by Chevy, the system's not gonna fall The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws Enough subtle teasing. No longer preachin' to Priory's A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory Another creature entirely with another creature inside of me wicked imagery here Not much to say except this was pure ether. Nice to see a flex in the OM in quite a while. Props, fellas. Holla at me for a collab next time. Y'all definitely inspired me to write something now. |
Salute
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thanks for the feed eeryone
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Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue
Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue nice. this kind of line is where the battle arena and om intersect on the same wavelength. good to see you back at in kin. i think the term in is welcome was probably one of your lesser segments in this verse. but that just personal preference. the bar that big baby quoted was something fierce though. almost like you broke out for a second and touched the water. explore that more imo. you peppered this with punchlines for the most part and some were more effective than others but you are still finding a new voice after the time has passed its understandable... neigh Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor zoinks. My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature another knockout. you have the tendency to coast for a few lines and then hit us with great concepts like this. like a well timed epiphany. this is why your style is so JMT. because thats how paz be most of the time.. you could improve the consistency of those if you stopped falling back on old writing habits and explored something new. its something I'm working on too.. vulgar it was fun reading you write in a more contrived traditional "swagnflow" type of way i guess id call it. it didnt really suit you stylistically in my opinion. i kept wanting you to veer away from this and while i find it hypocritical that i just criticized neighbor for not experimenting with unfamiliar tools i think your more automatic approach would have suited this collaboration better. you still had some standouts If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments Overhaulin' with no balls - couldn't even scrape the Michelin's melon The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory overall this was something really refreshing to see. you guys meshed naturally and successfully showcased your individual and differing skill-sets in the same conditions. respect. 1 |
Malaysia
Bates An morpheus We're all pretty fly from paradigm I will say I was reading it kind of hoping it wasn't neighbor. ...lol Still good....I've just kind of come to expect a certain level of writing from neigh Read neigh first line an was immediately relieved ha Just bonkers Too many quotes....maybe my favorite part was the very last 2 lines ....but really the whole shit could be quoted for my tastes An vulgar Man....I just... Ur so fuckin obscure....I dont personally have any interest in ancient history and all the crazy alien technology from babylonia and pyrmid schmitars U lose me alot....alot of people dig ur style heavy....so likely I'm just not the audience u write for....which is what it is. That said ....Ur schemes were crisp an mechanics were on point From the phalanx part forward I dug it....was pretty I'll Drop a line in SupaDave - I want to make witty proud |
Equipped alien weaponery aimed directly at the planes trajectory
Traverse this plane wit telepathy; levitate out a blackhole wit a sign that reads... "R.I.P Malaysia Flight 370" ^^Nice way to open things. Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue ^^Tight. Addicted to holy water promethazine ready to accept Morpheus peace offerings A cult following, popularity is the reason they rally Describing my crew? the Term 'In' is Welcome... more than Walking Dead's season finale Group Therapy session, psychiatrists diagnosis is clear and the beast inside is starting to tick... Captain Hooks Crocodile is near ^^Cool shit. The Glock 9 that I'm grippin could start a bonfire.. I'll hog tie ya division A dogfighter w/ SWAT sniper precision; my strong right'd make God cry in submission W/ shots primed to go online in an instant, put the pistol-grip to ya neck Rippin into ya flesh; the grimmest picture of Death's sickle swingin in synergistic effect Constructin your fate w/ multiple blades I culled from the Ancients Approach your city carryin the skulls of the vanquished like the hull of a slave ship ^^Dopeness. Summon the strength of Goliath.. hit like a Congo viper hocking saliva Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor A locust swarmin out the lotus blossom, the wrong one to go to war w/ Ronin swordsman in cloaking armor like a Trojan horse full of Roman Spartans ^^Chea. A polar storm shiftin the global orbit, reached the pinnacle of lethal cynosure My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature Brain fires impulses from pilot's controls.. process data w/ dire results My mind make a diamond corrode; to write what I know'd leave you white as a ghost Or w/ Meyer syndrome.. I'm Einstein if he wired his skull to a nitrogen bulb A dynamo clone in a scientist's coat, deciphering rows of binary code ^^Great section. I'll take a fictional setting and rake the thistle and webbing Nabatean idioms reckoned I'd face a zillion legends To skate the literal tempests - my ancient friends wouldn't mention Inept friars, protect ya neck fibers when I'm raving to GZA with clenched fists Let's make it simple as Reddit; if Para & Saber's gripping the weapon you're off to a rocky start boxin' with the old guard like Mason Dixon's obsession Just taste the venom, accept it - Pagan riddles erected If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage ^^Tight. I'm eight parts phalanx, nine percent gold digger Five percent 5-Percenter, cypher set stone slinger Prescribing final deaths to idle lines of vets, no zingers cause V's an unsympathetic, isometric cybersect CoHpe stickler Megatron rebuilt by Chevy, the system's not gonna fall The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws Enough subtle teasing. No longer preachin' to Priory's A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory Another creature entirely with another creature inside of me ^^Raw closer. Awesome collab...all 3 verses are flames, probably felt the middle section most but not by much as the whole read from top to bottom is fire.Some of the imagery is brilliant in this, content from everyone is nothin' short of superb so props y'all & thanks for a dope ass read. Stay upwards. |
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I think thats one of the reasons I like and hate netcees though because you can see everyone in this thread liked something different since we all come from different backgrounds/sites that put emphasis on different aspects but give props to stuff I read and im like really you give props to THAT. (ie some of these paragraph flows) rofl I think thats why people bitch about voting here since netcees is a melting pot. @Bags @Exis thanks for the feed |
DOPE!!!
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Neighbors verse was dope.
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this was pretty ill all the way around
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Paradigm.
liked your closer and the Neigh Palm line. promethazine was a cool word I think you needed to cut some words here and there, it read a little clunky especially when compared side to side with Neighbor and Vulgar. Dont think ive ever seen you write, but you should more often. Your style isnt derivative of Neighbors but still has cool flex aspects as well as relatively strong (but rusty) battle backgrounds. At no place in your verse did I think "damn this dude came into his own" but I also didnt think "this dude cant hang." I think it was mostly just roughness around the edges coupled with no lines having that, damn that was fire af, feel. Except for the Neigh Palm one, which was executed near perfect-- but didnt have a lot of oompf to it conceptually. Neighbor. You have some of the best schemes on the site. Definitely the best ability for writing schemes. Concepts were cool but rather anticlimactic, you should fuck with your angles more... I get its a flex, but sometimes it feels like youre saying cool shit just to say cool shit. like Always Sunny Mac's karate vs some thug dude beating the shit out of someone. nothing wrong with the verse, or your writing. It went hard. But it didnt integrate well with the other two verses or have much more than pure aesthetic appeal. Idk how to describe it. Like unbridled raw talent can't equate to a talented writer with focus. IM A SHITTY INTERNET POET IGNORE ME. Vulgar. the last six lines were UNREAL. the cinderblock line yo. damn. collab soon. I must train. Throughout great delivery and great rhyme construction, very polished and very tongue-in-cheek. I wish I understood history more. Good job of working with the collabros on board as always. v cohpe line was jaw-dropping but also a good instance of how sometimes your descriptions are austere because theyre so abstract, surreal, cerebral. Dope collab. everything came together nicely. one of the best flexes put together in the OM in a long time. wish Neigh wasnt so awkwardly the highlight and there was a bit more banter. good read, no need to RTF |
This whole shit is quotable. As far as flex pieces this is my fav that I've read. Good shit, would feed more but phone feed. I salute this holy triumvirate w holy water
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Apotheosis
Panacea |
A fish's ascension
Where the grass is greener Titan of Tarsis The serpentine The Hebrew song Paradise pt 1 Vs Eminem Infinite It's ok 313 Tonite Open mic Biterphobia |
A fish's ascension
Where the grass is greener Straight jacket pt 1 Strai g t jacket pt 2 Lyrics only There |
A Fish's Ascension
Where the grass is greener The Titan of Tarsis vs. GROUP THERAPY SESSION BUDHAPEST SIBERIA |
A Fish's Ascension
Where the grass is greener vs. GROUP THERAPY SESSION BUDHAPEST SIBERIA |
Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue
Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue you where sooo close to nailing this, damn! i see it, the Movie you're talking about, the wordplay, ohhh, so close, ahh whatever, dope |
shut up, cunt. you're nothing
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this is good
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This whole shit was fire. I havent been around recently long enough to know whos who without reading the comments. But this shit is one of the hardest OMs ive read in a minute. All of yall came with your own styles and the went together perfectly.
First verse, that long bar style is something ive never been able to master. But you do it perfectly, without trying to rhyme OD like i wouldve done lmao. Your wording and imagery is what kept it so dope. You did ya thing here and it perfectly clashed with the more aggressive rhyming style of the next verse that came in. Second verse, you came a little more aggressive rhyming wise but still with the long bar style and that shit is always hard. Your wording and creativity really made this what it is. Fire rhyme schemes, almost thought you were gonna stick with the same rhyme scheme through the whole verse. Nothing wrong with not doing that though it added some more flavor to it. You did ya thang here fr dawg 3rd verse, you came in even MORE rhyme aggressive with a little more advanced vocab and stopped the long bar style. Them rhyme schemes was CRAZY. That whole Aretha franklin section was FIRE. Same with the second verse i thought you was gon keep going with that scheme till you didnt lmao. Regardless this verse was too hard. Probably my favorite of the three, With all respects to the first 2. You did ya thing on this shit from beginning to end. Fire shit from all 3. Keep doin what yall do i cant wait to read more from yall. |
Honestly, this is the best shit in history or something./.wtf what in the acual fuck..
THE VERSE VERSE WAS GREAT \ the 2nd verse was bonkers the 3rd verse was EXCELLENT.. GOOD JOB GUYS!! |
I would be honored. To try.
@Sinacog should I? Did 1 take: much as I love Paradigm & Neighbor, Vulgar's closer here is just... the forbidden candy perhaps. I'm sick of my own voice of course. I could soup it up using emcee squared's personality (same voice but better timing). |
up classic
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