Pushin Hom aside was ok

Post a verse too please. :)

Felt forced imo, wp still must work both ways...

It's all hitting for real: but this is one of my choices out of the illest bars in there:

readin your verse, i caint even count how many Times i Sighed
cuz i never got High, no matter how many Lines i Tried (Sass)

My latest battle verse was against 3 dudes at one time and it's long as fuck and you wouldn't understand it, and y'all probably already read it from over there anyways.

I dropped a simple piece in the dis thread and you went nuts, tried to answer back and then quit.

U weak faggit. U can go all over the web except to the thread that has been waiting for your response for like ten hours. Yeah w/e...

Well, that's what I expected. I'm sorry, but that line is horribly played. If you want, I'll quote at least ten lines here that all look like it and have been posted years prior.

Don't break the bubble snoop.

Can we get any of our lower level battle guys to wreck BG?


Sharp Nine

Well, just post it here or link to it.

I just dropped this verse today on short notice - I forgot about it and dude had a weak verse - he didn't even rhyme - so I just threw this together quickly. The illuminati bar you would have to see his drop that named that to understand the punch.
Dudes name was L.S.D

Nothing special but it displays some of my skill


Expos

*** He’s from South Africa

*** Joseph Kony: The most brutal and known African rebel leader



Annnnd Go Time



Did this bum think he’d take the win - one hit will fucking break his chin
Take a look at his name again – who don’t know LSD’s paper-thin?
Your verse aint rhyme one time – and I don’t want to stir confusions
Cos I know ya thought it was rhyming but L - that was pure illusions
I come to damage ya amateur – my hits collapsing your scapula
You and your verse headed South and I aint talkin bout back in to Africa
Your drop was all statements and that statement there was coerced
Or maybe that was your expos – so where the fuck is your verse???
Expressing aggression straight coming at me all rude and cocky
Dudes mad as hell – sure that verse aint part two of the illuminati?
I aint even gonna come with rawl shit - I aint even gonna take my time
You’re like an aids infested coce whore - on you I wouldn’t waste a line
But If I fuel these bars with hatred they become explosive homie
Fucking terrorize your South African ass like I was Joseph Kony
Dawg you was falling regardless – and this here was just an ad-lib
You got dropped – but to make ya feel better, go head and call it a bad trip

lines making sense doesn't mean theyre fresh or hard hitting.

I could talk about how "Game's overplayed" but your average second grader could come up with that. no twist on your bars.

Split you my #1 fan hommie.
Now do this: don't talk about it and be about it;
Produce something

so outta my whole verse you found one line that you say is played? lol

nigga pick it apart...i wanna see you pick my verse apart
cuz i read yall shyt...and i swear that every thing i read is trash...

and NAQ not only did you almost cry lastnight...but now you clearly jus soundin like a hater




Sass

You're not even that bad. If you battled here some more and started to weed out your played lines, you could become decent. As I said, line wordplay is really old. And that's not a good look. Same with the head south bar. That kinda shit is too simple. But yeah, you have the basics down.

Oh and Kony is from Uganda. Not South Africa. Just a little heads-up.

First off, you can say 'shit'. There's no curse word filter or anything here. :)

And yeah, your verse wasn't that bad. It just wasn't that good either. Most of your lines didn't do anything for me. That's why I asked what you thought were your high points.

I already know your lame ass gonna drop nothing so i'll just by-pass that situation quickly.
But if you had any sense you can find all kinds of twists in that verse actually - and that was very quickly written - you couldn't do that in a week.
That verse is mostly to do with nameplay - him being LSD

Which ironically describes your sex life as well.

I think anyone on this site would be willing to battle either of you on neutral grounds, e.g. PR or the dead RB forum or something of the sort.

Flo Matic, you rap like you Hold Ratchets
jus an Act wit tha Cold Tactics, but you Lackin tha Whole Package

how exactly does sum1 who holds ratchets rap....badly? do u mean a gun? i dont see the....nvmnd maybe it went over my head, an i guess the punchline is just there to make the couplet rhyme ?

i Mold Havoc, boutta turn me back to my Old Habbits
you write Fiction, you want Friction, at best you'd get Slow Static

ok so....how does 1 slow static....and if this were achieved, in what way would this have a negative affect on ur opposer

see, i dont "Expo" lines, i jus Expose Lines
to stretch those spines, you drivin into a Text Road Mine

define, road mine

i set heads on fire, not like Exoduzt when he dropped tha "Burnin Man"
im talkin bout tha flash backs Mike Jackson got every time he sipped a Pepsi Can

its 2013

so what now? you gone jump in this thread and Check Me?
dont you think we know you a undercover agent for LetsBeef?

letsbeef is better then lyrical assault if im bein completely 100, an they r the dustin diamond of text boarding

fuck it, Lets Beef, better yet..Lets Meet
cuz if i ever seen you in person it would be Less Meat

ok, now again perhaps im just not as smart as u but, how would the meeting or pairing of the couple create sum type of decline in poultry or beef, u mean like at the store, or like maybe u were gonna steel sum food from him, idk if maybe u havent eaten in a whiole....i just dont know


look, im not one of these Coward Guys, got pull cuz im Down to Ride
battlin my homie was tha only time you thought of Pushin Hom Aside

soft O

readin your verse, i caint even count how many Times i Sighed
cuz i never got High, no matter how many Lines i Tried

seriously man it is really 2013, where did i park my delorian?

so take ya rhymes off of tha market, you gettin No Sales
once i come through swangin these hammers, im like a Folk Tale

tell me the specific folk tale that is relevant to swinging hammers, or is swingin hammers somethingthat pertains to folk tales in a broader sense....i just , i mean....sigh

every thing i touch is molten, i got Lava Spits
Flo Matic is all Technology, he got Java Scripts

u are a computer?


truth be told, i aint thinkin of him Shootin me Down
im sittin here like, "fuck! i guess he boutta Google me Now!"

oh, i see....u are a computer

and everybody knows i dont even Drop OM's
i'd rather dig up an old Chain verse and Quote Him

word, i wish u wouldve then i wouldnt have had to suffer thru this mindless drivel, r u of this realm, WHAT THE FUCK R U TALM BOUT, WHAT DOES ANY OF THIS BULLSHIT EVEN MEAN SON !?!? NICE JOB MAKING THE WORDS RHYME AT LEAST

now i read it, weirdo


SASSy pants jr

Lmao @ I couldn't do that in a week

You can get this work, I aint even mid tier

No need for the negativity here. I'm being all friendly too. Plus, I'm just trying to help you see where your weak points are and how you can improve. If you really want, I can quote some verses here, too.

And yes, I got your lines. No worries. And yes, it wasn't bad. For a quick drop against someone really bad, it might even be enough to win. But would you call your line wordplay creative? I mean, honestly: Can you really say that you're proud of yourself for that line? Because I'm sure you yourself have seen that type of line done maaany times before. Hell, even J.R. just posted a coke line here. :(

Yea well he still terrorizes S Africans (or ar least did)
I aint disagreeing that the verse isn't top notch - definitely aint my best and like I said I wrote that verse very quickly. And I had no info on dude - he has like 5 posts and no info except his location.
I can deal with the criticism - but now you produce something.

You guys are serious too, that's the best part.

lol

This nigga wack as shit.

That comment was aimed toward Split.
I say they are played but it depends on how you use them.
I'm talking about not wasting my lines, he's talking about taking in the lines.
I see your point though, I even commented on his line in that verse too when he dropped it. (shoulda caught that)
But I don't really look at played "concepts", more less played "bars" or "lines".

"The LRA operates in Uganda, the Democratic Republic of Congo, Central African Republic and South Sudan."
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_Kony

Nope.

Anyways, here's a verse for you.

u're generic as fuck. every1 would say u're a real herb
cuz ur verses ain't direct'or personnel...& mine are scorsese collaborating w/ spielberg
plus we germans had cruel ways to leave jews and such deceased
but if u kill some1 w/ 'gas, strik'...it stems from that area of ur body, u disgusting freak
& dude's working in a restaurant. but for this bitch, it's decent
his american dream: from dishwasher to dishwasher not addicted to kitchen cleaners
dirty bitch. u wanted to join a jamaican posse & everyone gave u hell
they said stay away from the shower. ur pics show u followed that advice way too well
plus getting beat up for the n-word doesn't make u strong or hard
i bet u loved watching the django premiere, but cheered at all the wrongest parts
see, i'm edgy cuz my old girl won't accept she must now fly solo
...the only kind of denying ex tension YOU know is the way u won ur 1st rd by noshow
& strik knows what a real redneck has to do after getting down w/ a hottie
he doesn't care who that Horus. he'll just Falcon punch the kid outta her body

If you don't get a line, ask me. It's probably a personal.

Aye Snoop aint came at me wrong. And me and Sass aint shamed to show our skill. I mean if the debate is who has skill and can hold up - then you shouldn't be talkin about nothin until you drop somethin - feel me

i read through yall shyt...and yall no concept or meta's/wordplay/punches...

you was reachin so hard to pick apart my verse...LOL sumthin like a hater...i even tried to take yall serious



Sass

That was a dope one Sn00p.. wasn't expecting that.

Great battle that was.

lol english aint even sn00ps first language an he would mangle u 2 retards

If u still say metas.

Chances are text isn't for u.

Please look at the verse I just posted and then say that again. Honestly, take a look at it.

Word. You had a verse I coulda put up here too. But they wanted one from me. Good shit though.

big lame i am ready for u to consume me, prepare ur mouth

Quick little feed from my phone. You seem to have your fundamentals down, but the concepts were generally a little lacking. I'd recommend signing into AOBL, a few weeks of that would really shape you up

Director personnel/ direct or personal
Gastric/ gas Strik
Denying extension
and personals

ya can't be serious about no name plays/ wordplay

They still say METAS

As in metaphors.

lmao gtfo w/ that bullshit.

Anyways, here's a verse for you.

u're generic as fuck. every1 would say u're a real herb
cuz ur verses ain't direct'or personnel...& mine are scorsese collaborating w/ spielberg

This right here had some creativity but it is self-glory and don't cut it where I'm from. Maybe if there is a little bit in the set up or beginning of the punchline but not for the end of the punch. Putting that self-glory at the end is meaning that it's what you want the punch to be based on.

plus we germans had cruel ways to leave jews and such deceased
but if u kill some1 w/ 'gas, strik'...it stems from that area of ur body, u disgusting freak

I don't like how you ended the punch here. It is on some amateur shit if you ask me (you disgusting freak)

& dude's working in a restaurant. but for this bitch, it's decent
his american dream: from dishwasher to dishwasher not addicted to kitchen cleaners

That didn't rhyme for me. (decent/cleaners) I mean, I know what a slant rhyme is but that was forced.
And I don't understand this at all

dirty bitch. u wanted to join a jamaican posse & everyone gave u hell
they said stay away from the shower. ur pics show u followed that advice way too well

Yea, don't get this. It's definitely a personal that i would need filled in on

plus getting beat up for the n-word doesn't make u strong or hard
i bet u loved watching the django premiere, but cheered at all the wrongest parts

Lol - that was funny but not too much more complex than my shit

see, i'm edgy cuz my old girl won't accept she must now fly solo
...the only kind of denying ex tension YOU know is the way u won ur 1st rd by noshow

Damn - LA don't give wins for No-Show - it just goes to No Mans Land. I guess dudes name was ex?

& strik knows what a real redneck has to do after getting down w/ a hottie
he doesn't care who that Horus. he'll just Falcon punch the kid outta her body

More nameplay: it's hard to judge this because there is a lot of history within it. But I can tell you that it is all that complex.
Just being real with you

At first I thought v would be mad cuz y'all showed them what it really is. But they look oblivious...
Smfh

Interesting....now, can you tell me what I meant by that and what the punch might mean?

Nope, because u don't know the history behind it.

Also....I am a better writer than you.