Just thot he said it'd be alrite to take win becuz he was so late...just a thot

Word.

The battles stayed open in the spirit of competition

Hope you understand

Aye its okay I guess I should have been clearer in my post

lmao I hit up a few matches with votes to try and help out

@Witty I thought your verse was good bro

I know nothing about poetry but I enjoyed the read lol

@sraL


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The writing, I think, was good enough...but I hate it mainly because there was so much more I could have done with the concept, but didn't and took the easy route.

I guess sometimes the writer is the only person who thinks it sucks cuz they know what it could have been.

A bit salty, are we? Yes, I told you I thought your punctuation was wack, I've told others as well. It's like reading an extremely long sentence. This isn't the fucking Ulysses man. If that was your intention it's not for me, sorry. I like the language and grammar etc. in poetry to be well thought out, refined and polished. Yes, I lack in that department as well but I'd rather someone point it out and say it if they feel it detracts from the piece. I don't leave things be if I think it draws away the pleasure for me when I'm reading something. Also; there's things about the voting against my verse as well I feel people are missing out on, or I don't feel is right but it is right to them and that's what counts. If you don't like that I don't vote like everyone else and put what I find important highly when I place it that is YOUR problem, there's no reason to cry about it and give a half assed vote back in return as if it's the worst thing that could ever happen in your life. But it's whatevz, I don't care and as far as I'm concerned your vote counts, do your thing but I'd recommend you to leave emotions out of it and if you got a problem with something (like my vote) take it up with me in a PM, thread or in the chat instead of angle shooting in a vote like that.

And if you don't understand where I got ''rain'' from then maybe you should stick to the NBL. That said; if you're actually curious I can tell you in a PM when next round starts.

singing in the rain? it was in the movie, but was it in the picture?
nah

I'm signed out anyway bro
enjoy reading your punctuated and grammatically correct shit

damn, why'd the battles close early? @Vulgar

I wasn't referencing the movie, book, title or anything at all. It has nothing to do with A Clockwork Orange as I only went by the character on the cover, dope af movie tho'. I thought about it as ''rainy days'', bad weather is often associated with a depressive mood so that's what I played off of (clichéd to death or not) and the main character losing face and feeling out of it (hence where the topic comes in and who I had in mind while writing it) and I also end it with the guy shooting off half his face seeing the blast go off which was what I trying to connect with the picture. You don't necessarily die from it but I thought fuck it and let it be. I was more hooked on the ''sunshine'' as a simile for the blast he saw getting a millisecond of sense that things are finally getting better before he died or whatever when I wrote it.

Keep in mind I was high af when I wrote it so I probably made a lot of connections that doesn't make as much sense sober, or to anyone at all, hah, but there's thought behind it. I'm not satisfied by the piece and I didn't have time to do the ''write high, edit sober''-thing either but that's my explanation.

As far as things I felt what people missed out on was that the middle stanza got a ABCDDCBA rhymescheme but I kind of expected that. Thanks for giving me an opportunity to put it to light, I seldom get to do that with what I write.

So next week can start.

@Vulgar

What do you think about an annotation thread?

Sounds cool, but what is it?

Basically a thread peeps can come in to and explain there poems.

But i guess its more entertaining other wise lol

it's better known by its colloquial name, "The Weekly Butthurt", where writers of all ages but one specific mental age can congregate to defend their poems integrity against the incessant assault set upon them by their own viciously self-serving mediocrity

Yes if you wanna get technical lol

Lmao I'm just pulling your leg man @Innovator

Yo let whos posting the mag? Just so i know lol

You or Vulgar can post, send me what your have and I'll send you whatever I can to help (most of the things in that Pm)

nice explanation. I was finding new readings every time I read your piece. it was poetically dense even tho it was a shorter verse. I need to do more playing with diff rhyme schemes.