I'm gonna leave you genuine feed. No troll, this was nothing special. The rhymes were very basic and the flow was predictable. If you want to rap, then write your verse to a specific beat that you choose and then practice your delivery. Add inner rhymes to break the monotony, and add multis and metaphors and such. Because as I see this now, and god don't get offended again, I can tell your just beginning and trying to find your style.

Allot of guys here could give you great pointers on executing what you're trying to do, which is rap, but if you disagree with everyone who says you're not good then why would they waste their time? You say none of us will ever make it rapping, but really none of us want to. What we DO know is how to write. Listen to real advice, and please stop being obnoxious when someone says something negative. Seriously. Peace.

shut up idiot there are plenty of multi's. jesus fuck you guys are bad at this rap thing dont ever claim to me that you know how to write. and im not about to use big words for mainstream music, thats what makes you a LOSER. Tryna WIN. WIN WIN WIN. i respect the identity comment, that was correct

Aka i respect the feedback that agreed with me

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PAPERS DAT U?

RORO SAID U DIED

RIP PAPER

You gots to be trollin boss. Lol

lol only half. yo, i dont see anybody picking apart the latest justin beiber song

Sure. I can see the comparison. Good point.

who are you having a discussion with bro, damn. ur like a vulture scavenging conversations^

That literally makes no sense.

Tell me how old u are.

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Tell me

Dont do that


Stop lookin qt stuff like that.


This is not reddit.

Bags please, not in front of the children

alright but what actually happened to the second guy damn

So ur saying ur gay?

Good point


Answer?

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