No I just want people to comment on my work if they feel so inclined

@Certain

this is my verse

it was posted in this sub forum by accident

its for topic #4

can u pls edit it in, my tablet does not let me copy n paste easily

I have yet to start as well and just did 3 dilaudids
so yeah same story Plus i got to charge this tablet
bc aint no way im writing on half a touch screen
that auto corrects/predicts everything...
incorrectly N i cant charge it w the keyboard
attached so i gotta wait 4 it b4 i can attach keyboard
b4 i can write Not to mention the sht has froze on me
3x in the past 2 hrs, one time (just recently)
costing me a whole bunch of sht i just typed
(an elaborate recount of my whole kidnapping/car stolen/psych
which i was intending on posting in the private ATR
subforum to answer a question) and now have lost 4ever...
due to being forced to reboot, yet again. But i have
the same outlook as witty, when i sign in i truly intend
on posting, my recent no shows were due to IRL craziness
that has prohibited me from posting like getting arrested,
or being held for observation, but i always intended
on showing...
ive jst been joking....
w witty about it because
of our recent boarding activity (or lack of)

Fair enough, I thought I had until 8am as was the case with the tourney.

Goodluck running a league if you're gonna be a nazi and not allow extensions or a grace period, just saying, you'll get a lot of no shows.

Makes no difference to me though, I wrote my piece.

You had five days. Show me your verse right now. I don't believe you have one done.

Witty did not no show, Witty lives in Europe and Witty sat up until 7.30am specifically to write for this league, Witty thought he had until 8am but apparently he did not. Witty could have been asleep hours ago and has wasted his time.


She would play her ashiko in that old, smoke filled room, blowing a kiss
Hope still bloomed, beholden in bliss, sippin' on vodka & coke 'til noon
Daytime drinking, but with her every day was playtime, sinking
Into the old battered couch as she continues to play, I'm blinking
The tears betray my stray mind, and give away the way I'm thinking
Is she the one? The lady who beats the drum, can she unfreeze the numb?
Will she be the missing piece to the puzzle and the peace will come?
But what would such a beauty want with a beast? I'm scum
5 days a week I would visit, order a drink, sit and watch her play
Sit in the corner and think, and even if she was missing, my mind played the beat
Then it got to the day, when I plucked up the courage and walked to the stage
Slipped her a little note, my thoughts on a page....fingers crossed, tryna gauge
Whether she felt the same, there's a storm in my mind but her melodies melt the rain
And my hands are shaking, full of a nervous love my extremities can't contain
Her pale complexion, her heavenly voice, with its haunted yet frail inflection
The lines in her face that the pain is etched in, stomach in pain - I'm wrecthin'
Crippled by nerves as the music ends, I see her walk over to her group of friends
She didn't even look at me, my mind rattles as the screws come loose again..
STUPID TRAMP!
WHAT I'M NOT GOOD ENOUGH??...KEEP PARTYING....OOH YEAH, YOU CAN DANCE!!!
YOU GOT ME FEELING LIKE A RETARD AGAIN, THIS VODKA GOT MY MOOD ENHANCED
LETS SEE HOW BIG YOUR SMILE IS WHEN I CUT YOUR THROAT AND REMOVE YOUR PANTS
LET'S PLAY A GAME...THE WINNER GETS TO WALK AWAY ALIVE AND THE LOSER CAN'T
I wait outside until this hoe appears, take a quick check to see if the coast is clear
Grab her by the throat, and with a dry tone whisper 'didn't you like the note my dear?'
I punch her in the stomach, snap her neck, rape her and leave her a battered wreck
Lay her down in an alley and give her cheek a battered peck...
Am I psycho? A lunatic? A mad man? I was in a blind rage I was numb
And as I walked away that day, I smiled...as my mind played to her drum.

my verse was done about an hr and half ago n posted in here

@YDK @Just Write to vouge on it being complete

my verse was done about an hr and half ago n posted in here

@YDK @Just Write to vouge on it being complete

stop being frank, i'm the one that edited this like this, so even if you tried using it, I ghost formatted it for you which is still cheating...just stop

Posted where?

there's verses, might as well open the battle with them. otherwise closing it was the right call, just how leagues need to be for them to work nah mean.

uh no, you wrote a bunch of shit talking about not writing a verse yet, then as a joke I formatted it to look as a verse because of how much you wrote.
you aint have a verse and the quote you're claiming is your verse...is stating you hadn't even started writing a verse yet

Sorry, but Witty and Rawn MD can go fuck themselves for not understanding deadlines. I don't give a fuck right now and won't give a fuck ever. They're irresponsible human beings. I don't care about their lives at all.

Bye.

I mean, I don't even care if you want to keep it closed, I'll take the loss.

Just don't say I no showed when I really didn't for once lol

When did 8am change to 7am?

It's midnight eastern, no?

No, it's 3 a.m. Eastern, which is 7 a.m. your time, which has been the case your entire fucking life, which probably means the wise thing would have been for you to be done with your verse seven hours ago.

fuckin editors

and ydk, i reformated it

read mine n compare

mine was done hours ago

and posted

arggggg

tbh I think witty should get the win because he did have his verse...confusion of a deadline and showing he had the verse as soon as you requested proof...proves that he did have something written.
Rawn obviously is too fucked up to even know what a verse is at this point

3am Eastern, which would be New York, which I know for sure is 5 hours behind me....is this the same time as the winter tournament?

Because that was 8am.

dude...no....what rhyme scheme or topic at all could you even try to associate that with? quit being a retarded frank with worse excuses. that's clearly not a verse

No, 7 a.m. always your time, because Ireland is four hours ahead of the Eastern time zone and always has been and always will be.

I'm inflexible on this. I don't care for your lame attempts to rationalize. The Eastern time zone has always and forever been four hours behind Ireland. Good night.