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Your like a better version of Bags before she shit herself online after gettin' e stalked by some faggot...
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Millenia Shore
For millineas billions of fish have swam from the fishing swim of fishing swim
I am the fishing swim of fish; the fishing swim of fishing swam Fish have swam from the rivers of beaches to besieging The fish have adventure from the shore to the beachy shore of water I am a fish; a gentle fish with seldom wish; seldom fortress I am the chorus of light and life; the seldom fish of a school of fish I am the fish of light and life; the fish in seas I am a fish of light and life; the fish in seas For I am a fish with a wish to fly into the seas of adventure I am a adventure of flying wings with flying fish seas |
Minus 2.6 outta 10...Work on that dismount k pop.
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The King
I am a king from the grounds of Jerusalem; the sound of the souls of men
I killed thousands with swords and trumpets; I stand triumphant I am the devil in the night; awakening plight I am a ember sky; the devil's sword in a fight One early morning, a silver sword from a knight arrived It arrived at the bridge of my fortress; a dark sources The end was nigh; when the silver sword entered my home Yet the sword was quickly jolted with a defense; and didn't reach the throne One early morning, the golden trumpets were playing in the early morning The early morning sun; the early morning water A golden sword came to me from a knight of white armor The knight killed my defense; it was the end from the descendants The golden sword entered my heart; a demon from the ruins I am a king that was dethroned from the golden sound of angels |
The Shinning Sea
Alabaster stone seas of siege; sea the leaves
Fish swim in abundant joy and happiness; lavishness Alabaster stone seas; onyx seas; onyx siege Alabaster stone seas; onyx seas; onyx siege Alabaster stone seas; onyx seas; onyx water Alabaster stone seas; onyx seas; onyx water For alabaster stone seas siege; besiege in seas Alabaster stone seas; besiege; besiege in seas Alabaster stone seas; alabaster stone seas of siege Alabaster stone seas; alabaster stone seas of siege Alabaster stone oceans; alabaster stone mountains of oceans Alabaster stone seas; alabaster stone oceans Alabaster stone seas; alabaster stone seas of siege Alabaster stone seas; alabaster stone seas of siege Alabaster stone mountains; alabaster stone seas Alabaster stone mountains; alabaster stone seas Alabaster stone mountains of oceans and seas Alabaster stone mountains of oceans and seas Alabaster stone mountains of oceans and seas Alabaster stone mountains of oceans and seas |
You just wanted an AI collab on this one
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I decided I hate you
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“I kill thousands with sword and trumpets I stand triumphant”
My nigga |
No offense but I seen better from
It's like chorus |
Lol @ repeatin' the same shit 28 times, your my idol man...
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I get it.
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Fish of Light
Fish of light; fish of hope; fish of freedom
Fish of thorns, fish of light; fish of darkness I am the fish of hope; the fish of water I am the fish of light; the fish of life \I am the fish of darkness; the fish of hope I am the fish of light; the fish of hope The fish of hope; the fish of light I am the fish of water; the fish of hope I am the fish of water; the fish of love I am the fish of water; the fish of faith |
Chikety China I don't like fish in my kitchen
Maybe Chop Suey your bitch and pan fry up her liver... |
I like the poetic tone of your pieces and though repetition works up to a point, i think you should reiterate only to a certain extent, we get it after the second time. It adds nothing to the piece it just seems like unnecessary filler, get a little more creative.
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FREESTYLE
I'm the onyx stature; onyx rapture; onyx zapper
Porcelain pen'; ending the winds wisp with scapegoat and sin Marvelous rapture; carving the niche' of levels and sticks I'm the monastery; onyx rapture from the baal of master I'm the pen' game insane; the insane zealot I captured pens' with wind and insane peacocks I'm the ninth dimension writer with burning flame I'm the source of wind; the source of sin I'm the worshiper of baal; the worth of jolt I quenched hell's dimension with rain from heaven |
Guardian Demon
Guardian demon; the heart of the gleaming; the golden temple
Golden temple; the golden rod of asherah; the demon from fire I am a demon guarding a angel; a seraphim of light Blaring in the sky; heaven's gate; levitate through penetrate I am the golden sky; the golden clouds on golden stars I am a guardian angel from the solace of stars; golden stars I am the sentiment of good through sentiment of good I am the evening light; the evening day; the evening light Guardian demon; I am the guardian demon from the harvest of eden Somber is reason; the solemn of weakness; the strength of Goliath Golden angels battling demons in the heart of screaming I am the guardian; guarding angels from hell; hell's fire |
Poisonous Serpent
Jedi Mind tricks a general to commit suicide Paint the sky red; blood bursts in the bluest sky In the destiny of law; tortured 20 million seaphims I killed my dog with a law Warhammer than force grammar I tongue tied twenty million people to each other; burning the moon I tortured the sun; with the force of a sun from the benevolent sound of torture A million years ago; I killed a planet with electricity Synchroncity tortured a dog; with science and mathematics a spiritual revolution I am eons ahead of a path of war; I began war zillions of years ago I tortured the sun; brought the flames into the moon; and created two suns In the evening light; made it black; gave a spider a heart attack I'm burning lizards with the force of the sun; the sun ripped apart the second sun I am a zillion years old; living on the plains of a seraphim I killed a angel with a rainbow halo; than killed Father Time with somber lines The end is near; I killed a lion when I brought the sun's flame to his mane I ripped off a elephant's nose; than ate it with a grain of salt |
Poisonous Serpent Pt.2
Poisonous serpent; the zillion sword demon swordsman; the sea is scorching
I tortured millions with fire and flames; the flames of hell tortured a skeleton I'm the sentiment of hell; the bending of dimensions from God's scale I'm the ender of days; the beginning of night; the descendant of rays I am a onyx rapture; conquer seas of alabaster stone with ascending angels I tortured seraphims in the astral plane; with swords and torturous scimitars I'm the sea of change; I killed thousands of angels with rainbow halo I conquered the world with a golden fist; the siss of a snake was heard from the axis I conquered the planet; atomic bombs circle the granite of the ending of atlas I killed a thousand horsemen with endorphins from a thought of savior I'm the demon swordsman; release the horsemen into the fields of daisies Than sea the seas change and rip when I grab a sword and begin the apocalypse |
Your so terrible at this craft. You honestly suck and should do something else.
Your like the shit kid at the skate ramp thats been going down for 5 years and still cant drop in, and everyone makes fun of. I mean your past being sarcastic about you dont take on any feedback or help and I dont think you even read anyone elses work. Look at the column of I's on the left side of your verse! Your shit. |
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