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DexLabb 07-24-2014 09:53 PM
fuck off kid, nobody here ccould slightly tweak their shit to be accepted by mainstream. thats a laugh out loud joke

DexLabb 07-24-2014 09:57 PM
u write me a rap that a fat girl at macys would jiggle around to, while singing all the words to while looking at shirts and we can talk

Zen 07-24-2014 10:06 PM
Fat girls don't want someone to write them a rap they can sing at Macy's.

Buy that girl a chicken wrap though...

Split 07-25-2014 02:01 AM
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Originally Posted by big baby (Post 369501)
oh damn didnt readsplits stuff nvm ether
Does that mean u don't send my quotes to David Sedaris


@Zen I'll actually feed this tomorrow

big baby 07-25-2014 07:41 AM
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Originally Posted by Split (Post 369747)
Does that mean u don't send my quotes to David Sedaris


@Zen I'll actually feed this tomorrow
No

Zen 07-27-2014 08:36 PM
http://i59.tinypic.com/119chvp.jpg

Kin 07-27-2014 08:53 PM
Let me.put my.2 centz into tha drama 1st...

This is called open mic...any type of writtenz/recordingz belong here there is no intended audience

Personally id rather have 1 hip hop head ynderstanding everything I spit then 100 just listening not getting the conceptz

On to zen...
Ive neva seen ,"walkin a sociopath" flipped... crazy

An the matress over look the matress over line was fire

Like the deepness behind what u write here as alwayz

HoLLa

Split 07-27-2014 09:15 PM
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Originally Posted by Zen (Post 368930)
Now I'm left with a wine tip in the tray, soda and bourbon for dinner.
Flipped my mattress over. Now there's no more indentions.
Now look the mattress over.
You'd never know she existed.

I pushed her away. Asked only for distance.
"Have it your way."
Her tone was different.
She packed her things, and hit the road in her Civic.
I replay those moments over hoping to forget it,
til that day I look the house over,
and don't know anyone's missing...

All dope. What made this powerful was that it had a lot of truth to it, and the nuances of your experience that all of us go through are forgotten as we are healed by time and space from those we miss.

Very good wording throughout, would say great but there were a couple places where you forced a phrase or something. Really thought the imagery was well above par for the OM. Good job Zen man. Not directionless/ random at all


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