I'd like to think my snippet about comfort zone in another thread about you is what also lead a little off kilter, but particularly well written deadman in this writing.

es posible

yo lmaooo !!

blackness. great post dude.

hyper focused, isotopic, rhyme consultant, why
do i spark with twice the voltage only trying half the time

haha that was too sick. for some reason i have a feeling that was ur least favorite section in this verse though, but its dope.

always good, you know whatsup, not much more i can say that u havent heard already, keep posting!!

Like a lot of your recent verses, this verse is scatterbrained but occasionally beautiful. I like that you've incorporated a better blend of specificity and concrete imagery alongside the more aloof and conceptual writing.

As far as the words themselves, I didn't like the line "breakfast food is symbolistic of a happier time" because it preceded a much more effective and evocative line that relayed the exact same concept. There were one or two spots were the cadence shifted slightly, but for the most part that was right on your mark of expertise.

I am pretty sure there will be a topical tournament held to start 2014, and I hope you will join to refocus your writing a little outside your own world. Stuff like this and another recent one seem to reflect the stasis you have found in your writing. The content here seemed almost sad for itself, which is not an insult but rather a charge, that maybe it's time to turn another corner.

when i was reading this my mind was going bonkers, sporadic, but i like it .. just my cup of tea. good vocabulary too bruh, no filler..thats pure peruvian fishscale.

breakfast food is symbolistic of a happier place

1. thanks for the cosign
2. symbolic?
3. dope verse, per usual