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12-24-2013 01:07 AM |
Funny. I said entombed twice today, and almost wrote it in something I was writing. I usually pass of a satirical comment that you may or may not notice. Though, you probably do.
You are one of the few that typically writes a longer verse and longer lines. Which is exceptional as well. The third 'paragraph' was my favorite. Such simple imagery, but you spoke through metaphors and unrefined thought. aware/guard duty was such a off kilter thing, that it actually helped the simplicity of the imagery and amplified other areas, such as the realization of the readers possible thought in the identifying following lines. No problem with rhyming indeed. I kinda wish you had a generalized quotable set of artillery. You'd just be too good, then.
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