i like your voice and the flow you're going for though

just yea take out all of those syllables that make you flow bad

oh and i like the beat choice

Thanks G

Dont let them get you down. Like i said. Find a slower less obnoxious beat and try again. I think you could do much better

LOL aint that some shit

really though, beat got the phonk, and you def aint home on it,

but i fux with the process, ambition, creativity, all that...just come out a lil disharmonious, specially after like the 25sec mark shit got ugly

Thanks for peeping

Here's the latest update for anyone who cares.

https://soundcloud.com/mercsinare/mi...-112918-753-pm

If anyone has any mixing tricks or tips I'm all ears.

Your issue, in my opinion, is mostly your voice/vocal tone/lack of energy. You don’t sound comfortable. At about 20 seconds you cut in and every word is rushed.

Can you hear it and aren’t sure what to do about it, or do you not hear what sounds bad about your delivery?

Some lines were written with too many syllables. Instead of fixing that by rewriting I will physically cut it out and move words around in the program till it sounds as natural as I can make it.

Another hazard of moving stuff around too much is the timing sounds way off in sections, making it sound like the words are said too soon or too late.

Oh yeah I see what your saying @20 seconds. Definitely the weakest section. I haven't figured out how I want to approach that section yet. I figured I would listen to it a bunch and it would just come to me

You serious?

Yeah man I'm not proud of it but it's easier then re recording a bunch of times after I find out it's not going to fit as is

A little better at the 20 sec mark now after a re record but Ima take a break on this

Going to be hard to ever make music people find appealing if you can’t flow over a beat. I mean, I’ve indulged in experimental hip hop, but there’s a reason rapping sticks a fairly rigid formula of requiring its participants to speak rhythmically with the beat.

It’s difficult for those who primarily write to jump into recording because the thought process is different. You can merge the two, but it takes some growing pains.

Did you write to this beat specifically? I always found writing to beats challenging. It’s easier to just rap whatever over it to find your footing. Then start to think about what you want to say within that rhythm.

If you enjoy it then keep at it.

this is a really bad habit, especially at your stage, and will stifle growth. only use it when your flow is close and you think your delivery was so genuine and magical that its got to be the take.

u have full control over what you're recording my guy, so as soon as u realize its not going to fit, tweak the writing, or cut it and re-write.

quick fix, just freestyle on the beat from the go. find a flow or approach that vibes to you, listen back, and write the flow to match it.

Redundancy is redundant.

its ok i didn't read your post i got it from here

Word @WRATH take notes from the people here who’ve made it big

u musta missed the thread where my friends hit 500k

i am clearly the go to

Douchebag

Yo, how long you been spitting on the mic? I though this was a decent attempt but when the cadence required a flip, you tripped but yet you picked yourself back up. Not bad, but not polished. I am sure if you kept at it you would dominate this track.