We're all alone inside..... except for the ecoli that lives with you from that old country buffet.

WORD @ OLD COUNTRY BUFFET.

My grandparents took me to that place on every visit when I was a buck. I used to think it was a fancy as fuck place as a young man.

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My bitches are 12's
These are 7's

Literally because there is 7?

I'll assume you enjoyed the pancakes.

There is 8, notice the woman on the left being groped by some hideous bitch I had to hide. They are a pair, it's like a 2 for 1 deal; who could argue?

I could go for conjoined twins. Haven't got to that all time low yet.

Nah I was about that roast beef and free ice cream dessert. YOU COULD MAKE AS MANY CONES AS YOUR HEART DESIRED.

Welcome. Do you write?

Fairly well.

Cool, looking forward to it.

I'm more of a wings and chocolate fondue kind of guy but I can dig it.

@Vulgar Reading and re-reading your critiques of not only my verses but others, I feel as though you have this well-earned air of superiority. That cute, no one knows what the fuck you're talking feed is belying you now. You miss the point and heart of a lot of verses when I review feed.

U ever got a reach around with an inverted gorrilla mask? Them conjoined twins know what they are doing.

Id explain but it's graphic.

My reading comprehension has been sort of off lately so I try to have fun with it. I get fatigued easily now, it's quite frustrating. However, if I have an opinion about something I'm going to be confident about what I think about it. But yeah, I don't think I try to exert any superiority - it's just the Vulgarian way of communication. What in particular do I need to work on?

Please.

Indulge me.

@PancakeBrah, upon review, the feed I gave on your Pale verse was horrible.

In on Pinot Grij alias thread

This mostly stems from you completely whiffing on the obvious sarcasm of my Grizzly Bears pieces. I'm very petty. But when I read your feed, not just of that particular piece, then read some perfectly constructed verse of yours with great rhymes it jives greatly in my personal estimation of your true level of analysis. And analysis applies more to pieces than feed. There never seems to be a piece you feed that you truly like. Even if a feed is positive, it's in this weird language that makes the reader of feed more interested in it than the piece. You insist upon yourself in feed. The ever present 'keep doing you' is almost condescending.

My goal with feedback is to provide commentary that could be relevant toward future verses. I find myself often talking almost exclusively about the writing rather than the content. In votes, I try to bring up a person's approach to a topic and maybe talk more about the content, but even then, the goal is to highlight strengths and work out weaknesses.

I think a lot of people here seem more focused on discerning meaning, in finding their own value in verses. I do that while I read, but the reason we want feedback is so we can improve, right?