Really appreciate it man and I agree with the majority of it. I really don't usually do "commentary" pieces which I'd describe this as. I'm usually more of an imagery/storyteller kind of guy. You're in a room, what do you see, feel, smell etc. I think I said over on RB that I'd be happy if people could enjoy this the whole way through (which they seem to) because I know someone has to work their ass off to get me to enjoy a "real talk" piece. I'm usually not too interested in what someone actually thinks or if their topical is coming straight from them. I prefer something new, a story we haven't heard before in a location that's been completely painted by the words you know?

So yeah I completely get your points and there's a chance I'd think the same from an outside view. You probably will see me doing whatever the complete opposite of this is in future and sacrificing rhyme schemes a lot of the time and never speaking from my perspective, and more from the perspective of a character I created. I was actually writing a few years ago for a topical finale and no showed cause I had "narrated" like 4 topicals in a row and couldn't stand the thought of giving an "overview" again.

With the amount I just posted you can obviously see I got a lot of the feedback :D This was intended to be a "shaking off the rust" piece but I'd be overselling myself if I said this was me being lyrically or wordingly (ironic) rusty.

lol don't trip man, hope I didn't come off as too much of a dick, probably more indicative of my current mood than anything else.

Why do you write?
Atleast you are being real with yourself

This was cool...content wise it was nice, would of liked you to be more complex scheme wise but that's just a minor niggle...thought for the most part flow was straight.

Idk why you write topicals & don't give a fuck tbh as I enjoyed the read.

Stay up wit it.