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  1. Diablo
    10-25-2023 06:00 PM
    Diablo
    I feel like not having a story to mine definitely left the door open for you to drop a storytelling piece and that likely worked against me tactically, you definitely flipped what I came with on its head and turned it around back on me so that was strong also, I probably shouldn’t have been as predictable and gone for the comparison between us both - it wasn’t my most inspired choice all in all and you probably deserved more from it than the two single sentence votes you had your way just not even breaking things down after you wrote 60 lines of material. No bullshit, just my straight up opinion. I wouldn’t tell it any other way.
  2. Diablo
    10-25-2023 06:00 PM
    Diablo
    It’s not just what’s being said, but how it’s being said, and I thought the word choices there were strong to create a mental picture in the minds eye of the reader for a visual. The final stanzas closer with the mention of the camera flash momentarily having “caught the shark off guard,” was nice too, because you had to be honest - There was no word from you all week and I thought maybe you were noshowing so I didn’t end up writing the full 60 and kept it at what I had which was around 40(?) I think. It was getting late the night before it was due so I just tied up what I had and dropped something save no-showing.
  3. Diablo
    10-25-2023 05:58 PM
    Diablo
    The meek evolving was another nice jab, don’t recall many (of any) pointing that one out either offhand but I got it. It’s subtle but it’s there. The weight of its own skins was nice too, even caught the horror wording reference thrown my way. It has layers, for sure, the naming of the shark and then “How the devil did I sink to this?” was fire. I actually wrote mine and was sort of kicking myself that I didn’t go for a STORY because it felt a bit one dimensional just having this extended metaphor on us both and the league or the site, really, there was only really so much I could explore with that one angle without beating it to death. The shark references and imagery in those verses (I think third and second from last?) were dope to me, I really liked “A testament to years of ruthless survival,” aimed at me but also just the simplicity of something like “It’s lifeless eyes, black and soulless,” really conjures up a great description of the creature using just a few select words.
  4. Diablo
    10-25-2023 05:57 PM
    Diablo
    I thought you did really well conceptually, I don’t know if you wrote that with an idea as to what I might go for or held off it until after you saw my drop and did something… but I thought what you put up was almost like a response to what I did, addressed the different points about rising up from the bottom and whatnot, I’m not entirely sure everyone even caught the “laws of seven” reference if I’m honest because none of the voters mentioned it but I caught it - I’m aware of Gurdjieff and that there are always ups and downs in our lifetimes, vibrations cast that have cosmic domino effects throughout the universe. They slept on that one somewhat in relation to the image, no doubt. The whole calling my bluff thing was a nice way to end that section, you set your stall out early and I was like “Oh shit, he flipped it on me here!” haha!
  5. emcee squared
    04-30-2023 08:37 PM
    emcee squared
    i just try get amped up so i drop better bars, dude
    hal0...yeah its quackery yeah YOURs ARENT quackery-imageryMind fuks ok lol
    Yeah keep playin possum like AJ
    I kno ur not real I ASKED CUZ UR BEING DENIED entry on your League-join attempts due to accusations of Already being a Participant in the league.>>

    Is this crazy ^?
  6. Pharaohs Army
    04-28-2023 07:15 PM
    Pharaohs Army
    I am officially requesting the identity of your main Alias, and if you'd be so kind #3,&4 as well.
  7. House of Leaves
    04-20-2023 06:42 AM
    House of Leaves
    A decorated editor has personally re-reviewed your old Santa Topical verse:
    HOF-worthy and shoulda won, let alone NOT be swept. lol.
    This place has changed since then though.
  8. Saint
    01-26-2018 11:23 PM
    Saint
    Have a verse?
  9. House of Leaves
    10-04-2016 01:28 AM
    House of Leaves
    pharaoh living life

    .5 is past tense
  10. emcee squared
    09-28-2016 03:54 PM
    emcee squared
    living life

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01-14-2024
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12-16-2023
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11-26-2023
03:40 PM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post The Official Season XII Preseason Sign-Up Thread:
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11-15-2023
07:06 PM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post Vote!
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11-10-2023
02:28 AM - sral mentioned brokenhal0 in post SZN XI Championship: Diablo (10-0) vs. Master Rock (8-3) vs. Universe (6-0) [DIABLO CHAMPS SZN XI!!!]
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11-04-2023
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10-26-2023
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10-23-2023
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10-14-2023
06:16 PM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post AOWL SEASON XI MAGAZINE — SEMI FINALS EDITION: "SELL OUT!"
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10-05-2023
01:07 AM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post SZN XI Semi-Finals: Diablo (9-0) vs. brokenhal0 (8-3) [DIABLO WINS 5-2]]
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10-03-2023
11:15 PM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post Playoff Chat/Beef/Predictions
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08-08-2023
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07-24-2023
04:42 PM - Diablo mentioned brokenhal0 in post GUERRILLA WRITING LEAGUE - WEEK THREE MAGAZINE!
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07-22-2023
01:59 PM - Frank mentioned brokenhal0 in post SZN XI Divisional Round: 4. brokenhal0 (7-3) vs. 12. Sinacog (3-4) [BROKENHAL0 WINS]
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07-19-2023
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07-18-2023
06:53 PM - brokenhal0 mentioned Diablo in post Adverse vs Brokenhal0 vs Symetrik
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07-12-2023
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12-11-2023
03:34 PM - brokenhal0 quoted Diablo in post The Official Season XII Preseason Sign-Up Thread:
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10-24-2023
07:14 AM - Diablo quoted brokenhal0 in post AOWL SEASON XI MAGAZINE — SEMI FINALS EDITION: "SELL OUT!"
diablo this aint the last battl...
10-23-2023
09:23 PM - Soule quoted brokenhal0 in post AOWL SEASON XI MAGAZINE — SEMI FINALS EDITION: "SELL OUT!"
diablo this aint the last battl...
07-24-2023
04:42 PM - Diablo quoted brokenhal0 in post GUERRILLA WRITING LEAGUE - WEEK THREE MAGAZINE!
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04-29-2023
09:06 AM - Pharaohs Army quoted brokenhal0 in post NBL Season 17: Chat/Predictions
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03-22-2023
01:32 AM - Pharaohs Army quoted brokenhal0 in post THE OPEN MIC CYPHER
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03-14-2023
05:39 PM - Pharaohs Army quoted brokenhal0 in post THE OPEN MIC CYPHER
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01-22-2023
07:26 PM - symetrik quoted brokenhal0 in post XI WK VI Chat/Beef/Predictions
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01-17-2023
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01-08-2023
07:18 PM - Master Rock quoted brokenhal0 in post XI WK IV Chat/Beef/Predictions
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01-07-2023
10:51 PM - Diablo quoted brokenhal0 in post XI WK IV Chat/Beef/Predictions
Whats new another DQ victory to...
08:50 PM - symetrik quoted brokenhal0 in post XI WK IV Chat/Beef/Predictions
Whats new another DQ victory to...
12-22-2022
10:03 PM - symetrik quoted brokenhal0 in post XI WK III Chat/Beef/Predictions
you totally swayed bro lmao ---...
09:30 PM - brokenhal0 quoted symetrik in post XI WK III Chat/Beef/Predictions
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09-26-2022
09:41 AM - Civil Rawr xD quoted brokenhal0 in post Sticky: 1-2 Punch Season Chat
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08-30-2022
08:22 PM - Adverse quoted brokenhal0 in post PLAYOFFS CHAT
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